Horn Marrow
Horn Marrow
Rarity watched as Twilight paced back and forth through the waiting room. When they had first arrived, she had tried calming her friend down, but she had resigned herself to the fact that Twilight would just need to fret herself out. Rarity’s head tracked Twilight back and forth as a peculiar pattern repeated itself.
With every tenth trip across the room, Princess Celestia would whisper a firm, “Twilight,” and use her wing to push the younger alicorn into an open seat. Twilight would sit in the chair for usually less than thirty seconds before her hoof began to tap. Before even a minute would be up, Twilight would resume her pacing while muttering about various hospital statistics.
Rarity took another sip of her cup of coffee. She would prefer tea, of course, but the machine out in the hallway had a woefully inadequate selection. As Twilight was ushered back into her seat Rarity looked at the other occupants of the room. Twilight’s parents were obviously worried, but absolutely calm compared to Twilight herself. It was likely reassuring to know that with three genetic relations in the room, there was almost certain to be a compatible donor. Princess Cadance, however, was smiling and chatting away with her parents-in-law.
Obviously, the Princess of Love was confident that her husband would be fine, and from all the statistics that Twilight was spouting off, it seemed that even Twilight thought Shining Armor would be fine. However, Rarity supposed that being infected by a changeling poison was never a light issue.
Every head swiveled to the door as it was pushed open, but a collective sigh rippled through them when they saw that it was just Spike with a tray of sandwiches. Being a private wing of the hospital, the only pony they were expecting to come through the door was one of the doctors.
“Thank you, Spike.” Rarity smiled at the dragon as he handed her a plate with a daffodil sandwich. “How are you doing?”
“Honestly I’m more worried about Twilight than Shining.” Spike looked back towards the pacing alicorn. “How do you think she’ll handle not having magic?”
“Spike, our Twilight is a strong pony. Besides, if she is a match, the doctor said most donors can start using their magic again within a few months. I’m sure with an assistant like you, she will cope just fine.”
“I know, Rarity.” Spike shot her a smile. “I guess we should be more worried about her wearing down her hooves with all her pacing.”
“Yes, well, I just wish Twilight had given us time to talk to the others.”
“They’ll find the note we left at the library. I’m just glad you were visiting when I got the letter about the attack, otherwise Twilight might have dragged me down to the train station without even waiting to leave the note.”
Rarity had not even had the chance to grab a single travel bag. She hoped that nopony would see her in Canterlot without a shred of fashion, but it was a risk she was willing to take for her friend. It would just be nice if she could do something for the pacing pony.
“And I’m glad I’m here as well. I just wish I could actually help. Not even the Princess has been able to calm her down, and it’s not like I have any chance of being a compatible donor.” Rarity looked at the bandage on her foreleg where the nurse had taken a blood sample.
Everypony with the exception of Spike had a similar bandage. Even Princess Celestia had been tested, though the odds of a stranger being a compatible donor were nearly a million to one. Likewise, it was almost certain that Twilight, as a sibling, would be able to help Shining Armor. Still, she thought it was a rather moving sign of support for their friend.
Again everpony looked up when the door open, and again everpony sighed when they saw it was not a doctor. Princess Luna stood by the door for a few moments shuffling her hooves before making her way over to where Celestia was sitting down.
Rarity was able to overhear part of the conversation. She was not eavesdropping. Proper ponies didn’t listen in to private conversations. Rarity just happened to be sitting nearby and just so happened to hear some of what they were saying, not eavesdropping at all.
“Sister, one of us should head back to the castle, it is not as if those accursed doctors are even letting us see Shining Armor.”
“He’s immunocompromised, so it’s a good thing the doctors aren’t letting us see him. But we should be here for him. He is family now after all.”
As Rarity listened she continued to count Twilight’s pacing. She was almost finished with her tenth lap.
“I do not think it is our nephew-in-law you wish to be here for.”
“Twilight needs a-” Celestia cut off as she addressed her student, “Twilight, you should sit down and try to relax.”
Again the door opened, but this time everypony stood up in anticipation as a pony in a white labcoat walked in.
“We have the results of everypony’s blood panel, and I am happy to report good news. We have a match.”
