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twilightsparkle3562


I am a brony from Massachusetts with Autism who enjoys MLP, Disney and writing!

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Shining Armor has faced off against three of Equestria's greatest threats and with each time he has faced them, he has failed to defeat them. As a result, he goes into a deep depression of his actions where he meets his mentor who attempts to help him regain his confidence. However, he must attempt to prove himself when a Changeling General kidnaps Cadence and Twilight in an effort to avenge Queen Chrysalis' defeat.

*Special Thanks to Jarkes for his contributions.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 27 )

I was kind of hoping to actually get to see the nightmare, but you don't have to change that or anything.

Also, I've been on a Beast Wars binge lately, and I was thinking maybe one of the Changeling general's underlings could be based off of Waspinator...

So who's the dog a reference to?

5807838 The steeljaws from "Age of Extinction" and a little bit of the Diamond Dogs.

There should be something indicating the scene transition between Cadance and Twilight trapped in the Changelings' den and Shining Armor and Lock Down reading the ransom note. Just a simple line break should do.

5820475 Honstly, I actually don't know how to do a line break.

I must admit, as much as I've liked this story, the battle was over far too quickly, and it's not quite what I had in mind for the ideas I had contributed. Perhaps at some point I'll write my own version of this story that expands on some of the ideas I had (though one key difference would be that Lock Down wouldn't be present). That would be fine, right?

5823127 Of course, you can. I'd love to see it. Actually, looking back, I wasn't a big fan of how this chapter turned out. Perhaps maybe I could make it like Thorn vs. Azog from "Battle of Five Armies," What do you think?

...I'm surprised that I'm the only one who's commented apart from your replies to me.

5823191 I wouldn't know; I've never seen that movie. And I had kind of been hoping that as Kuwaga taunted Shining about what a failure he was, he would transform into Sombra and then Tirek to twist the knife even further.

First queen Chrysalis, then King Sombra and finally Lord Tirek, what next Grogar?

First Queen Chrysalis, then King Sombra and finally Lord Tirek, what next Grogar?

...You know, this is probably the closest thing to a collab that I've ever done on this site, since I contributed much of the basic story ideas but not any of the actual writing.

Once you've posted the final chapter, mind if I make a blog post advertising it as a collab?

5827176 Absolutely. BTW, I extended the fight scene in Chapter 5. Let me know what you think of it.

5827460 It's much better now.

So when's the final chapter going to be finished?

5841548 Yeah, but it wasn't when I made that comment.

Nice start to the story. I bet this will be awesome!:twilightsmile:

This was a really good story. I never thought of how a prince would feel not be able to protect the kingdom he helps rule. Especially Shining. There were a few spelling errors, but other than a very good read.
~LATEP

6165098 To be honest, when I initially helped conceive this idea, I had worried that some people would feel that the story reduced Twilight and Cadance to helpless damsels-in-distress, since they got captured by Kuwaga and had to be saved by Shining and Lock Down. So far I've seen no complaints about that, though. I was wondering how you felt about it.

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I honestly wish there were more princes in the show, I mean they make the stallions so scarce and it's good to see the princesses aren't always brave and than that sometimes they need to be saved.

I have wondered how Shining Armor felt being unable to really contribute during the serious villain attacks and how his younger sister, who's not military trained, was the one who saved the day everytime. After Tirek, it must hurt and no wonder he's self-loathing right now.

6810635 So what did you think of the rest of the story? Or have you not had the time to finish it yet?

I thought Lock Down would express his disdain over Twilight. Ah well.

I know this is supposed to be dark, but Twilight and Cadence being kidnapped seems pretty funny.

Now it's time for Shining to regain his confidence and his courage to save everything he cares about.

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