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So, um, yeah. Evil mermaids/kelpies are the new sea ponies. And Lyra's a seapony apparently, so, uh ... yeah.
kelpies. lol
People often see mermaids as beautiful sea creatures, but in legend and myth they are actually vicious creatures who feed on sailors. Interesting. I shall read this :D
AA.
Dark tag.
I don't....
I SHALL ENJOY THIS.
It's sad; people are going to downvote this just because of the 'mature' tag before they even read it. I, for one, absolutely loved this fic, and as such, I upvoted it. Keep up the good work, AA.
That was really good. Dark, gruesome, and unpleasant, but really good. I like it.
Well written, but not really my cup of tea.
Chilling. Thought perhaps the creepiest part of it was the way in which Lyra casually dismissed her relationships. That idea that anyone we know could be outright lying to us and we'd never know. Also nice to see some horror that isn't "RUH-OH I'MA GONNA GET YA *chainsaw*"
This was...
Okay.
Not bad, but not great.
And I agree with Lyra, it's just one filly.
She'll get over it.
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well that was... interesting...
good story!
Hmm...The good and the bad of this story are rather closely related. One one hand it's a rather excellent monster tale. On the other what do we have to connect with Lyra? If she had tried to resist eat the innocent filly because of possibly some moral values ingrained in her by the other ponies this becomes a lot stronger. Instead we've got a tale that while very nicely written and vivid just doesn't give us enough insight into the kelpie at its center for us to see the tragedy element. Yes a innocent died but if there was more of a struggle here from both sides we would've had something pretty special. Overall very nicely written though but not a favorite.
Ooh, a tag that says I can't read it...
Time to completely disregard it!
Marvellous. Faved.
Sequence of reactions.
Upvoted.
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I would actually say that much of the horror comes from the fact that Lyra is just purely a monster and a predator. It's pretty clearly put out there that Lyra's reasons for denying her hunger and hiding are not a desperate attempt to attain humanity (ponyanity?) but a simple survival mechanism. It's her alienness and lack of empathy that is truly horrifying and that would only be undercut by "moral conflict" and aaaangst. Let's face it, Anne Rice was never, ever scary.
Anyway, pretty solid as a first stab at horror, AA!
"and what little magic she did have was weak" <--- Missing period there.
So, now, that was something different indeed. I have to admit, I have a penchant for horror, even though I'm probably one of the jumpiest people around. There were a couple of things I liked and disliked about this fic. I'll get into the good parts, first.
I liked Lyra's characterization. She's one of those ponies where her common fandom form annoys the hell out of me, so I grasp at any chance to have something different. And different you've delivered indeed! I also like your use of mythological creatures like kelpies, along with how the story portrayed her needs. Props also for the proper amount of disconnect she has from ponies AND how much the style and wording of the story changed altogether, once she got her fill of Tootsie. You're striking a somewhat King-ish horror here and I'm quite fine and dandy with that.
However, there are also a few things I want to address that I didn't like. First of all, the description. For anyone who may be remotely versed in mythology, you're almost ruining the story already! In all seriousness, I'd probably just cut off the bit that namedrops kelpies. Minor nitpick though. I would have liked to see Tootsie's bits perhaps just a bit longer, to better emphasize how much she's getting under Lyra's spell. Lastly, there are a couple of sentences where I really felt like you were trying to quickly establish facts or just name/eventdrop a couple of things, regardless how well they might flow with the story. The worst offender of this was the part about the changelings. It had a very bad "LET'S TALK ABOUT THIS FOR A MOMENT"-feeling, that threw me out of the story.
Still, all in all, this was an enjoyable read. I like to see authors trying something outside their normal comfort zones, so kudos for that as well!
Before Relevant Heavy Metal comes...
Alcest - Écailles De Lune (Part 2)
With Translated Lyrics.
Very nice. An excellent departure from the norm.
It's not perfect, as several commenters have already pointed out, but it is still pretty good, enough to get my upvote.
I call false advertising on this one! Since Lyra is not actually a pony, this story technically doesn't involve pony cannibalism
On a more relevant note: good work as always - your mastery of literary tools kept me reading although I usually dislike horror in the pony world. Not to say that I didn't dislike it this time around, the dislike just wasn't so acute. Anyway, my "beef" with this story is that I didn't really see the point of the narrative. That is - what were You trying to say, what aspects of the human (monster?) condition were You trying to bring up here etc.? Or was it just one of those random "I was eating a tootsie roll and got this idea" kind of deals?
No like or dislike form me, since I don't really know how I feel about this one.
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Heh. Eating a tootsie roll. I see what you did there.
Anyway, it was a good story! Not perfect, but good!
Well, that was definitely unique. Not really sure what to think about it but it is refreshing to read something pretty original.
You know, I am now creeped out. I knew what was going to happen because I know the old mermaid myths. Still, I read on. And it got me. My breath was short and ragged, while my head kept screaming to just stop reading. Though I couldn't, because however you wrote it, you had my full attention. Bravo.
