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LegionofPony


I write commissions and sometimes write stuff I come up with too. Nuff said.

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Comment posted by LegionofPony deleted Jul 10th, 2015

Added the next two chapters, as I had them nearly done upon publication and merely wanted to polish them more before submission. This should satisfy most of you all that this is most assuredly a clopfic. :raritywink:

Oh hue hue...
Very smexual...
Lipping smacking goodness and all hehe..
Sure is pleasant to read an actually well written story with a strong inclination towards clop ha-ha.
Looking forward to more :)

6192130 Thank you, glad you liked it! My other two stories are written in the same manner if you'd like to read more like this.

Niiiiiiice! Troubleshoes isn't so unlucky, eh?

6192887 Heh, or is he? He's trapped in a room with a very horny mare who has stamina!

Given who's involved here, there's no way that condom is going to succeed in its sworn duty. :rainbowlaugh:

and most Earth-Ponies having an opposition through outright abhorrence of magic being mixed with nature, the prior two were the only real option for most.

Wut? :applejackunsure:

Literally everything we've seen in canon shows the exact opposite. They love using magic and other such things to determine natural things, such as time, weather, seasons, etc. Heck, they have an enormous fear of the Everfree Forest because it's completely natural. You'll remember that, when telling the reasons why the place was so feared, the first things they mentioned was how the weather, plants, feeding of animals, etc., all were uncontrolled.

The thing mentioned above makes absolutely no sense. This is really why I wish stories like this wouldn't use things like heat or other such ridiculous things as an excuse, because they never make sense. Just have Applejack want to date him because, surprise, she is interested in him and wants to try. Using some all controlling thing like "heat" just makes it overly complicated and makes it harder to suspend disbelief.

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Literally everything we've seen in canon shows the exact opposite. They love using magic and other such things to determine natural things, such as time, weather, seasons, etc.

Weather is actually changed physically and naturally by Pegusi in Ponyville, and the seasons by all races - but strictly NOT by magic. Did you not watch Winter Wrap-up (S1E11)? From that episode, and I quote:


Spike:"Don't they (Earth Ponies) use magic like they do in Canterlot (to change the seasons)?


Twilight: " No Spike, Ponyville was started by Earth Ponies, so for hundreds of years they've never used magic to clean up winter. It's traditional."


And from later in the episode...


Applejack: (angrily) "Nuts Twilight, you used magic! On MAH FARM! That's not how we do things 'round here Twilight!"


end quoting.


So, from this episode, I saw not one single unicorn (except Twilight) using magic to Wrap-up Winter, a NATURAL event. So, one could expand that Earth Pony view to other NATURAL things, including heat cycles and breeding, the same way.

Heck, they have an enormous fear of the Everfree Forest because it's completely natural. You'll remember that, when telling the reasons why the place was so feared, the first things they mentioned was how the weather, plants, feeding of animals, etc., all were uncontrolled.

Actually, they fear the Everfree Forest because it's UN-NATURAL and wild, uncontrollable and totally unpredictable - not to mention filled with LITERAL MONSTERS.

The thing mentioned above (and most Earth-Ponies having an opposition through outright abhorrence of magic being mixed with nature, the prior two were the only real option for most.) makes absolutely no sense. This is really why I wish stories like this wouldn't use things like heat or other such ridiculous things as an excuse, because they never make sense.

As explained above, it makes total sense when put into context with a canon viewpoint of Earth Ponies, and expansions made thereof.

Just have Applejack want to date him because, surprise, she is interested in him and wants to try. Using some all controlling thing like "heat" just makes it overly complicated and makes it harder to suspend disbelief.

It's a story about talking, pastel-colored anthropomorphic horses fucking. I think we're well past 'suspension of disbelief' upon entering the website.


Thank you, and have a nice day.

6195138 Hmm? They use magic to control the weather. It's just that Ponyville is racist and doesn't allow unicorn magic.

:rainbowlaugh:

"Ah horseapples..." Applejack cursed, looking back to see Trouble's whitewashed cock with only half the condom on it

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6197273 I specifically stated that earth ponies don't like magic, and he said they did. In my opinion and my story, and canon for that matter, they don't. Never said that none of the other ponies outside of Ponyville used magic on the weather. Nuff said.

6197459 Don't take me seriously; tongue firmly in cheek here. :twilightsmile:

"Ya'll said ya was wearin' a condom."

"Ah was wearin' mah armor!"

6198657 Well, he technically was wearing a condom...

Also, reference went neeeeeerm over my head.

6197347 Well, maybe. ponies can only get pregnant when they go into heat, at least in my view of the universe - and as far as we know, AJ's not.

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I kinda lost now. I mean isn't the reason why applejack put the condom in the first place? Yes, safety first but the ending seeing applejack look kinda freak out realizing the condom went pop, implying that possibility she gets pregnant. Heck, ain't troubleshoe's Dick went all the way to her womb?

6200338 Yes, but she never explicitly said she was in heat and wasn't showing any signs, outside of being really horny. Whether or not she actually is is up to debate til next chapter though. :raritywink:

And yes, he was in her womb.

The hell? Why does every time this fic updates, I don't get a notice on my Library saying it did?

So if Applejack wanted to be bred again when she KNOWS she's in heat...what does that mean?

"Ah might 'ave messed up somethin' awful... Ah better double-check!" :ajsmug:

6206473 I... don't know. Try Watching me and adding it to Tracking. That should cover all bases, as I blog when I post a new chapter.

6206644 ...or maybe she has other intentions now that she already may be pregnant.

It'd be just his luck if Applejack ended up having triplets.

6207670 Ha. Except ponies/horses can't have triplets in the real world, at least not successfully. Of course this IS a fantasy world, so meh.

Now I'm picturing Trouble moving to live on the farm with the Apples, bucking a tree... and getting pears to fall out of it. :pinkiecrazy:

6217104 Ha, yeah. That'd be more like a Pinkie kinda thing though. :pinkiehappy:

THANK YOU ALL FOR 1k VIEWS!

with Fluttershy having insisted against the use of rice

I never expected Fluttershy to be rice-ist*... :twilightangry2: :rainbowlaugh:

The miss-aimed kiss was particularly cute; I can just picture AJ looking up at him slightly cross-eyed. :twilightsmile:



*Rice is actually harmless delicious to birds. :yay:

6252393 Maybe Flutters believes the myth about rice and birdies and doesn't want birdies to go pop. :fluttershyouch:

Ponies are really superstitious after all.

Clyde is just one big doubter, ain't he?

6266681 Well, just look at his life thus far. Wouldn't anypony be?

Never though I see the day Applejack getting laid.

Why isn't this a group thing now?!!?

Don't Earth Ponies have incredible strength and endurance?

6487135 Well, with a skilled stallion and such a long time without, it's unsurprising she couldn't hold out long.

6487116 Because, presumably, they're all alone in the house.

6487146 I mean in the Groups club.

She'll have to inform her friends about this.

I like it so far and can't wait to see more.

I love ithis chapter it had me cracking up ,and they where so sweet and cute togather.

That was a sweet and at theend spicy read. I loved it.

OMG that was so a awesome read this just keeps getting better.

OMG that was another sweet and spicy read.

6537165 Glad you're liking it so far, and thanks for the comments!

Front page says it updated. Where is the update?

Did you accidentally publish something early?

6568320 being fixed, and now released.

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