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Jetstream S


Hey guys! I'm Jetstream, and only run on pure JP-7. What is JP-7 you ask? Ask Google. Google will know.

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Solutions to war, famine, disease and societal collapse are not easily happened upon. For Celestia and Luna, the solution was a mystery for eons, until their top six battle mages forged a plan from their very essence. To unite their absolute individual powers into one worthy host. One who could put an end to the horrors plaguing the budding nation of Equestria.

Only one pony was ever worthy. His deeds and heroism ultimately culled evil and hatred from Equestria and allowed peace to reign. After this achievement, the power vanished of its own accord upon the natural death of its wielder.

However, it seems that something in the shadows has provoked the lost power's return in the form of a new carrier, and she's going to find out her true destiny through a series of literal trials by fire.

(Updated on 3/1/2019, I'm ashamed that its been almost 5 years since my last chapter update...)

This is my take on the origin of "Super Rainbow Dash." Shout out to the creator of Super Rainbow Dash, Super Klonoa. My apologies for not finding out who you were sooner!

Thanks to unexpectedly high ratings, this story has been moved from an experimental work to a full production. Edited by the Awesome Amazing Regular... uh.. "Solid" SolidFire.

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 363 )

Hmmm Interesting. Continue.

This shows a lot of potential. Please continue your updates.

Seems... Off. Somehow.

I'll give it a shot and track for now.

Let's see what you got.

~Skeeter The Lurker

ill follow and see where this goes, some advice: pick a PoV to write from, you seem to favor third person, so why not take Dash out of the equation for writing the story? why not make it someone like Twilight, Luna, or Celestia, or even RD's Father, maybe even a wonderbolt, somebody RD would be close to in order to tell the story as she is the MC ya know?

2841248Yea I thought of that and I'll most likely be doing it :twilightblush:. This is still quite experimental, and if all goes well I'm gonna be shelling this story out in full swing soon. :raritywink:

This seems interesting. Will follow, don't let me down.

this is really good :rainbowdetermined2:
gonna keep an eye on this one for sure

Hmm……please keep going:pinkiehappy:

:duck: Where is this getting at? I like. Lol, seriously, this story is amazing! I will actually like your story! :twilightsmile: You have received a thumbs up!

This is very interesting and I can't wait for more. However I think that the concept of Rainbow writing the story it's unnecessary and pointless as it holds the story from being better. But still a great story and concept nonetheless.

I like this fic, but it being written by Dash seems pretty pointless :ajbemused: it would be better if you wrote it in 3rd person

I have to agree with the previous commenters. The perspective changes kills this story. It should either be full 1st POV or full third person. Mixing both just makes everything jarring and feel off.

You would likely get more readers if you pick one as Rainbow the weapon/superhero is a popular genre.

That said, I won't be following this story. Not because it's bad, I just don't care for the Mane Six getting superpowers/becoming superheroes stories.

Simply not my cup of tea.

I have to say, this story is really well-written and I'm looking forward to the next Chapters.

At this point, I can't actually point any serious flaws of this story. Maybe it's a little rushed? I think that scene with RD transformation and Spitfire was a bit too quick and was quite confusing.

2842395Well I'm sorry to hear that... Thanks for the read though! :twilightsmile:

And like I said, the part about Rainbow writing the story was the experimental side I was referring to in the description. And I agree, it isn't needed. :facehoof:

2842424 I agree. After looking back, (I wrote this about three months ago) I see that it was indeed rushed. :facehoof:. I'm a bit more experienced now and I'll be revising heavily. If the public wants more, who am I to not deliver? :raritywink:

2842718 Thanks! The story shall continue! I have an idea that will surely rock the boat... :rainbowdetermined2: :yay:

2842742 Rock the Boat? Titanic warniiiing....

2842748 Let's just hope Celestia's Throne Room can handle more than the force of a giant iceberg... :rainbowderp:

This has a lot of promise. Tracking and following this story for sure. Personally, I didn't see anything wrong with the POV changes.

2842784 Lets hope winter wrap up starts early this year...

A few things... it pains me with every second as I type this.

I am a hardcore Dash fan, and may or may not be certifiably insane. (Haven't been tested, so I could be) That said:

OHMYGODTHISISSOAWESOMEILOVEITPLEASEWRITEMOREOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG SO AWESOME! :rainbowkiss:

yep. that disclaimer was a good idea.


Now that I have that mostly out of my system, to the coherent comment. This whole ordeal has Dash mostly in character, and the superpowers are cool as heck. Though as to the 'Prismatic Pegasus' thing, Dash's father had a rainbow mane in 'Games Ponies Play' so you may want to address that. Other than that though (fanboyism aside) this is a great story, and the present-tense interludes are refreshing from my usual fiction. Keep it up! :pinkiehappy:


EDIT: Reading other comments, people don't seem to like present-Dash... not sure how I feel being the first to comment positively about her. Whatever, I can say what I want.

2851154 Don't worry, Her father will be addressed later :raritywink:. And I'm really glad you liked it. My collaborator and I are working on the next chapter as I type this, and the next chapter will delve deep into the history behind Dash's power... :ajsmug:

2851285

Can't wait!

I'd write something more, but I gave a triple comment last time.

Comment posted by Jetstream S deleted Jul 11th, 2013

Darnit, as if I'm not tracking way too many stories already! Most of which haven't updated in forever, and I keep them around anyway!

OK. I'm hooked. Tracking and eagerly awaiting updates.:rainbowdetermined2:

2870583 Oh don't worry... It gets better... :ajsmug:

Whoever is going from like to dislike and back again.. make up your mind. :ajbemused:

Comment posted by Uzume Tennouboshi deleted Jul 18th, 2013
Comment posted by Jetstream S deleted Jul 18th, 2013
Comment posted by Uzume Tennouboshi deleted Jul 18th, 2013

Interesting this is... Favorite i must:trollestia:

HOLY FUDGE! RAINBOW FREAKING DASH TURNED SUPER! UPDATE SOON, MUST HAVE MOAR! AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH

You have just earned yourself, a like, favorite, and a potato my good man

Looking forward to updatez!

~sugarush

2917243 Dude I LOVE potatoes :yay:.. THANK YOU. Next chapter is almost done... Gonna be a helluva ride.

2918117 BOOYA! I CAN FEEL DA POWA! DE POWA OF A MILLION POTAOES!!! THIS MOAR SHALL BE RECEIVED! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH
ぽたとえ! THAT IS POTATOE IS CHINESE, YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH

sugarush OUT!

2918375 Actually, that was Japanese. :twilightsheepish:

I LOVE THIS STORY SO FAR!!!! :raritystarry: Keep it up!

2929655 Hey thanks! Next chapter is almost here! :rainbowdetermined2:

2966601.. Only the first chapter my good reader. Next one is coming a little later than expected but will be up before the end of the week.

2966731 I was never planning to introduce Nyx into this story... But I can try.

2966774 I left that group a while back. I'm wondering why its there still as well...:applejackunsure:

Hey sorry about the false chapter update, the damn "Publish" and "Edit" buttons are right next to each other! :facehoof:

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