As a bad date with Flash Sentry goes wrong with Twilight. Shining Armor got Captured by the Dragon Kingdom of Draspaina. In exchange for his freedom, one of the Princesses must be a bride for the young dragon ruler. Twilight Volunteers, for her brothers freedom. Will Twilight feel like a slave to the Dragon ruler or will she fall for him?
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This story seems like it can have potential. I would like to read more so I can truly know what you are planning. From what I read though,this is is good story,with great grammar, and descriptions.
MORE !
Nice idea but you should go back and fix some of the grammar and spelling. I'm liking but I won't fav until I see some better writing.
Okay, this story looks really good. But the mistakes keep nagging at me. Once I get to a computer I'll point them out.
Great chapter. It seems like Draco starts as a good guy from the start. A little original there. I wonder what else this story will include. Good luck with future chapters.
Ok,so a couple of spelling,no,scratch that,word errors here and there,but good so far!Seriously,when Celestial and Twilight were saying goodbye,I had to re-read their dialog about 6 times before understanding what you meant to write...
It feels like you're telling more than showing. Try using more imagery while writing, it'll help out in the long run and you forgot to put a break between Twilight and Draco's parts.
EDIT: it's signed not sighed. Startled is what i think you meant, and you could use some more descriptions of the mane six. This is a good story but it's held back by the bad grammar, try going on a temporary hiatus and reading around, it's a good way to pick up new skills.
I really likes this story it is interesting. :)
Nice chapter. I think you did a great job. Best of luck with the next chapter.
I like
more please !!!!
Ah you made me sad :( but it was awesome :)
Its a little fast paced and there are misspellings here and there but not a bad read.
Oh. Sweet. So Sombra is back. I wonder though, will he try to form an alliance then with the dragons against Equestria. That would be interesting to see. Good luck with writing the next chapter. I'm glad this story updated.
Ohhh this just got interesting!
Okay. The romance is now a bi rushed. I felt it should have been prolonged for a few chapters. Oh well. Personal preference. Good luck with the next chapter. I can't wait to read it.
It good
please give us more
Thanks for the update. I do hope your brain decides to work so we can see what happens next. Good luck. Great chapter.
I'm a sucker for Beauty and the Beast tropes, but the spelling and grammatical errors are too distracting. Don't be discouraged, but please seek out a beta.
Wait...were you conversing with P Pie? Nevermind.
Please update soon.
First off why does this not have more up votes/views?
Second I really the story so far and the fact that Sombra is in it, you sir get an up vote and a fave.
Third when can we expect an update, I don't mean to rush you or anything please take you time with this, but it has been some mouths since you last one and it would be nice to know where you stand.
Wow. Nice rewrite of Maria, from Hunchback of Notredame. Very revealing chapter. Thanks for the long awaited update.
Oh buck... Well, that's explains a lot.
I didn't see that coming...
Night
Wow. Interesting story. I think you did a great job with this chapter. Thanks for the update.
I didn't read it yet, but from what people are saying about it, I can say it's a great story
I'll put it in my 'Read It Later'. I wish you good luck!
-Henry101
4626455 your name and picture match up so freaking perfectly
Next chapter it's off to Canterlot. Please have Draco meet Twilight's parents.
I love your story. It's Awesome!
Oh please, pretty please tell me what date you'll release the next chapter. Is it soon?
bravo bravo good work pal cant wait for the next chapter so exited
I know I may not be the first to say it but I really like your story and I hope you have an update soon.
I'm now nicknaming him "Dracy"
Put up with it 
BOD was so. Damn. CUTE! I love anything Beauty and the Beast related XD
And I don't want to sound horrible or anything but... Maybe try to make the story flow a little more. It's great, don't get me wrong, it's an adorable story, or from the bit that I've read, but it seems too... Direct. Like this bit;
This bit doesn't, "flow" right. You need to add a little more description to it. Describe where they were, and Fluttershy could, "sound" a little less... Direct. Does that make sense? Am I explaining it okay, because I can be stypid sometimes
But seriously, good chapter, 100% Potato approved.
7800847 I'm trying my best and it's just I'm having a hard time now. Cause you know, Canon episodes are making it less and less to continue.
This is very good. You still need to work on your spelling and grammar, but otherwise, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
When can we expect the next chapter?
When can you add an alternate universe tag? As well as give this story a new chapter?
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Just add an "Alternate Universe" tag and add an Author's note in the first chapter, stating that everything in the story is not canon to the show. Easy fix.
I hate it when good stories die.
9402158 Me too.
Guys im sorry, im having a hard time, i ddo want tk continue but its a big brain block plus life is getting in my way
im sorry again, i dont want to cancel this story.
So, I’ve been curious about something.
Would you be interested in giving this story a reworking?
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What do you mean?