My reaction
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>:3
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And finally
Okay. I was expecting good. I really was. I was not expecting this - this is so perfectly creepy it's not funny. It starts so pleasantly, and only slowly does the sinisterness become apparent. I love it. Nice work, boss - very, very nice.
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Think you misunderstood my comment. I didn't need the kelpie in this story to be a tortured soul trying to deny her nature...What I did need though for this to be better was then some character to connect to. Often this is done by making the monster more human but the victim in case the filly in question if given more of a history and sense of loss would've highlighted the horror element just as well. I just didn't feel that there was enough of either. I gave the story a thumbs up but it could've been a lot better with some more length and more filling in from either of the main characters in the piece.
Ooh, something new from AbsAnon!
...
...I'm just going to go cry terrified in a corner now.
>.> hippocampi are cooler. also, I might eventually edit this after I read the fic
EDIT: Well, Siren/Kelpie... that's a unique way of making things work. :EDIT
Oh God, now I'm hungry.
Well written, a nice concept. Enjoyed the blood and murder. Not bad at all.
I read this and I don't have any comments that haven't been said already.
I won't faulty any technical execution or try to analyse the way it's been put together, mostly because you are a much better writer than I am. I will say that I didn't like the subject matter or the story at all but that's a matter of personal preference. I know I should have just turned away when after I looked up what a kelpie was (which I did just before reading this) but I was compelled to do, which is an oddly wierd way of describing the effect that somethign you've written has to draw...me...in...
Wait a minute....
Is this also a meta commentary on how you seem to draw in a lot of new fans and readers just by your name and reputation without anyone knowing exactly what they will be getting into until they are too far into your stories to escape? That's really freaky Anon and kind of scary.
I will say that I hope this is an experiment but after this and the now deleted Phoenix I wonder if you're going to keep doing Tragedy and Darkfics from now on. It reminds me of this great artist I used to follow, then she confessed to being a Neo-Nazi and now all of her artwork has to do with nazism which really really distrubs me. I know that's really off topic here and I know you're well within your rights to write and express whatever you wish, but it doesn't change the fact that if this trend continues I'll probably stop reading your new stuff.
On a side note, I hope your school exams went well.
I need to go immerse myself in something to get my mind off this *shivers*
You sick bastard, I love it.
That previous generation reference...
Oh and this is awesome
Aw... poor kid
I'm about to read this for two reasons and two reasons alone:
Mature rating
Grim dark tag
That's about it
{like my pic?}
More Fey Ponies. Oh Joy. Time to fetch the silver and the salt and the cold black iron, I reckon.
Don't normally like dark and gritty when applied to ponies. But I approve of this. Well Done.
You satisfy Pinkie... For now...
-Jorofrarie
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Is the artist in question, ThisCrispyKat?
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Yes.
why?
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No reason.
Just wondering.
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Ah OK. Well I hope whatever AA works on next is quite so... dark. But that's her choice.
I really enjoyed this story. There are many stories that are simply reiterations of those before them, and whilst this does not necessarily detract from the quality of the story, it is good to see a change from the status quo.
The story flowed quite well, and captured that sense of 'alieness' and horror about Kelpie-Lyra. However, I think that the character Tootsie could have been a little bit further developed, as this would have given us a character with whom the audience could sympathise with, hence increasing the sense of horror when Lyra kills her without hesitation.
Nonetheless, great story, keep up the good work
Very impressive, AA, love what you've done here.
I was wondering if you actually read the manga comic "Mermaid Saga" from Rumiko Takahashi (well known for Inuyasha and Ranma) and if it had an influence on your tale. If not, here is my summary: It's a compilation of romantic stories around the dark fantasy that eating the flesh of a mermaid can give you eternal life.
I love it when you write about some of the more obscure mythology. I also love it when you write about darker or tragic themes, which works well as that's what most obscure mythology is about.
I hate kids. It's all good.
Really liked the concept of this.
Picturing Lyra's karmic and ironic death:
....
....Somepony tears out and feeds her her own liver.
Now that that is off my chest, I have to say this was a pretty good story. I almost didn't notice you had posted a new one, thinking it was yet another blog post....
Lyra: Play with me!
Victim: Hell no!
Lyra: Shoo Bee Doo! Shoo Bee Doo!~
Victim: CANNONBALL!
Lyra: Om-nom-nom...
(Edit: I just actually read this aloud. I am so terribly sorry that I posted this.)
I very much enjoyed Lyra's apathetic behavior towards the ponies in general; but hers towards the small filly is simply outstanding. I am literally torn between "What a bitch." and "This is their nature."
I enjoyed this immensely. It feels like it could be an actual sub-premise of the show. The pacing seemed perfect to me and the setting was easy to imagine.
I kept expecting Celestia to appear. "I found you long ago, little selkie. I let you live because you restrained yourself but now...
" or something. Then that didn't happen, the filly was devoured, and Lyra went off home. That's a good end.