It seems like so long ago... but I guess in a way it was. Days tend to blur when you are immortal. Entire generations gone in a blink, towns built and rise to become cities, empires, before inevitably falling... But Listen to me ramble, I don't think you came to hear me talk about the futility of most lives. As I was saying, It seems so long ago that My mother took me in, adopted me into her family with my other siblings. We were so happy, But like all good stories, something happened, something that became the catalyst for all future events and tore my new family apart.
My name is Ethereal Horizon, and this is the story of my broken family.
Chapters (4)
This would be more surprising had it not been in the stories description... that is the only nitpick I have on this chapter
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Ah thanks for the sugestion I've always been bad at discriptions, so I'll try to edit it a bit. Thanks for the nitpick!
Well, I'm hooked. Is there a source for your cover art? It's neat.
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No but gimme a day and I'll find and link you the artist
... Hmmm... you have peaked my interest!
continue...
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Here.
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Glad I could help
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Speaking of nitpicks, you need to put quotes into separate paragraphs. It let’s the reader know who’s talking more easily.
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Again, thanks. Nitpicks like that help me write, others don't get that and just try to insult you instead of pointing out the problem.
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That’s so true. That or no one speaks up at all.
This is good so far....but tread lightly. "Royal Family" OC's can go GaryStu damn fast. FiMFiC would tear you apart and eat you alive if that happens.
I'm looking forward to more of this story, it's great but I'm sure a lot of the story's tags are going to sucker punch me in the future
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Meh, he has like one OP power, and the aspect he inhabits, but that's about it
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*evil knowing grin* yeah, all I'll say is wait until discord shows up in the present. The chapters with rotate, one being the present, the other being Ethereal telling his story. However, one goal is also to make it an unrelyable narrator as the events are from his prespective.
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*will
Also thanks for revealing your plans for the next chapters
Looks good
Yay!!
YAY, NEW THINGY
I’m finding all the good stories today...something bad is going to happen. Oh well, that’s for future me worry about.
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Glad you enjoy it!
great story hope to see more soon
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Working on it. Collage is a bitch
Will there be more of this story?
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Maybe. I was thinking on maybe handing it off to someone but idk who
Hmmmmmmm. Ok.
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Moar plz, good sir? This is too good!
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I'll try, I'm just struggling to keep up with my big story while working that the smaller stories got left in the dust. I'll try though
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Well, it's no rush, take your time for sure. Just don't give up on it, yeah? Maybe go ahead and even finish your big one first.
:O Oh my Atlanta!!! Worth the wait! This chapter is heavy with loreee and emotion. This is guuud.
Hoo boy. This chapter was far too short.........
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Glad you think so!
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Sorry bout that. I know what I want to do in later chapters, but this one I had trouble making longer without being fluff.
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Ah, don't worry about it. It had enough lore to satisfy me!
It's too short, I need moar!
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Lol then you should check out the new chapter of Awakened Lost lol
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I should yes.
The most deserving and right thing to do would be exposing everything that Celestia has done, hidden, etc to the world
When I mean everything I mean everything her lies, her relationship with them,etc
In what way?
Maybe like a recorded message, appearing/showing as an orb in every place ,city,village, everywhere at the same time.
It would play a recorded message and show a text on a screen with, everything on Celestia, exposing her
Maybe even add another screen showing live footage of Celestia revealing everything without her knowing, etc
The more proof, better
She doesn't deserve a good reputation
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Lol great minds think alike, but no, at the end of the day she is still family, and you'll see what I mean later. All I will say is nightmare, Discord's time evil, and Celestia hiding everything will all tie together in a pretty little already hinted at package
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It's doesn't matter if she is family
It makes it even worse for her and more justifiable
She is the head of a country and long-living, she should be held accountable
She still should be exposed
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Just wait, I have plans. She will be getting what's coming to her.
Welcome back glad to see the story is still alive.
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Mhm, got hit with the insperation train after almost a year of said train being out of service
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You okay?
It's alive! A few minor typos aside, you still got flow, and that's what matters in a story.
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Lol thanks, I am on my phone so alot of typo's get missed. When I get home and not at work I'll go through and touch up on it.
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Yeah, just enjoying the ebs and flows of adulting and parenting
It'll be finished this time next decade, just you wait
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Lol thanks for the vote of confidence XD
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Sorry hahaha couldnt resist. Love the story, by the way. Also, just a reminder, quality over quantity! Write stories for you, for when you want to write and are feeling creative.
Its good but im getting major mary sue vibes
whats poppin dawg whats going on