Rewritten with permission from Probable Sarcasm, who confirmed to me that he will no longer continue writing stories. This is an unofficial spin-off rewrite of the fanfiction of the fanfiction, please support the official story's release.
Dusk Shine was born a mare.
Actually, this is a lot more complicated than it was before so let me be careful with my wording here.
Dusk Shine was born a mare; one of the rare, non-royal blooded alicorns that doesn't go out and completely expresses herself like a normal pony would.
This unofficial, rewrite of the spin-off follows the brilliantly smart-mouthed Twilight Sparkle: an antisocial, awkward, non-royal alicorn, unromantic bookworm, and (unbeknownst to her,) a ten on a scale hottie.
All Twilight Sparkle wanted to do was read, relax, and prepare for the never ending apocalypse as the never ending night that Night-Terror Knight will bring.
Much like any character you'd enjoy in King of Thrones, Twilight Sparkle's wishes are killed off when she is forced to leave her home in Canterlot because Prince Solaris sold her home in a game of Texas Hold-Em. Now she must live in a smaller town, named Ponyville, to watch over the Summer Sun Celebration and to make friends.
Unfortunately for her, each of the stallions she was instructed to be acquainted (and everyone else) with ends up falling head over hooves for the new librarian in town with the Canterlis accent.
Is this some sick joke or is Twilight Sparkle really supposed to make friends when everyone in Ponyville keeps fighting for her favor?
(Now with 100% less clop scenes!)
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Editors and Proofreaders
Why did Probable Sarcasm decide to stop writing stories?
Ooof, big shoes to fill when considering the story you're matching up against. Good luck!
Ok i need to put this out there THANK YOU! I have been waiting for this story. Not that I have anything against the dusk shine one but come on haven't we all seen that set up before, literally over and over again especially those into anime?
Anyway onto the good/bad and concerning for this set-up. I love the dialog between twilight and bard it's hilarious. Now Solaris I get the comedic value and it's hilarious and all but a ruler with gambling problem is probably a bad thing, still hilarious he lost twilight's house irresponsible as it is. Most of the mane have been portrayed as i'd expect them. I especially like how you've portrayed aj so far, he just seems like a proper farmer. Not an over the top redneck or hillbilly. Elusive is some what concerning as he wasn't really acting as rarity would say a "gentlecolt" and instead seemed to act more like I have no other way to put this but he seemed to go after twilight for nothing than her position and title. Now his approach didn't come off as "blueblood" but he definitely didn't seem to care what twilight thought at the moment. I guess i'd expect a stallion rarity would act much more like a gentleman and not push his approach right away. That's my interpretation anyway. Now onto butterscotch I love that him and barb got their genders confused definitely hilarious. I'll admit I was kinda hopping for something more interesting here like giving him the voice of flutterguy. Now onto Night terror I'm mixed on this as in the original show nmm had no idea who twilight was and thus couldn't harbor the specific i'll will you showed with Night terror. However I do very much like the kidnapping of barb, and apple buck gives the others a much bigger reason to stop him than "Oh let's follow this random mare we just met into the woods." What was concerning was the ridiculous emphasis on the pets. I'm sorry as much as I love my dogs and treat them like family it still doesn't equate to the same love I put into my family. Not saying they shouldn't want to run into the forest after them, I certainly would. It's just the NT spoke was like he was taking their actual family. And you know not pets... Of course I realize apple buck and barb fall into the direct family category but the bird cat and alligator not so much. This is just my thoughts on it but i would have had him take sweetie bell and scootaloo (whatever their gender swapped names happen to be) that would have been more than enough justification for them to chase NT down. You could have just left out the pets.
And Tiny solaris in a bottle... HA!
please keep this one going,
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I will write about it in a blog tomorrow, it's mostly because he lost interest in MLP.
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Haha, thanks.
I will take your words into consideration.
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Whether or not this flops, I'm doing it out of love for the original source material and respect for the original author - and the continuation author - and the spin-off author
ok dont get me wrong i love this story and its hilarious but i can't help but picture Barbra with an Australian accent and twilights got a English accent and its cracking me up
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ProbableSarcasm wrote them both with such an accent so I did too, I thought it was hilarious.
"Mate"
"Mate"
"Crikey!"
"Blimey!"
Yak yak yak
i read twilight line in Sophie voice form Leverage,
and i do hope twilight get it on with Prince Artemis slowly
7742888 I can see that as well,
7740584 now that I read this I can see it too
Omg that was great!
On the subject of Twilight and Barbra's Accent, it's British.
There's nothing else to say on that matter.
W8 a sec holy fck this is a awesome story what. It's been a while since I enjoyed reading a story like this. 10/10 funny as fuck with that friend zone line Lmao
This story is absolutely astonishing ya bloody wanker. My god it's perfect
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You people spoil me.
“The sixth Element, the hidden Element that only comes together when all the others are connected!” Twilight Sparkle allowed her Element pieces to circle around her. “The Element of… well… I don’t know… erm… friendship? Yeah, let’s roll with that!”
Note to self: don't eat when reading something funny 
“Magic,” Deadpanned Bubble Berry. “You’re not about to friendzone me.”
“Or me,” Rainbow Blitz crossed his forelegs across his chest.
Silently, the other stallions agreed.
I could have died when I read that lol
This is awesome! I love it. Thank you for sharing and I can't wait to read more
is it me or does the prince want twilight to get knock up or at least be with someone or many someone
You Rock! Thank you for the update!
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Let's put in this way: Twilight Sparkle has always neglected being a social butterfly for her academic work and especially being a student of Solaris.
Solaris took notice of this and really wants Twilight Sparkle to experience all there is in life much like the Element (Witch) of Magic before Twilight's time before it's too late for her. It's like if a father really cared about his daughter having a social life.
7755802 I can see that, I do hope in the end of thing twilight and Artemis get together, thought if so there going to be a lot of work that has to happen for the two of them to get over what happen.....
great story
7750266 we sorry but all of you are going to be in the friendzone for next few season,
Ssssooooo since Dusk Knocked Luna up, does that mean Artemis will...
you know when he claims that cherry
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Only one way to find out ;)
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*evil laugh*
absolutely amazing chapter
I don't know you could use the lightsaber to cut their heads off that might end it.
i think it be funny if twilight was gay in this story, but yet to figure that out.....
good story keep it up
are you still alive or what?
7906210 guess the story is in a coma, like so many other good story on this site
That letter from Solaris was beautiful.
Alicorn Twilight.......
*throws my computer out the window.*
Shouldn't it be the royal pony brothers?
Very interesting. I look forward to continuing your work.