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Let's see, humanized? check!
Author is Holy? Check!
Clop? Idk.
Reading later? As soon as i have the chance.
Take my name out. I never got to it.
My mother blindsided me and I'm still not even home yet, this was sent from my phone.
I've been gone since I last sent you a message.
Probably wont be home for another couple of hours.
I congratulate you for you're amazing result. The build up to this one final moment was simply superb.
Hoping to see more great works from you sometime soon.
Ah, another good job from Holy. Keep it up!
I just wished the romance wasn't so sudden.
Holy, you have become my (2nd) favorite author ever (only second because my favorite just wrote 2 amazing stories that just made me soo happy when I read them, but you are still fantastic!). Ever since I started reading your stuff starting at "Rainbow's Punishment" every single story you write I greatly enjoy. I'm very happy I found you, and here's to many more wonderfully crafted stories in the future! :D
Ack! It's adorable!
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As much as I never like to settle for second, I will definitely take it. Thanks a ton for sticking with me this long! I definitely think there's going to be a lot more to come.
Omgomgomg sequal
I can't help but add an extra line every time I look at the ending.
"It's nice to see you happy again, Luna." Celestia said, peeking over the edge of the bed.
It's way too late(early) for me to be reading this stuff.
Holy you just made my day thank you this is a very good story from my view others might hate It but i love it Keep it up.
---- Erebus
Yeah, I thought it was odd that Luna felt the way she did after her first night with the anon seeing how he actually got her to laugh, like she had no idea what to make of feelings towards the anon so when this came around
I smirked and thought to myself
Heh, sounds like me every morning.
5411470 Don't worry, you'll surpass him (her? I don't actually know their gender) very soon.
5411640 At least you weren't listening to this by the end
also this
enough said.
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I can read this type of stuff anytime.
So, is this humanized? The cover makes me suspect it, but since the description makes no mention whatsoever...
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I thought the human tag would be a dead giveaway.
5413272 It doesn't, neither the tag nor the description. Human doesn't mean the same as humanized.
You could just add "characters are humanized" and nobody will ever have to ask again.
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I think I'll just let it be a surprise.
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I think this is a pretty good song for this fic
And thanks :D
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Um...Okay?
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10/10 theme song
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Why thank you. :D I couldn't help but listen to this song while reading. It just fit so well.
All this needs is Tia walking in on them.
Ok so i just want to point out a few things: i vary rarely read second person fics, as they dont appeal to me. 2nd, i am very picky about what clop i read 99% of the time.
Now that thats out of the way, i want to say this: i loved this fic, it was great! In all honesty, i wouldnt have cared if this had clop or not, it had (in my opinion,) great story build up, and didnt rush things. The time gaps were believable and made sense. The clop, though short, was good. The way Luna's character is a mystery for so long is awesome in my opinion. There were a few errors but nothing major and they were few and far between! Even though this is a second person fic, i dont freakin care, i got over it!
Great story my friend, if your up for it, make a sequel!
New author found to pledge eternal servitude to? Yes!
I would love a sequel to this, this is perhaps one of the most romantic things I have read on here so far.
OMG. There aren't words to describe how amazing this is! the only part i hated was having to stop fapping to scroll down! XD LOOOOL
Whoa,really beautiful and romantic this fic of yours,Ms Holy :) Most of fanfics feel forced and unnatural,but yours just moves like a relationship is (obviously in an idealized setting with and idealized protagonist but whatever).I enjoyed reading it and also accompained by a good,and convinient,song as Clair de Lune.
Thanks for the amazing fanfic,I'm sure it will inspire me to write some by myself(an ability I'm still waiting to achieve)
14,843 of pure Luna love.
Thank you Holy!
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A second person fic that's actually GOOD?!
I think I've fallen in love with your Luna pic...
Holy...shit, this fanfiction actually made me shed a tear; the last fic that made me do that was "My Little Dashie."
In a way, I think the clop ruined the fic. You could have ended the fic before the clop started and I (and possibly, others) would've been happy with that.
I don't give a fuck what the story is about. I know that if Holy's name is on it, I am going to love it.
You might think that it is a bit foolish to just like something already because I saw a name.
This story only adds more evidence that I am not crazy for thinking this way.
THAT WAS SO WELL DONE! Congratulations!
lol, i'm female and i'm reading this. So then is just imagine a male version of myself.
Very well done and, might I add, quite believable!
A nice read; although you should get an editor to smooth out the constant switching between tenses. For me at least it was prominent enough to limit the enjoyability of this piece quite a bit.
I know it's a oneshot; but the servant-princess romance felt very rushed even though it was nice and sweet.
The clop was also nicely done in that it didn't go completely over the top and was well written; but it felt tacked on and the story would in my mind have been better without it. Or give it its own chapter where you could have explored Luna's 'catching up on things' more as a lead up. That was a fun idea that deserved more attention.
Hmm... three edited and more fleshed out chapters instead of one for a really great story I think. But then it would have been three times as long and I fully understand if one doesn't want to do that.
Still, as I said, a nice and entertaining read, thanks for sharing.
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I'm still trying to iron out my romance writing, but I'm glad you still enjoyed it. Thanks for the feedback.
'worse'
'A', not 'I'
Every lick and twirl of your tongue against you made you want her even more as well
Too many 'you's
Please, please, please! Make a sequel! There's so much more that you can write about!
5424800 You're welcome and thanks for not taking it the wrong way... am always a bit apprehensive of any reply to hopefully constructive criticism. Keep up the good work
Nice
this is great!
There is nothing near as good as smut with a reason.
I know of only about 4 people including you that can make a story work with smut.
The romance was beautiful, though I felt that the pacing of events was a bit meh for parts of it.
I felt that the part of her rejecting him was made a little too obvious too soon.
But I felt the connection between the characters, I felt that the sex meant something. That is the important part about making a story with porn, making it mean something, weather its meaning is love for a romance fic or some kind of lust/evil drive for a sad/dark maybe kinda >rape fic.
Until the next one!
This was an excellent story, don't get me wrong, my only complaint being that there didn't really seem to be any lead in to the sex, it just was bam, sex happening
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Indeed. I would have loved to see some bits and pieces of the weeks leading up to that. Even if it was just little two and three paragraph snippets.
moar!!!!!!!!!
i really like this, great story , usually these one shots are like 10% story 90% clop but this was great, good build up
stayclassy
wow a very cool story my friend, i love it
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