“Finally. When are you going to prep me for the procedure. Is it going to hurt? Of course it is going to hurt, the other doctor already told us that. I just mean, can we get started? Get it over with, that way Shining can get out of the hospital.” Twilight was rambling with hairs out of place in her mane.
Rarity watched as Princess Celestia laid a wing across Twilight’s back, quieting her down and smoothing out her rough mane.
“Actually, I’m afraid you aren’t a compatible donor Princess Sparkle. You actually have zero out of the six required antigens in your blood.”
“What? How is that possible? Statistically speaking I mean? Siblings are almost always at least a four out of six match. All the books I’ve been teleporting in from the library say that. It’s near impossible for me not to have any of the right factors.” Twilight’s eyes grew wide. “It’s not- It’s not because I’m an alicorn now, is it?”
Princess Celestia took a step forward. “Doctor, Twilight’s ascension should not have affected her ability to donate horn marrow to her brother. Twilight received a full medical workup after becoming an alicorn and all of her blood work returned the same as before, minus the additional factors related to her ascension. But you should be able to filter those out.”
“Er- You are correct Princess. It doesn’t have anything to with it. Alicorn or unicorn, either one should be able to donate. Princess Twilight simply doesn’t have the right antigens in her blood to prevent rejection. She likely never did.”
Twilight marched up the doctor until she was right in his face. “How is that possible? Why can’t I donate marrow to my brother?” There were more hairs out of place now.
“I’m not really sure what to say… You are right that, statistically, it is almost unheard of for a blood sibling not to be a match.”
Rarity gasped when she realized what the doctor was hinting at. Spike just looked on in confusion.
“Doctor, you said one of us was a match?” Twilight’s father asked while dragging a handkerchief across his brow.
“Yes!” The doctor’s smile returned. “Mrs. Velvet. You have three out of six of the required antigens, enough to prevent rejection. However, Ms. Rarity, you happen to be a four out of six. Unusual, but not unheard of in ponies who aren’t related, even if the odds of any given pony being a match are small. I suppose in your case we have gotten lucky. It would hasten Mr. Armor’s recovery and reduce the chance that he would end up suffering any long term complications. But as my colleague should have explained to you, the procedure is a painful one with a lengthy recovery. Though, the odds of serious complications on the donors part are all most none.”
Rarity took a deep breath and nodded. She had not offered to be tested for show after all. “Alright. Whatever is best for Shining Armor. I suppose I am ready whenever you are all ready.”
Rarity felt herself being hugged on both sides by Cadance and Mrs. Velvet.
“Thank you so much. I’m so glad Twilight has such a wonderful friend.”
“Hold on a moment!” Everypony turned towards Twilight still standing in the middle of the room. “Are we just going to ignore the fact that for some reason Shining Armor’s own sister is not a compatible donor?”
Twilight’s father’s nervous gulp did not go unnoticed by Rarity, which is why she was unsurprised when Mrs. Velvet spoke up. “Dear do you think we could discuss this in private?”
“No. Everypony here is family or close enough to be family. I want to hear this. Why am I not a compatible donor?”
“I’m afraid that we can explain that honey.” Twilight’s mother took a deep breath. “If you are sure you want to do this here. You see… You’re adopted.”
“I’m what?”
“How come I was never informed about this?” Princess Celestia stepped forward frowning.
“Because frankly Princess, it wasn’t your business.”
“The adoption was not exactly official,” added Twilight’s father.
“You kidnapped me as a filly!”
“No! Twilight sit down. If you are going to make a thing of this you are going to let me and your father explain ourselves. Twilight, sit down right this instant young lady.”
Rarity noticed that everypony in the room seemed to reflexively take their seat.
“You see, there were complications with our little Shiny’s birth, and afterwards, well, we couldn’t have another child,” continued Twilight Velvet.
“We loved Shiny but we had always wanted to have a big family with a lot of foals.” Night Light put a hoof on his wife’s shoulder. “At the very least we thought it would be nice if Shining had a little brother or sister.”
“We started looking into adoption.”
“But before we could make any decision we went on a little camping trip, something to help us think. We left Shining with your uncle for the weekend and went out into the woods outside of Canterlot.”
