This story is a sequel to The Twin Students of the Sun.
Sunset Shimmer and Twilight Sparkle, along with Twilight's dragon son Spike, have finally moved to Ponyville! It's about a week after the Summer Sun Celebration, when they teamed up with their new friends Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Sweetie Drops, and Masquerade to save the world from Nightmare Moon's eternal night.
Now that they're (mostly) unpacked, it's time to catch up with their friends, meet the neighbors, and enjoy a welcoming party thrown by Dr. Pie, Doctor of Party-ology. And then Spike gets a message, containing the usual Grand Galloping Galla tickets. Ugh, so boring right?...girls? Why is everypony staring? Uh oh.
Episode 2 of the Sunsetverse, now open to more authors!
I have been waiting...
Great story!!!
You got 5 smiles
super happy beginning!!!
Yes! A new chapter!
I like the little details you slip in. Unicorn standards of beauty, the personality quirks of the group, the wavering tech levels and so on.
Also, I shall be co-opting 'fringe theorist'. In fact, I shall put it in my bio (I've been meaning to put something in that line anyway.)
Speaking of fringe theories, what is the third lost tribe? Changelings or Thestrals/noctorne/batponies?
5503891 *points to blogs* You can read about the tribes, real fictional and extinct.
5503905 Bah. It's been too long. Just long enough that it's fallen out of immediate memory, not long enough for it to claim a spot in referred memory. (I think that's the right term? General Memory, maybe?)
*goes for a refresher course anyway*
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SunsetXFlam?
I think that's should be shaking, unless Sunset is able to take off her head like a toy doll.
5503965 I thought Flim had the moutache?
5504788 nope, Flim is the clean shaven one, Flam is the one with the mustache
Starswirl gets all the (unicorn) mares, even the ones who weren't born yet when he was alive!
Sure, Bon Bon. You keep telling yourself that.
Even in this verse, Big Mac gets all the mares!
One small suggestion here: the word posthumous comes from the (late) Latin post (after) + humus (ground), so it wouldn't make sense to ponify it.
Other than that (and running through an(other) editing pass to get rid of the (remaining) grammar/spelling errors), this looks like a good start to the second fic in this verse, though. Keep up the good work!
5505238 What? Oh no, he's still alive. I meant it got rechristened in his honor at a later date.
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If Fluttershy shows up again, please do another 'Im sorry' off between her and Sunset. That had me laughing for ages.
Ok. Awesome start. I mean we have memetic sex god Starswirl, the fact that unicorn mares have a thing for facial hair, and deer. DEER! Mhmm. Yes. I am rather a fan of the world of Equestria haveing a large variety of sapient creatures and we shall leave it at that.
I like the world-building in this chapter as well, I think you really nailed the tech levels. I bet the Duke of Maretonia (with the goatee) cleans up in Canterlot.
I also love the whole "Mayor is trying to encourage tourism" angle. We've seen evidence of that on the show, and Ponyville is probably the only town in range for ponies from Canterlot to take a day trip to.
One question : Does this universe's Rarity have a different special talent? We've seen how fast she can gather gems when she wants, in fact I always figured digging up gems was how Rarity paid for the Carousel Boutique in the first place, but if she's a musician here maybe she doesn't have the gem-finding spell, so she has a lot more trouble earning bits.
5508356 The Duke is married, quite happily, for many years. Sorry ladies.
And no her talent is the same, other circumstances are involved. Also remember, this is Equestria. Gems ain't that valuable.
5508440 Sure, like 1% as valuable as earth gems, but still valuable enough to buy an electric hair dryer. Unless in your verse they can't easily be exchanged for bits?
5508529 Actually it's a lot worse than that. Remember when Rarity noted Spike's gem was "at least twenty carats". Carats was a weight used in the old days for determining the value of gems based on weight in addition to the type of gem. In our world, a twenty carat ruby is something you'd see as the centerpiece of an engagement ring. There, in order to get twenty carats worth of value/material, you needed a gem roughly the size of a perfume bottle. Gems are worth significantly less in Equestria than on Gaia.
5508965 Gaia? Anyway, 1% is probably generous, but we've seen Spike buy appliances and train tickets with a small fraction of the amount of gems Rarity brings in mining at Diamond Ridge.
Maybe the gems the girls gave Spike are different, more valuable gems than the ones buried near town (we only ever see Rarity use them like costume jewelry or to tip a bellhop), or maybe in this universe the Diamond Dogs have scared Rarity off.
Otherwise I would think doing some mining as a side-job a few days a week should easily handle her debts.
And after the comment you made in the last story, I am now reading Lyra's voice as BRIAN BLESSED.
Strangely, this somehow makes it more awesome, not less.
*shrug*
Also, I like what you've done with Dr Pie.
She forgot to add the poisonous spurs when describing Platypi.
What? They're from Australia, of course they're poisonous.
5511971 1) That's only the males.
