Thorax seeks a new future for the changelings. There is one thing he doesn't understand however.
Every new era begins with the death of the last one.
Author's Notes: Hey guys long time no see. This is not a parody fic, nor do I have a gripe on how Chrysalis was treated in this episode as I expected most of this. I do however at times get some ideas that fit the canon episodes. Rarely so ((like my "Precious Soul of Mine" fanfic)) but it happens. This story is marked completed but I may or may not post something more to it.
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This was really good. Thank you for writing it. It's definitely more interesting than what actually happened at the end of season 6.
8188287 Anytime.
Kind of torn here, I like the idea of sacrifice for redemption but I also like Chrissy being just evil too. Cjyrasalis redemption fics are pretty common but this is a good one.
8188383 I didn't write this because it's common, and yes I know that they have been written a lot. I have to admit that Queen Chrysalis has been a sort of... inspiration for me.
I do have an idea for an evil Chrysalis fic but I haven't gotten to writing it.
EVEN the actual canon episode was better... And considering how much I hate it, for me it's saying something.
But well, +1 to my "motivational hate" folder is also usefull.
I wonder what happened to all those Changelings not present in the hive at the time in the show
Ouch... Never thought I'd feel sympathy for Chrysalis, but you pulled my heartstrings here. Just for that, have a like. You preformed a truly astounding feat here, making a complete monster of a character have some sympathetic qualities and making them believable.
8188487 Motivational hate? Uhmm what? You can go ahead and tell me why you disliked it. I don't bite.
8188545 There's an upcoming episode that deals with Thorax's brother.
8188561 I try.
8188577 I'll answer in a 24 hours or so via pm. No reason to derail the comments too much after all.
8188611 Just so you know I am aware this story isn't good.
nice alternate ending
I love it!
Chryssie as a mother.
And she is truly happy, for her goals were reached, just in a different way
Overall, this is one of the best stories I have read in a LONG time.
For, after all....
LONG LIVE THE KING.
8188577
Which one?
8188433 well it was a good story
8189084 Check out my others if you liked it so much.
8188940 http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/To_Change_a_Changeling
8188719 Life continues, and so must Thorax.
8188709 Thanks.
8189276 ik I googled it lol
Damn
full of cliches, and honestly boring
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I appreciate your honesty but I wasn't seeking to break any limits with this fic. Truth be told I've been slacking out on my writing and this was made just so I can sustain myself.
So... thanks I guess.
Well done.
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Appreciated but I'm sure I could do better.
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You're welcome.
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A long overdue answer...
You see, I'm not a fan of the 6th season finale (to put it extremely lightly). As far as I am concerned, Chrysalis's rejection of the Starlight's offer may be the one and only saving point of the whole deal (even if it's followed by that extremely humiliating and pathetic "escape") .
So what does your story do from my perspective? You take every point that I already hate and make it an order of magnitude worse (imao, again).
I hate the premise of your story, your reinterpretation of the characters and their thoughts/motivation, some of the characters themselves, most of their acts(if not all of them) and especially the resolution of the story.
Quite obviously, afaiac, no amount of writing skill would make a difference here.
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Now, to the 'motivational' part. While I do try writing myself (even if it's still of a poor/mediocre quality) an actual writing process is kind of a chore to me, as I mentioned earlier. It's not a writers block exactly (I know where my plot would go like 200-500k words in advance, depending on details, even if it does shift and change with the flow of the story), but if I'm spending a whole 14+ hours to write 1.5-2k words, I'm calling it a good progress. It doesn't help, that I'm also lazy and easily distracted by other things.
So, some of the strong emotions do help me to focus on the writing. Negative emotions are more useful in this regard, because when I'm more happy/content it often just makes me even more lazy and less likely to do anything productive. (There are a few minor exceptions, like RP games preparations, but it's the general rule). Hate, in particular I find the most useful. Even if I may lose some time to 'cool off', it generally makes me more motivated, able to better concentrate on the task and a few times more productive in general.
That's all there is to it.
GLHF!
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So in the end its all personal to you and there's nothing I can do about it.
Honestly I picked Chrysalis as my favorite character seeing as she could be anything I like with enough effort. Of course you need to be open to such different interpretations to enjoy them and by what I read about your approach to this... You aren't.
Like it wouldn't matter if I was the best writer in the world you still wouldn't like this.
I can't help you there. I can tell you that your approach is wrong and that you're going to have a bad time enjoying things if you are fundamentally against them but if you feel like this doesn't overtake you and as you say you have "motivation" due to it then sure.
If this motivates you BTW you're going to be motivated even more when you hear that the alternative here could have been Chrysalis committing suicide due to having the very meaning of her life destroyed.
Again on Chrysalis and the changelings they lack personality of any kind (especially Chrysalis) which grants me some freedom but also the chance to make her something you hate.
Quite frankly I am not bothered by you not liking the premise. As I said in the author's notes this fic was written for a specific reason and wasn't aiming at being a fic that is "good". On that note I do not write much. Besides life and being lazy my pc is broken right now. I'm also in a similar case of having ideas that could fit three books.
Anyway writing-wise is there any feedback you could offer?
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A proper answer on my part would be long even just addressing the points you mentioned (and I fell obliged to do so), so it's unlikely that I'm going to write it today. Later this week maybe. I'll write a note this time to remember.
As for potential feedback - is there something in particular that interests you?
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Well for starters how do you feel Chrysalis is as a character. And what can I do to improve my writing.
That was extremely awkward.
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How so?
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Pretty much the whole story is "Chrysalis is a badass, hardcore leader", then in the end she has a vision and surrenders to Thorax with her dying voice.
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And that's bad because?
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What was the story again? Badass Chrysalis dies a little bitch because she saw god at the last moment ?
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So what?