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Celestia has had many friends in her lifetime, with just as many falling outs and arguments as one would suspect to occur in those bonds that simply never stay. Most of the time, she parts ways peacefully with those she has argued with. Other times, she must view the aged ponies she loved on their deathbed and the immortal goddess must offer her farewell.

This is not one of those times.


Set before the events of the show.
Proofread by NorrisThePony
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Well... that was depressing.

This is not complete.

Oh, I know it's flagged 'complete', but there's a difference between 'leaves tantalizing mysteries for the readers to ponder' and 'does not actually finish the story'. Silent Flight supposedly murdered a filly, leaving the incredibly traceable murder weapon behind but not the body? Celestia completely ignores anything that Silent Flight might have to say at the moment of execution? I don't feel sorry for Celestia having to kill someone she thought was a friend; I'm wondering why she's killing a pony who's been framed for murder, and vaguely suspecting she did the deed herself!

7608476 My friend later pointed this out after this was published. :facehoof: I wanted to write a story showcasing Celestia making a hard choice as a ruler, but still a choice that had to be made. I tried to make Sy sound blubbering or nervous since she was facing her own death. I'll probably be adding a second chapter when I get the chance since I have more demanding projects at the moment. Thanks for the feedback though, because it really did help. :twilightsmile:

Wow. That's a kick in the feels. Truly, heavy rests the head that bears the crown.

Celestia took at least a dozen boxes in her magic easily

Celestia took at dozen boxes in her magic easily and trotted over to one of the many offices in the regal building; this one would be occupied by her she would occupy this one for the next few hours.

and the one she had helped build - present day Equestria.

Extra space between "and" and "the." Delete it.

Also, long time no see. How are you?

7692634 Fine, though slacking a bit in the homework department.

Fabulous as in gay or asexual? I pegged you as a butch.

This was a sad, but great story. A bit deep, and I can say I enjoyed it.

I've been wanting to follow you for quite some time, after all, all the stories you've written look interesting. But I needed to see if your stories were as good as their descriptions, and they are. Here's a follow. :twilightsmile:

There, lying in front of her was a hoofwritten confession by the guard who had interviewed his former captain and behind that was a timeline of what was said actually happened, adapted from Silent's own words

Is that implying that the guard framed Silent Night and got caught later?

8074694 No it's being used to mean 'taken' or 'constructed from'. Not everything she said would have been usable information - things like denials or apologies. Hope that helps.

Boy, ain't that a punch to the feels.

Twist ending: Silent actually didnt kill the filly, she sent her away from her cold and abusive family, right after she saved her from an assassin sent by a rival noble.

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Except that didn't happen at all.

Powerful and insightful piece well written.

I wish I wasn't on mobile as I type this. I did not like this story. It felt like reading a description; straight faced, monotone, and emotionless. I want to like this, but I can't. A comment on the first chapter points out things about it that weigh my opinion. It really doesn't sound like Silent would commit that crime. The meeting between the two is also sterile; like you're telling us they're friends, when they don't seem to act like it.

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I wish I wasn't on mobile as I type this. I did not like this story. It felt like reading a description; straight faced, monotone, and emotionless.

This is a story about a broken friendship being viewed by someone (Celestia) who puts an amazing amount of effort from distancing herself from this whole situation, is looking back on the event, and tries to keep up a facade. It is going to come across as short, somber, and a punch.

I want to like this, but I can't.

And you don't have to like the story if you don't want to. I wasn't aware of any obligation to like my stories.

A comment on the first chapter points out things about it that weigh my opinion.

The only comment I can think of was back when this was a one chapter story, and I should have realized it needed some more to it.

It really doesn't sound like Silent would commit that crime.

That's... kind of the point? This has been said of numerous criminals over the years. No one thinks they're going to do it, they seemed so normal, so nice... etc. This doesn't change the fact that Silent did commit this murder, and that she's bawling and pleading as she's about to be executed because she is going to die and she is scared. Nowhere are there any real hints or proclamations of innocence.

The meeting between the two is also sterile; like you're telling us they're friends, when they don't seem to act like it.

The story is tainted by Celestia's perspective on things, so the sterile, somber feeling was intentional. This is meant to come across as a cold piece.

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