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Sir Hat


Done.

Comments ( 34 )

lol. Frikking awesome.

Well, that's got to be awkward. Small world, isn't it?

Enjoyably bizarre, though you did spoil it in the description. Also, this bit here?

"Berry always picked weird stallions...." She took a deep breath. "... How is Berry? Still in honors?"

You're going to want to fix that. I understood what you meant, but it took me a moment.

Still, quite entertaining.

Years were streaming down

Tears were

"Of you've gotta be kidding me."

"Oh you've gotta be kidding me."

This is weird and demented and awesome. Well done :rainbowlaugh: I hope you plan to give us more in the future!

Kinda wish we got to know the client a bit better, but still good.

rofl this is great...sequel?

I love how blase he is about all of this, perfect sociopath hitman.

also

"I know right? Two sisters, both pretty? Long odds right there."

This made it for me.

Dude, this needs to be full story!

I'm actually rather impressed at how quickly the dude switched sides. No hesitation at all, that's some conviction in family above all else, even when not technically family yet.

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He's already paid, Cheerilee is family, and the old client was a bit of a bitch.

Hope to see more of this in the future.

5634305 Hat I am begging you make this a series I will pay any money you want just please make this a thing

You know, if it weren't for the clear fact the mare was red, I would have thought that the one that hired him, was Diamond Tiara. :rainbowwild:

You should totally continue this, or write a few more one-shots pertaining to this guys jobs.

I like to think the bitch he killed was Diamond Tiara, but with a dye job done to her coat to make sure she woudn't be recognized, just so she'd be dead.

"A drunk and a high funcioning sociopath are getting married" sounds like the premise to a bad movie not an event that saves someones life.

Awsome story.

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I need about....

5644042 DONE cheak savings or credit?

Dude, please, please, please - make a few more oneshots about this dude's job, or make it a series.

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5 people say no!

So...nah...

(maybe)

Needs to be continued.

I will go crazy if you don't.

Don't fucking test me! :pinkiecrazy:

Good one :)

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Small suggestion:

I kept pulling my cart behind me, two stilts held in either gloved hand.

'Two+either' here made me read that he had been holding 2 stilts in each hand, so maybe reword it somewhat?

And (nitpicking, as both are in speech) maybe to keep grammar really nice:
there's gonna be three holes
there's a few thousand bits
there is -> there are

Not really, But I thought it was fitting, nonetheless.

To be fair, a spoiled little bitch of a student already tried having Cheerilee killed once. So I see this as both Quality Control AND Making sure some other student doesn't send someone to kill her as well.

The mans quality control. And yes, a gun is a must have for some dates. I am not going to tell you the number of times some crazy ex boyfriend has showed up.

Ok Hat. Digging the premise. Need some more backstory on Nick and Berry.

Okay, that was awesome :rainbowlaugh:

Eh, the desc made me think the story would be more serious. This is just too silly. I'm sure a real pro would only target the truly guilty... Then again, money...

Very twisted. I like it!

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