discussions about changeling anatomy,ovipositor fellatio,cunnilingus,anatomically correct equine genitalia (for Shining),unusual genitals [ovipositor (penis-like egg-laying tube) and glowing vulva for Chrysalis],penis/ovipositor contact,horn fellatio,magic ovipositor stimulation,lots of discussion of Changeling reproduction,painless cervical penetration,external oviposition (egg laying) including unusual/glowing 'cum',vaginal sex– and tons of cuddling.

You sold me on the tons of cuddling part.

That is a long list of kinks... Where do I sign up?!

The second half isn't bad. From the fourth chapter on, it gets pretty interesting. Not exactly sex you can get lost in since the activity is interrupted multiple times for exposition, but it does have some erotic tones, is decently described, and a nice moment between the two characters.

The first half, however, is kind lacking. The fact that the story was originally created as a picture series comes through, although I would have guessed comic. There is practically no descriptive details. A minimal amount of information on character and location, then a large amount of dialogue. It ends up coming across as though we are supposed to somehow see what is happening and reading the dialogue. It could definitely benefit from some fleshing out.

Welcome back!
And what a welcome it is...

Interesting read, but I really wished that Shining gets an ovaposation up his plot. Still a nice read.

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Cuddling!? Someone call the police on this disgusting animal.

ovipositor fellatio
That bothers me, but I will give this a read anyway, here's to hoping I'll be pleasantly surprised.

Huh... i have a similar story Oo Also alternative take on the Canterlot one...
Guess i have to upload it here some day! [or at least link it :p]

To be fair: how couldn't you see Chrysi being superior? Shape-Shifter! Queen! Sassy and has aher own army for pony sake!!
Cadance competing against that one? HA....... not even in one of Luna's dreams..... not by a long shot :3

8714441 Cuddles are always nice.

8714479 Glad you liked that scene at least. Thanks for giving it a chance!

8715445 Just press the hyperlink for the first chapter!

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Yeah, I started with what was basically a rough storyline written in bad English that I had to sort through to make this. I had no visual reference (the pics were based off the story, which in turn was based off the storyline, not the other way around) so actually visualizing things, as well as depicting them while sticking to the script, was harder than expected. I'll probably update it at least slightly now that I have the pictures as a visual reference.

8715815 Thanks!

8716298 Maybe next time, but probably not.

8716514 I know, right?

8716603 She's not evil, just very blunt.

8717183 I'd be interested in reading that.

8718110 Care to specify some, despite the ones that have already been pointed out?

8718111 I was writing based on a basic outline of the story, most dialogue included. I didn't want to deviate from the commissioner's original vision too much.

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Why is there a "Death" tag on this story? Did I miss a character dying in the story?

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its for the changelings that died upon hitting the ground

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Wow good story.

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8719525 Care to specify what exactly is wrong with the pacing or editing? Can you give examples to prove your point and so I can fix them?

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8722656 Thanks, glad you liked it!

8727555 Well, I was on a word and time limit, so some things were cut down to make room for the sex scenes...as well as the huge amount of dialogue that was included in the original.

8727576 Well, sorry to hear that. There are tags included in the description that outline all kinks/contents, however.

8731321 This story was focused more on Shining and Chryssie's relationship more than the backstory of Chryssie and the Changeling race. Not a bad suggestion, just not what I was commissioned for.

8731338 Again, Chryssie's and her mother's past weren't the focus of this story. Basically, Chryssie was always a mare who just wanted to live the life of a common changeling, but was forced into rulership by birthright. She made a terrible leader for the short while since her mother died, leading to her kind almost starving to death, as well as not laying eggs to further develop her colony given the lack of love to develop and feed the eggs. She invaded to try to steal the love her and her kin so desperately needed, and obviously failed spectacularly. Now, with her Changelings taken care of diplomatically by Equestria, maybe Chryssie can focus on expanding her hive's numbers, as well as actually finding happiness as Shining Armor's marefriend.

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I quote, from earlier in the chapter:

"That’s because I am the Princess of Love, dear." Princess Cadence said as she suddenly grabbed Chrysalis with her front hooves and hugged her, Chrysalis feeling the love coming off of her strongly and absorbing some of it. "If somepony can learn to forgive a pony's misdeeds and learn to forget their wrongs, like I have, sometimes that love can turn your worst enemy into a strong ally if you're doing it right."

She forgave her, so vindictive actions would be completely out of place.

This was alright. Things go a bit too well for the changeling integration I think, but alright. And Chryssi a a touch too ashamed of her own appearance (a common enough trope though, just one I'm not a huge fan of. It does lead to some sweet scenes in various stories from time to time though, so I don't outright dislike it).

Hmm. Good story but I would also like to read about Shining riding her ovipositor. I mean, when you love someone you give yourself completely to them. And if your girl has penis - well...

Good story, Loved anatomically correct ones, my cup of tea

Also Hi Vavacung!

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Cuddles are best!