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Not the most original story concept, but it is rather well written. Plus, the sex scene is pretty good; not too long, not too short. I'm rather interested in seeing where you go with this.
Now that's the Granny Smith I enjoy to read about! The sex scene was perhaps too short, but the story was funny. Tracking.
If you want suggestions, I say Vinyl Scratch, BonBon and Silver Spoon.
Can't wait to read more. Also I hope to see some chapters with Mayor Mare, Mrs. Cake, Zecora, and definitely Button Mash's Mom.
I would like to see Big Mac with Trixie. I bet she is a total sub in bed.
My kind of humor, well written sex scenes, yepp, this story is a keeper.^^
Nice chapter, but there's some times when you forgot to use ampersands.
Still, I'm looking forward to more. I hope to see a chapter between Big Mac and Rarity's Mom. I don't see much clop with Cookie Crumbles.
He'll be bucking more Milfs than apples at this rate.
This has good potential! Also, can I just say that this scene:
was hilarious. The fact that they fist bump after having sex is just so funny! And the sex critique part, giving ponies 3 out of 5 dicks is just so funny!
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Ampersands?
Those are these characters: &
I believe you mean apostrophes.
Five of five
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Or is it dicks?
Heh, anyways, Approval granted for continuation.
And... Zecora. Never enough Zecora.
7165501 This is why I try not to comment while half asleep. Still, my point still stands. This story could use some additional apostrophes.
7165516 Yeah, sorry.
Not bad over all, but there are several grammatical and spelling errors that prevent me from giving it an upvote at this time. Get and editor, or just give your work a second run through before posting and I bet you'll see more positive reactions.
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Thanks for the feed back. I went back through the chapter and corrected all the mistakes I could find. I do try to give my stuff a final read through but in the future I'll try to leave it for a bit and then come back with fresh eyes before posting.
Any suggestions on where to look for a beta/editor willing to work on clop? All the ones I know/use only work on the family friendly stuff.
When I read the premise, I wasn't expecting the story to actually spend much time on it, much less have Big Mac give a thoughtful assessment of being what is essentially a male prostitute. I was pleasantly surprised, and quite amused.
Cheerilee will still get it for free. Some "off the record" ruts.
But he's heading to fill out the forms that will make sure he does plenty of that. I guess it'd be more "tending" the south fields, but for the sake of the joke...
So do the rest of the mane 6 count as his sisters and he cannot stud out to them or are they fair game?
For real? Big Mac just let Mayor Mare treat him like a doormat bitch?
Nice chapter, but I found a couple things you may want to edit.
"That should be "grope"
And that should be "shoes". I look forward to the next chapter. I really hope we get a chapter with Rarity's mother, unwrapped.
Gotta love the Mayor. :3
I do hope there will be more chapters with Big Mac and Mayor Mare.
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I'd say it's more that he's getting to forms so that he can "plow" some south fields but I get what you're saying.
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I will be addressing that in the next chapter.
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Cool.
Starting with best MILF
its a good day
Well good to see that the rest of the mane 6 will not be using Big Mac that way. Kinda surprised that Bulk Biceps is the only other Stud in town. I would have pegged Thunderlane doing it as well.
Ha great update and hilarious dialogue. Loved Rainbow's joke about Armour and Cadance.
I totaly lost it at your rendition of Fluttershy in this story. XD
Also, have a stache for the Jurassic Park ref.
Shining will need some time to recover from that one. Good on you Rainbow. And Rarity and her fence reminded me of a comic. Although maybe that was intentional.
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Flitter and Cloudchaser probably would get too jealous and possessive.
Oooh. So maybe the reason Blueblood was such a jerk to Rarity is that he feels like he needs to project he's a stud (for duty's sake) but is actually terrified of getting close and intimate with somepony.
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"Oh crap, oh crap, oh crap, oh crap..!"