Rarity noticed Princess Celestia scooch next to Twilight and drape a comforting wing back over her back.
“We were out on a hill staring at the sky, simply enjoying the night, when Night Light spotted a shooting star.”
“I pointed it out and we made a wish.”
“What does any-” Twilight’s words cut off at the glare from her mother.
“Imagine our surprise when the shooting star crash landed at the edge of the clearing.” Despite her glare Twilight Velvet was smiling.
Rarity felt an eyebrow rising in curiosity at the increasingly wide eyed stare of Princess Celestia. Rarity would not have expected the alicorn to react to the story in such a way. However, the stranger thing was Princess Luna. The Princess of the Night kept glancing at the door and every now and then would shuffle a few paces towards it when nopony else was looking.
“When we went to investigate we found a little foal wrapped in swaddling cloth at the center of the burning crater,” said Twilight’s mother.
Rarity blinked. She felt like she should say something but did not know what. She looked at Twilight, but her friend looked the same as always. Rarity sighed. She supposed her friend always had been a bit strange, and one more thing was not going to be the straw that broke the pony's back.
“We don’t know how, but we know that somepony had answered our wish.”
“How is that-” Twilight was once again cut off, but this time by Princess Celestia speaking over her.
“I remember that night.” The words were quiet as the Princess spoke towards the floor.
“What?” Twilight stepped away from her teacher and Rarity watched with concern as some hairs sprung out of place on her friend’s mane.
“I was thinking about Luna, and how much I missed her. I was very lonely back then. I had weathered nearly a thousand years on my own and was tired. It was back before I had found Cadance. But, I saw that same shooting star, I think. The timing seems right. I wished on it as well. I wanted… As I wished on it, I saw it crash into the forest. I thought it an ill omen at the time. I sent some guard ponies out to make sure it hadn’t hit anypony, but they reported just an empty clearing with a smoldering crater.”
“After we pulled our Twiley out of the crater we decided it was best to leave. We did not want to have to answer any questions,” Night Light clarified.
“But- That doesn’t really explain where I came from. Ponies don’t just fall from the sky in shooting stars.”
Rarty’s head swiveled at a heavy sigh. She had been so absorbed in the tale she had forgotten all about Princess Luna.
“I think I can answer that,” Luna muttered.
As every eye turned towards Luna, Rarity noticed Twilight step towards the center of the room. The poor dear was a complete mess, and understandably so. Rarity, of all ponies present, understood how such news could be unnerving and stepped next to her friend. She tried to lean into Twilight as a show of support, but as Luna began talking Twilight resumed her pacing, only now with a frantic edge.
“Now, I want you all to keep in mind that the last thousand years that I spent trapped in the moon are hazy. In my madness most of the details became jumbled, but I was aware of what was happening in Equestria, after a fashion. And even trapped, I could still exert some of my influence.” Luna seemed to be looking anywhere but at the ponies she was speaking to.
“As Nightmare Moon I was filled with a great deal of anger. However, even then, I have always had a particular fondness for petitioners, and what is a pony wishing upon a shooting star but a petitioner. I had three ponies all baring their souls to me, wishing on the same star, and even with all of my hatred, part of me still loved my sister. When three wishes can be granted with a single simple act, well it was hard not to do something.”
“I don’t understand. You, what, made me out of magic?” Twilight was standing perfectly still. Rarity could not help but feel that it was a bad sign.
“I suspect so. If you are asking me how though, I cannot answer. I do not know of any magics that could accomplish such a thing as making a pony. However, as Nightmare Moon I was capable of much that I cannot do now. All I know is that I heard a wish and I granted said wish.”
In a bright flash of lavender magic, Twilight disappeared.
“Oh dear.” Rarity covered her mouth with a hoof.
“Rarity, do you think you could go be with Twilight. I think she needed somepony right now, but I’m worried she might not want to see me right now.” Princess Celestia kept glancing at Princess Luna as she spoke.
“I would love to be there for Twilight, but I don’t even know where she went.”
“Let me take care of that.” With the Princess’s words, Rarity was bathed in a golden light.
