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Hmm up one and then down one. Can I please gets some comments already? Back before the proofreading the first few chapters were getting constant comments.
You need to work on your details and stop repeating so much of the same info, weed out the grammar and fix the spelling.
7167692 Oh sorry. I'll fixing that chapter right now. Just looked over it and notice a lot of simple mistakes. Don't worry the mistakes decrease as you read.
I've got to say, I'm really loving this story.
Keep up the good work!
7510660 Oh thank you. I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Alright so I finally got around to reading this. Insomnia yeah! Minus a few typos (editor needed), this is a really solid story you have going on Gryphon. It's only the first chapter but it looks promising. I particularly loved the reveal with Discord at the end, very well played and set up. I'll let you know what I think at the end of the next chapter.
Glen Gorewood
7604223 The grammar does get better as you read. This is mostly because this took a lot of planning and a lot of rewrites in certain points. In fact the first chapter was originally two chapters. Actually a lot of the first chapters(1-9) were original spread out more.
Think you mean gets
8031630 Thanks. Its fix now.
That last sentence. . . brilliant.
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That was the first line I thought up when she first step into it in the previous chapter. I feel that the ship see her much in the same way the Tardis saw Clara.