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eeyup definitely intentional 
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I hadn't thought about it to be honest. I think most stallions wouldn't take up studding in a town like Ponyville and still have it be their sole source of income. Some may rotate through the small towns during peak season but none would stay in Ponyville exclusively. I'd say they would focus on the larger places where there is a higher potential client base. Sure if you're state endorsed you get a stipend from the government but it's not something that you can live off if the clientele aren't there. Bulk Biceps mainly lives on his earnings as a masseuse and Studs more as a hobby than an actual profession
Thunderlane probably wouldn't want to hurt his dating prospects for something that yields such low returns.
Big Mac is more likely to see action because almost all the mares in town want a piece to so even mares that don't usually hire studs would be willing to hire him.
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Actually I like your reason better
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Oh that is brilliant.
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So there could be a possibility that certain mares passing through could hire his services then. Hopefully some of the mares, besides Fluttershy, still hire out Bulk Biceps.
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I think for some mares, their local stud is like their local hairdresser. Once they find one that does it the way they like it that they will stick with that one til the end of days.
So while some of his clients will want to try out Big Mac at least once I'm sure Bulk Biceps will still have at a loyal client base.
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It would make sense, wouldn't it?
Don't get me wrong, Big MacIntosh is a total stud muffin. But Blueblood likely gets in the papers for being a prince alone. Meaning he's got a much, much wider draw. Rarity knew about him back in Ponyville.
And that's not even going into the problem of whoever bags Blueblood permanently gets to be a princess; we know Rarity was after that, too. On top of that, he's kind of a prissy coward. Just imagine a guy like that running around, feeling like he's got two arrows pointing at him—one on his head and one to his loins.
Maybe Big Mac and he should go out for a drink some time. Share some stories. Blueblood can ask him how he manages to be so cool. They can invite some other guys along, too.
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I felt sorry for Big Mac throughout this chapter. Pinkie being her usual self, Rarity trying to sample the goods, Bulk sizing up the competition, and all the conversations throughout the day. If I was at the bar with him and just got the basics of his day, I would buy him a few rounds. He definitely needs it.
Big Mac, you are my hero!
The only thing that chapter was missing was him getting awkwardly hit on by Sweetie Belle. Everything comes full circle.
Significant need for proofreading. Spellcheck helps but you need to look the story over again after that. Still, it's a fun story.
Big Mac is the man!
It hurt my eyes to read this chapter. It really did.
I see what you did there
. Still, this means he has to eventually bang some mares roleplaying as green-furred space babes.
This story's main strength is the dialogue. There's a fun memorable line practically every paragraph.
The main weakness is the sex-scenes themselves. They're kind of lacking in description or emotion and have very little punch.
As things stand now I'd say the story might actually be stronger if all the sex was off-screen fade-to-black and more space was devoted to character interaction.
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Well there are already green mares in equestrian so that's already half the work done
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Thank you for the feedback. I am glad you like the dialogue. I will admit that I do have a lot of fun writing them.
As for the sex scenes, I value the criticism. I'll admit the reason I started this story was to see if I could write fics with sex in them. All of my previous work fit comfortably in the young adult section, not because I wanted to avoid sex, just because it never seemed to fit in the stories I was creating. Which is why I went with such a basic premise that in theory meant that the sex would be the focus of the story.
What I didn't expect to happen was to have so much fun with this premise just based to the characters reactions to what is unfolding. I was genuinely surprised when I realised this had turned into a story with an actual plot but I'm certainly not complaining. Though while I will probably focus more on the interactions going forward, I'm not quite ready to give up on the sex scenes. There are a few ideas that I have for future chapters that don't quite work if I made the sex simply be fade to black and I do want to see if I can get better at writing them. I will however work on making them feel more organic and in service to the plot instead of trying to force them into happening.
With that said, I'm open to suggestions on how to improve the sex scenes.
This was a good chapter!
7215353 Hahahaha! That's funny!
This was also a good chapter!
Hahahaha! That was really funny!
I just noticed that the character tags got switched. I thought originally I was going to see Lyra and Bon Bon, but now Photo Finish and Berry Punch are there. Still onto more sexy time for Big Mac.
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Nothing has changed with what I have planned. I just thought I would try rotating a few of the character tags seeing as this story does have a rotating cast.
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Ah.
I really liked that Jurassic Park reference you threw in, 'twas quite amusing. Keep up the good work!