Rarity looked around, not quite sure where she was. It seemed to be some sort of tower, perhaps an observatory. It looked like it had not seen any use in quite some time, and with only the illumination of moonlight shining through the windows, Rarity felt a shudder running down her spine. She shook her hoof trying to shake some of the dust off of her fetlock as she stepped across the floor.
Then she saw the bed against the wall with a lavender bedsheet marked with Twilight's cutie mark. Rarity realized she must be in Twilight’s old room in the castle. Twilight never really talked much about her time in Canterlot. Rarity wondered why.
Her head craned around as she took it all in. The room was absolutely huge and resplendent with works of art. Rarity never would have guessed her friend had lived in such comfort from the homely tree that Twilight now seemed satisfied with.
“I hadn’t realized her family was so wealthy. Or perhaps this was all a gift from Princess Celestia.”
Rarity shook her head. She had more important concerns at the moment. If Princess Celestia had sent her, Twilight must be somewhere nearby. Her eyes followed the spiraling staircase to the upper levels and figured they were as a good of a place as any to start.
When Rarity eventually reached the top level she found Twilight sitting on the balcony staring at the stars.
“Twilight?” Rarity spoke softly, not wanting to startle the mare.
Her friend whirled around and embraced Rarity in a hug that caused her to wheeze for breath.
“Oh Rarity, I don’t even know what to think right now.”
“Well… What about Spike?”
“What do you mean, what about Spike?”
“I’m sure that you are confused about your brother, and parents, and the other Princesses right now, but Spike seems like he might be easier to deal with.”
“Nothing has changed about Spike. He’s still like a-” Twilight cut off as she started to smile and wiped away a tear. “I see what you did there. OK, I guess Shining is still my brother, and my parents are still my parents. That doesn’t mean I’m not mad at them for keeping this from me though.”
“And I think you have every right to be upset. Just don’t let that ruin your relationship.”
“I- I’ll try. I don’t think I can just adapt to this overnight. It’s a lot to swallow.” Twilight laughed. “I find out that not only am I adopted, but I’m not even a real pony.”
“Darling, why would you say something like that?”
“You heard what Luna said. I’m some sort of magical construct.”
“That is not at all what I heard Twilight, and if that is what you think you heard, you need your ears checked.” Rarity used her magic to tug on Twilight’s left ear. “What I heard is that two ponies wished for a foal and a third wished for a release from her loneliness. That wish was granted and a daughter and friend fell to Equestria. Nowhere in there did I hear anything about you being some sort of construct.”
“But-”
“No buts. You are Twilight Sparkle, personal student to Princess Celestia and now a princess in her own right. You are the sister of Shining Armor and Spike the dragon. You are the daughter of Twilight Velvet and Night Light. You are my friend. Maybe your origins are a bit unorthodox, but I personally would not want to associate with anypony who would judge you for that.”
Twilight held back a sniffle. “Thanks, Rarity.”
“I will admit that there are a lot of questions. But I don’t know if any of them can’t wait to be answered. Right now your family is worried about you.”
The two sat in silence for awhile. Rarity knew that Twilight needed time to process everything and was more than willing to give her friend that time.
“What about,” Twilight continued in a murmur, “What about the Princess?”
“Princess Celestia? I think she is just as worried about you. She was the one who sent me here.”
Twilight nodded her head in what Rarity supposed was understanding. “I suppose we should get back then.”
“Twilight… If you ever want to talk about it, I know what it feels like. Finding out you are adopted I mean.”
“Rarity, you’re adopted?” Twilight looked at her in surprise.
Rarity nodded her head. “I am. I’m terribly sorry for not mentioning it earlier. It’s nothing I am ashamed of, but until this year Sweetie Belle didn’t know, and so it was something I tried to avoid talking about. More habit than anything else I suppose.”
“You told Sweetie Belle? How did she take it?”
“Not,” Rarity paused for a moment, “Not well I am afraid. You may have noticed that our relationship has been a bit strained. However, I think she is adjusting and realizing it doesn’t really change anything. The fact that I am adopted and she’s not is really just meaningless. I know it is not the same thing as being some sort of star foal, but-”
“Thank you for sharing that with me.” Twilight leaned in and hugged Rarity. “It helps a lot knowing that. I mean. I know everything we talked about, but part of me just can’t help but feel like something is different about me. That I’m nothing but a lie. However, you’re adopted, and there is nothing different about you. You’re still the same Rarity.”
