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Admiral Biscuit


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This story is a sequel to What Lies Beneath


An obligation-free weekend for Sea Swirl is the perfect opportunity to spend some quality time with her stallionfriend Coco Crusoe, and then take a journey across the bottom of a lake.

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Great story, I loved it! :pinkiesmile:

This is a nice little story, I really like Coco and Sea Swirl. They're great together.

I was a little confused until I realised Coco wasn't Coco Pommel.

Nice sort of ghostly feel for the bottom of the lake, how big / deep would you say it was, it really does feel like another world.

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Thank you!

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I was a little confused until I realised Coco wasn't Coco Pommel.

I clarified that in the story description. Funny, 'cause when I hear 'Coco,' I don't think of the mare. :derpytongue2:

Nice sort of ghostly feel for the bottom of the lake, how big / deep would you say it was, it really does feel like another world.

Depending on how much stuff was in the water, it really wouldn't have to be that deep. When I was doing research for Sea Swirl's Dive, I learned that in the Finger Lakes in New York state, visibility was less than 15 feet. I picture the lake being no more than fifty feet deep, and maybe a mile across, maybe a little bit more. I honestly don't know how long it would take to walk that underwater.

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I picture the lake being no more than fifty feet deep, and maybe a mile across, maybe a little bit more. I honestly don't know how long it would take to walk that underwater.

The better part of a day, obviously. :moustache:

A fun little story, I really enjoyed the dynamic between these two. :twilightsmile:

I think know that stove is an episode reference, but I can't for the life of me remember which...

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The better part of a day, obviously. :moustache:

Obviously!

A fun little story, I really enjoyed the dynamic between these two.

Thanks!

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I think know that stove is an episode reference, but I can't for the life of me remember which...

If it is, it was unintentional. I was thinking of the legend that the altar from the Rollin Center church is at the bottom of a lake, due to a tornado.

Given what we've seen in canon, it's plausible that there are all sorts of things in lakes that fell from the sky--pianos, anvils, wagons, flowerpots, etc.

She took a deep breath of oily compressor air

The best kind. :ajsmug:

the lead in them wouldn't accept her field

Always did like to think that lead was magic resistant, at least to some degree.

Given what we've seen in canon, it's plausible that there are all sorts of things in lakes that fell from the sky--pianos, anvils, wagons, flowerpots, etc.

Hehe.

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Oh god, he stops pumping to row. I'm not sure If thats better or worse than winging it with an untested magic pump.

the sleeps in verse ponies must have developed some ultra high quality never fail no-return valves.

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The best kind. :ajsmug:

Eh, I dunno about all that, but I never tried seeing what the air tasted like after coming out of our ancient air compressor. What a research failure on my part.

the lead in them wouldn't accept her field

Always did like to think that lead was magic resistant, at least to some degree.

Yeah, it just feels right to me.

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Brilliant. I love the expressions in the second-to-last panel.

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Oh god, he stops pumping to row. I'm not sure If thats better or worse than winging it with an untested magic pump.
the sleeps in verse ponies must have developed some ultra high quality never fail no-return valves

There'd be a check valve in the feed line to the suit, and another check valve in the helmet, to avoid instant horrible death if the hose becomes cut (of course, there's still the possibility of a lingering, suffocating death).

Pancakes, yep! That's what's important!

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Hey, in one of the recent episodes, pancakes were very important.
Or at least, mentioned.
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I would have seemed like more of a genius if I'd published a couple of weeks earlier....

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In another episode, they even had changing tendencies!

That was a very enjoyable slice of life. Good job!

Coco shrugged apologetically. “That was twenty minutes ago. I have pancakes now.”

I'm reminded of a quote that basically goes: every teenage male can be summed up with the line "If you don't see a boner, make me a sandwich!".:pinkiehappy:

she was back in a mucker bottom

I think you mean muckier.

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That was a very enjoyable slice of life. Good job!

Thank you!

I think you mean muckier.

Correction made, thank you!

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It kind of is, and it isn't the only tangentially-related story.

I made a library of all the fics which fall into the CSI/OPP verse.
(I should mention that none of them have Dale or Kate).

As an added bonus, there is also the diabeetus-inducing 36: So It Begins.
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Coco, he's motivated by pancakes.:twilightsheepish:

She'd even found a stove in one pond; how it had gotten there was anypony's guess

Maud must have been visiting Pinkie and helped the Cakes get rid of some old equipment... while still in town.

Oh, and nice story. :twilightsmile:

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Coco, he's motivated by pancakes.:twilightsheepish:

Well, yeah: he has pancakes now.

Maud must have been visiting Pinkie and helped the Cakes get rid of some old equipment... while still in town.

Local legend has it that Devil's Lake has the altar from the Rollin Center church in it, thanks to a passing tornado.

Actually, given the number of random monster attacks and whatnot that befalls Ponyville, not to mention cloudhomes and things being dropped from them, there isn't much that would be odd to find on a lake bottom.

Oh, and nice story. :twilightsmile:

Thanks! Coco and Sea Swirl are my OTP.

“That was twenty minutes ago. I have pancakes now.”

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Nicely done intro to an engaging little character study. Ponies with 19th century diving gear. For whatever reason, this works and feels right :)

Nice story. The underwater reminds me of the deep glacial lake in the town where I grew up. It's deep enough that the local dive teams practice there, but the visibility is terrible. If I ever need to dispose of evidence.... :pinkiecrazy:

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I actually did a bit of research on that for the first story I wrote with Sea Swirl diving (and then re-used most of that research for this one). The Finger Lakes in New York only had about 15’ of visibility underwater--or, put another way, you wouldn’t be able to see the back of my Suburban from the front of it. However, the zebra mussels did such a good job of filtering the water, the visibility is much better now.

Most lakes that I know of in Michigan also have rather limited visibility; however, there are a few in the upper peninsula that are crystal clear, such as Kitch-iti-kipi. There are also times when the Great Lakes are really clear; apparently, a couple of years ago, Lake Michigan was clear enough that a few shipwrecks were visible from air.
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You know I imagined someone finding Buttonwood sometime later. Too bad it wasn't this time.

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You know I imagined someone finding Buttonwood sometime later. Too bad it wasn't this time.

I did consider that, and did consider the pony who might find her. It could be Sea Swirl, one day.

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