2) Ponies think they sound stupidly mixed up enough already.
5512093 You now need to change Dr Pies pet from Gummy to a platypus.
A common typo that I find particularly annoying: "cloths" are pieces of fabric. "clothes" are what people (including ponies) wear.
That being said, I am very glad to see this continuing. I find your characterization entertaining and your AU world building intriguing.
" "Actually, I prefer mustaches by a lot." Sunset admitted, blushing slightly. "
She needs to meet this guy then.^_^
5532506 NO SHE DOESN'T!
Besides...
She's supposed to get involved with me.
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Ah, episode two! As others have said, some typos, but very nice worldbuilding and interaction, there. I love Lyra. :D
Glad I decided to dig into my Read Later shelf today. More of this setting is always a treat, especially the bit you've added to Star Swirl's legend. Very nice.
(I should note that Apple Bloom is two words, unless that's part of the AU.)
Looking forward to more, especially now that I'll be able to follow along. (The day Lyra and Trixie meet... I expect their collective bombast will be even worse than an Ursa Minor. But I'm getting ahead of myself.)
i really enjoyed the chapter and hope to read more soon
There's so many ways to world-build. I didn't know Sunny had a thing for mustachioed stallions. *coughFancyPantsandFlamcough*
Unicorns + facial hair fetishes = So many meme opportunities...
What's a "people"?
I've never seen any "tibes" in the show either.
There r plenty of errors. You may need a proofreader.
Something's missing???????????????
There is a very vissable mistake here.
Y are there so many errors?
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And you missed quite a few, like "rediculous", "cloths" when the Sunset is talking about "clothes", and Lyra saying "out apartment" instead of "our apartment".
5514771 Where's Perry?"
Oh My Gosh!! There's a sequel?!
Now I'll really have to finish up the other fic.
Sweet sequel. Glad to see this universe being expanded upon.
i know i commented on this chapter before and i am sorry to bug you i was just wondering if by any chance you know when you might post next chapter i understand that life can get in the way and i don't want to rash you or anything i just asking if you don't know that is okay and take your time on making a grate chapter
I really like this AU. Here's hoping for the next update soon.
I feel like it would be interesting for Equestria Girls to play out in the Sunsetverse. You could still have the bully character because the comics show that before Sunset, there was Babs and Sunflower!
6015713 Been busy with life, but I am working on it now.
Makes sense.
HAH!
Daaw. I do love the dynamic here, it's almost like sisters in a sense. Wait, fi they're sisters, and Spike is Twilight's son, then by that logic Sunset is his aunt. And since Celestia is like a mother figure to them, he has the more Badass Grandmother figure in all Equestria! Lucky dragon.
Good luck with that.
It'll take a LOT more than bear traps to stop Pinkie.
Whatever. Also, eXplAnations, not eplinations. Also, ponies, not people.
Not extinct, they'll be back in about 2 Seasons. Also, tRibe.
She's, got a point.
Neat. Also, Element, not Eelement and fRom not fom.
Hm.
Yes to the first one, no to the second.
Best pony.
So, Starswirl, is a unicorn sex symbol. Well then.
Yep.
This is why Rainbow is awesome. She stopped Sunset from having a mental breakdown a la Lesson Zero.
Heh. Also, her mother is an editor, explains why Twilight's so well read.
Huh.
This is a nice moment. Though I'm fairly certain it's Apple Bloom, 2 words.
Right, and it'll take them a while until they find the cloudwalking spell.
Good luck, Dashie.
Not that big a mouthful.
I see.
I see.
You hit enter when you should have hit space for Blue Note. Also, it's Roseluck, one word.
Possibly.
HEH!
We're not Were.
Whatever you say.
Probably not. Also, beaminG.
At least she's honest.
I see.
HA!
16, that's young.
VisIble.
Oh yeah.
Can ya blame her?
We can tell.
Hehe. Also, rolLed her eyes.
Huh, interesting.
It seems that no matter what, Big Mac gets all the mares.
Gotcha. Also, first off, not first of off.
Sounds like a nice house.
Hoofer Dam. Classy. Also, posthumously, not post poniously.
She's right.
RIdiculous. You ALWAYS ake that mistake. Also, I can think of one being even more ridiculous. Discord.
Man is she wrong.
HEH!
Oh dear.
Poor Rarity.
ClothEs.
Sweetie no Sweeties.
HAH!
Poor Lyra.
That was fun, may I have another? Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
Is this going to be continued :o?
Great work, can't wait for the next chapter.
Will there be an update? Awesome story by the way
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Still pretty busy?
my big question is will both sunset and twilight become alicorns,
as well as will the two of them fall in love
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In my opinion, it would make more sense if only Sunset became an Alicorn.
Because then Princess of Friendship would make more sense for Sunset.
3 yrs.
Im still gonna wait.
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i agree with you, i see twilight ore as princess of magic or harmony