“And you are still the same Twilight.”
“We should probably get back to the others.” Suddenly a dozen hairs which had been smoothed down popped back up out of Twilight’s mane. “Shining! I completely forgot about him.”
“It will be OK, Twilight. Once you teleport us back, the doctors can start preparing things for the transplant.”
The two hugged again as lavender magic carried them back to the hospital waiting room. Rarity noticed that Princess Celestia was smiling, but everypony else seemed nervous.
“Sorry everypony that I freaked out. I still have a lot of questions, and mom, dad, we are going to need to talk more later, but I think I’m OK.”
Rarity gracefully stepped aside, as Twilight was mobbed by her parents, Cadance and Spike. They were all making comments of support and hugging the flustered alicorn. Rarity looked up at the motionless Princess Celestia.
“You aren’t going to join in?”
“I’m sure Twilight would rather be with her friends and family right now. She just received very emotional news after all.”
“Excuse me if I may be so bold, Princess, but was it not partly your wish as well?”
Rarity watched as the Princess’s eyes widened and then shrunk. The alicorn’s smile seemed to grow as she moved forward and swept the entire mob of ponies up in a massive wing hug.
Eventually the heart warming sight was broken up by a cough from the doctor. “Excuse me, but it would be best if we got Ms. Rarity into prep as soon as possible. Shining Armor should be safe in isolation, but it is best if we avoid delays.”
Then it was Rarity who found herself in a pile of hug that was only broken by another cough from the doctor.
As Rarity made her way to the door, she stopped when Spike tugged on her tail.
“Rarity, I know we’ve already all said it, but thanks a lot for helping Shining Armor. If you want, while your magic is recovering, I can help you out. You know, help you with doing things that might be hard without your magic.”
Rarity smiled at the dragon. Spike could be so cute sometimes. “I think I would like that very much. I have a feeling that it might be quite a struggle, if not for your help, when I get back home.”
Exiting the door Rarity heard Twilight saying one last thing. “By the way, Princess Luna. I don’t think I am going to be calling you mom.” And as the door closed Rarity could just make out the sound of a pony spitting out their drink.
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I'm not sure how to feel about this...
It's a nice little one-shot, but there's a lot that feels incredibly rushed. Specifically everyone's quick acceptance of everything. Rarity was not fazed in the least by Twilight being a literal star and Twilight accepted her adoption in just a few minutes.
I think that there is a lot of story that could come from this, but more than that, I feel that this short story would have more justice done to it if some time was devoted to expanding on what is going on with the characters.
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It feeling rushed was my biggest concern. The original draft was longer and slower, but it just felt... whiny. Ultimately news like this isn't something that you just process and are done with in a night. I had tried to imply that for Twilight, a lot of her feelings are still unresolved. She has questions that need answering, and ponies she needs to talk to. I didn't want to belabor the point.
You are right about Rarity though. I should have probably gone into her reaction more.
I'm not saying it was moon-mares...
THAT WAS NICE, A few twists a few turns, A nice ride.
Nicely done again, Sap! Good heavens, the workrate you have....
More than a slight echo of the early 2011 TwiLuna "Spark" by AVeryStrange, in which Twilight was a golem made of stardust, created by Celestia and Nightmare Moon. Here's a relevant passage from Chapter 8: Twilight sighed. "I should explain. I am - well, was, it's complicated, but I'm kinda a golem." ... "I was...never born. I wonder if my, uh, parents knew about me, or...that's something for later. The nightmare that controlled Princess Celestia created me. I'm mostly magic and stardust. Oh, and sunlight.".
A few fixes:
Velvet (several instances)
End with question mark
colleague
End with question mark
End with question mark
period after 'you'
comma after 'You know'
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Thanks for the fixes.
I had a vague memory of reading a fic where Twilight came from Celestia wishing upon a star, but I don't think Spark was it. At the very least it doesn't look like I have read it before (though from a brief look, it seems like something I would enjoy). As I wrote this, I felt like I might have been ripping something off with the core idea, but I couldn't find anything going through all my old favorited stories.
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I wouldn't say 'ripping off' - let's call it a "distant homage."
So Rarity is adopted... and she is a genetic match for Shining's operation...
... COINCIDENCE?! I THINK NOT!
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Given that Shining was his mother's only child, probably.
The question is from where was Twilight stolen by the wish magic. I doubt she was created by magic. There somwhere was very unhappy mare that lost her child.
10 out of 10 love this story
would love to see how twilight and Luna go about the wish thing after this is would be so funny 
5522919 Maybe she's his cousin or something? Seems like something that would happen in a soap-opera-like plot like this one.
Theories:
1) My head-canon is right and Twilight is the third alicorn sister, princess of stars.
2) Stars are ponies.
3) Luna somehow managed to create life with her magic.
4) Luna got freaky on the moon.
5) Luna kidnapped somepony elses foal and sent her down.
6) Twilight is a chunk of Luna's soul given her own life.
7) Luna pulled a soul out of the aether before her time, or maybe resurrected somepony.
Personally I like my first three theories best, what about you guys? Any ideas that I didn't think of?
5523844 Twilight is actually superman.
I must say. This is the best story I've read since... last week? Maybe? I like it though. It's well written and the story is sooo interesting. Either way, good job and you get my thumbs up approval (which probably means absolutely nothing).
Why is this out of five while the others are out of six?
Yeah, but have you SEEN the size of those fucking needles? I want no part of that.
Though I like the comment at the end by Twilight. She now has like 3 mother figures, two that raised her and one that created her. Maybe the Element of Magic helped create her, who knows.
Lel, now I wanna see a sequel focusing on Twilight's interaction with her mother figures... Imagine Mother's day
I have no clue if I'm right but baseing it off the character list here and the family secret I'm guessing that shining was adopted and he is actually related to rarity and if I happen to be right, just punch me in the face
This is a really nice story, but there are some things you may want to edit.
That should be capitalized.
Capitalize.
"Alright".
"Velvet".
Again, Velvet.
5523617 My theory is that Velvet and Night Light tried using in-vitro fertilization to conceive a child after several failed attempts at conceiving one the natural way, but they found out that the complications of Shining's birth had affected Velvet's uterus so that she couldn't become pregnant. They then signed off on allowing the other fertilized ovums the doctors had collected to be used by others, and thus another couple had Rarity, but then those parents died and thus she was adopted by Hondo Flanks and Cookie Crumbles. I figure that sounds more like a soap opera to me.
5524322 I have this insane idea where the Element of Magic was missing for the past thousand years because it was busy manipulating the bloodlines to create a perfect host. Host, not Bearer. Twilight, in my hypothesis, is basically the Element made flesh. Combine Twilight being made by the Element with this story, and it only leaves one question:
Is Luna, the wish, or the Element the 'father'? Maybe the wish is the midwife?
Twilight can teleport, which is travelling faster then a speeding bullet.
Twilight can fly, which counts as being able to leap tall buildings.
Twilight can fly, which counts as being able to fly.
Twilight can shoot lasers.
Twilight can pick up an Ursa Minor.
TWILIGHT CONFIRMED FOR SUPERMARE.
-SYA, The Horse
Slice of Life is right. It's a nice, brief glimpse at their lives, even if the topic is unique.
First off, I really liked what you did here. I think you handled the reaction to adoption really well.
As for young Twilight being found in the crater, it works, and I didn't have any trouble with it in the story at all.
That being said... I'd have to kick myself if I didn't post what went through my head at the time... that would be this https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8TAs_6LGa6Q
I kept waiting for the "Rarity is actually Shining Armor's sister" shoe to drop throughout this. She's compatible, a unicorn, looks a hell of a lot like him, is adopted herself... One hell of an effective red herring.
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Dammit, beaten.
5525278 No, Twilight is confirmed as the god empress of ponykind.
Think about it.
I was not at all close
From the description, I thought the story was going to be that Velvet cheated on Nightlight with Rarity's dad and that was going to be the reason why she was compatible with him. Then I thought Twilight was going to be a kryptponian when the shooting star thing happened. You took me on a roller-coaster, sir... And judging from the many other comments, it's the same for them too.
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I'll be honest, that all sort of developed inadvertently. I knew I didn't want the story to be from Twilight's perspective, and then shifted it away from Shining's perspective (eventually cutting him out entirely). I decided it would be one of the Mane6, and I figured Rarity would be the one most likely to just roll with being a donor (Generosity and all). Then I decided that she should be adopted to help Twilight cope.
At one point I asked myself, "well **** are they actually siblings?" I decided not to do anything else with that, but I liked how that aspect turned out.
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I don't know. I thought you came surprisingly close for a blind guess.
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Thank you, that is reassuring to hear. For a crazy moment I was considering adventure.
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The sequel I had started writing before I realized it contradicted the plot was going to deal a bit with that. Celestia was going to have Twilight start calling her Aunt Celestia to bug Luna.
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I think you are thinking of the needles they use when they need to tap the marrow directly (or if you are on the reviving end)(Those needles are indeed crazy). PBSC donation from what I understand uses very reasonable sized needles (pic related):
blog.bradpine.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/12/NYP-Hospital-Bone-Marrow-12.8.11-0000.jpg
Not trying to pressure anyone, just trying to avoid perpetuating a false perception that might scare some people away.
Three wishes? I wonder where the third wish came from?...
The Sparkles' wish was for a second child. Tia's wish was most likely for her sister back which was fulfilled by Twilight and her friends and therefore indirectly by Twilight being in a home where she was able to fully realize her magical potential.
My theory for what the third completely unknown wish was is thus: A mother unable to properly care for the foal who became Twilight wished that the foal had a home and a family closer to what she deserved. This wish was granted as a message was somehow given to the mother as the foal vanished to the point where the Sparkles found her that the foal would be cared for well in her new home and would live a happy life.
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It'd be a great sequel hook. Just as something to maybe consider.
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Her mother and father are probably counted separately.
5526559 But it was a count of wishes not a count of petitioners. That would mean that assuming both had wished upon the star, which is not stated to be a fact in the story and could even be inferred to be false due to wording, both would have the same wish with at most slightly different wording.
This theory also explains how exactly Twilight came to be a fully biological life form when no known spells would allow for that, especially since in at least a few universes such feats are outright impossible to perform within the limits of magic.
So it seems Twilight has four parents. Not many ponies can say that without including step-family.
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You can count two wishes with the same content as separate if you want to, like two copies of a letter. It's a bit ambiguous as written, though, I suppose.
Alright... this will be the first story I've commented on... Ahem*
My explanation for all da stuff (in order of subject appearing(most likely)): The Changeling Poison; Seeing as how a poison would affect (usually) the entire body of the victim, I would think it would sort of be like... contact with magic... type thing... like he picked something up with his magic and it affected him... I don't know. The Twilight Sparkle star birth... thing; When Luna was banished to the moon, she was sent there via the Elements of Harmony. Such a large amount of magic was used to send her there, so much that is was probably a little excessive for what Celestia had in mind at the time. But because it was only Celestia using them, they were most likely not nearly as powerful. This would offer an explanation as to why Celestia did not simply transform her sister back into her old self. Nightma- I mean Luna probably used this excess magic to... create Twilight. AS FOR THE CONCEPTION OF THE MARE HERSELF, All beings are made up of matter and all matter can be broken down into MANY MANY MANY atoms. What is stopping her from transforming the atoms of the comet/falling star/asteroid into a small child? It's all a matter of rearranging the Electrons of the atoms which apparently is a piece of cake in Equestria considering Twilight herself (accidentally and partially) turned both a frog and a bird into an orange... which were still alive. While Luna was not transforming a living thing, It does not mean she could not have just filled her with magic, essentially giving her life, which would explain why she is so good at it...
And finally; how she survived the star crashing into the planet... yep um... I don't know...
(PST ze answer is magic!!)
And to all you people who actually took the time to read through this wall of a comment... you deserve a cookie.
To the Author: Very interesting premise, I quite enjoyed reading through this and formulating my own head-cannon for it. Well Done!
OH I almost forgot, for all of you saying that Rarity is related to Shining, IMPOSSIBLE! Well... not impossible but highly unlikely. Twilight;s parents said that they wanted a large family with lot's o foals. Given this bit of information I doubt they would have put Rarity up for adoption.
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4, 6, or 7 wod be interesting.
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The swaddling cloth is suspicious and no mention is made of a spaceship.
A couple of possibilities that I see are:
- Luna could have been pregnant pre-banishment and, seizing upon a decent chance (after all, anyone petitioning her must remember/know her or at least consider her aid worth seeking.) sent her daughter to Equestria.
- somehow, somewhere Luna got the necessary genetic material and got the process started and then sent Twilight to Equestria.
I thought Twilight's jab at Luna didn't really fit or make much sense. Luna didn't imply or mention any such expectation. All she did was mention that she had probably been party to the wish and as NMM probably had a hood in fulfilling it. Unless you mean Luna is actually her mother somehow.
Celestia and Luna should probably be tested to see if they match Twilight in some way other than being alicorns.
This is actually one of the most plausible "Luna/Celestia is Twilight's mother" premises I have read.
Nitpicks:
The first passage seems to say that there are six antigens, and that of them Twilight Sparkle has none. But the second passage is worded slightly differently, so that it could be that there are only six antigens and Twilight Velvet has three, or that three of six is just a proportion, like saying "five out of ten" to mean "fifty percent". The second would explain why Rarity has "four out of five" (and not four out of six) unless she's some kind of mutant. But that contradicts the first passage, in which there are definitely only six antigens. You should edit based on which interpretation is correct: there are only six, sixths is just the standard fraction unicorn antigens are talked about with, or there are usually six but Rarity is a mutant.
This should be just one sentence, with a comma after "recovery".
"comely" doesn't fit. "comfy", while probably true, doesn't seem to fit the context either. Perhaps "homely"? Also "humble", etc.
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Sweetie Belle
Chapter 1: 4,063 words
Story Total: 3,967 words
What sorcery is this?
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To be fair. If I'd been through half the crap they'd been through, not only would it not bother me - I would have been expecting something like that.
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Two people wishing for the same thing is still two wishes - the wishes are identical, but are still two separate wishes. Not everything has to be laid out technically to hold our hands.
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The great part about this is, if Twilight DID call Luna mom, that'd mean that Celestia, Night Light, and Velvet are her father. The lulz would be endless.
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You were saying, heretic?
Fix this discrepancy. Are there five or six points that can be matched?
Also, immunocompromised, like immunodeficiency, is one word, not two.
5527172 But the way it's written is loose enough that it allows for certain undisclosed, though somewhat unnecessary, factors to be theorized on but also solid enough that if you don't feel like going down that rabbit hole the story still feels complete.
Depending on how you count the wishes you could either have an unaccounted wish that presumably has to do with the origin of Twilight pre-crater/adoption or you simply have a magical mystery birthing her from nothingness. Either way leaves the issues dealt with in this story wrapped up nicely.
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That is kinda funny. I wanted to add a little thing about the father, but decided against it. Though here, there would be no bloodline manipulation, maybe more just a mixing of magics, intent, and will. Luna felt the wishes, did something to solve them all at once, and the Element swooped in at the end to supercharge everything.
You literally used the same cover art as Greatodyer's story, "Good Things Come" dunno if you'll wanna change it or not. *shrugs*
That was really interesting, great premise and good execution.
Twilight is Supermare, headcanon accepted.
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Lots of totally unmagical poisons affect just one specific part of the body. Destroying Angel will fuck up your liver and nothing else, but does so spectacularly well.
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I suppose that's what I get for using stock photography. I just did an image search for "shooting star" and thought that this one looked pretty. I might change it, but if I do, that will have to happen this afternoon.
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I have no idea. Maybe the chapter word count includes the author's note?
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The jab was intended as a way of showing that Twilight is still processing all of this. I also wanted a punchy line to wrap things up with which played equal parts in me picking it.
5527621 I'm willing to take a wild guess, and say that's exactly what he did too.