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What a beautiful Sunset.

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After what Sunset had done she never expected anyone to forgive her, but there was always someone willing to give her a second chance and accept her for what she was. Even before Twilight's friends bothered with her, there was one girl who Sunset could always rely on to be there.


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Very well written can't wait to see what else you come up with when it comes to Sunset shimmer.

Well they do say she loves company.

I really liked how I thought it was Maud for a while, but the lack of Pinkie Pie certainly tipped me off that it wasn't her. I almost made the connection that it wasn't someone we knew when she was "with" Fluttershy.

I also loved how we would never know if she was real or not.

Misery loves company.

...damn...
...talk about a powerful story...

I guess you're never too old for imaginary friends.

but ever time those words registered

every

Sitting on the edge of the roof, watching the Sunset

lowercase sunset

"You should go home" then walks her to a shelter. I love the pointed oxymoronic jab.

Her gesture didn't really make me feel better, but it made the scorn from everyone else hurt less.

I like this, esp as a running theme for the piece.

Most of all, I would cry because I was lost, I was scared, and I felt like nothing.

great 'cause she was told she was nothing. the heavy constant of being nothing is palpable

Fuck... that thing with the locket. It's beautiful that she was looking at herself and that she was important and appealing, but she just didn't know it yet.
this reminds me of a game that was philosophically about self-harm and the more you tried to make the other person happy, the more you were actually endangering yourself and now that I've finished the story, I know why

I like that the harsh, poignant sadnesses were in the beginning with sensory details about how cruel the students treated Sunset: it really offsets the continued droning solemnity of the story as a whole.
Honestly, with the whole running away premise (which seems a little odd, considering Best Friend convinced Sunset to stay at first) made me think her name would be more geared toward self-harm, like Blade or Suicide. And unfair! Describing Maud to a T and then going a completely different direction. :trollestia:

Wow, this was... wow. Excellent work.

Was this a tulpa? An imaginary friend? Nevertheless it was powerful.

As a sucker for tales of redemption, I can't very well not like and favourite this...

That voice in your head, the one that tells you you're worthless, that no one cares, personified? Now that, is a cool concept, one that I think you've barely scratched the surface here.

What if that voice in your head wasn't just in your head? What if it was something more? What if, it were a person? What is that person's life like?

A story from the perspective of a character like Misery could be fascinating.

Very clever

And I thought for sure her name was going to be Death.

The personification of Death.

Many have imagined her to be a cute girl.

This.. Is actually awesome! It probably sparked bits of emotion at the end, but overall; I like how this fits into the aftereffect of the first EG movie end, in an alternate way! :raritywink:

Well...
I have no words besides amazing, and emotional.

Damn… this is powerful.

Poor Sunset, but still beautifully written. Kept me trying to guess who it was the entire way through.

Holy hell this is really powerfull story really mouved me at the end but more i looked more it made sense

All new meaning to the words 'Misery keeps me company'.

Very well done.

Genius. Simply genius.

This is very well written, and something I'm sure many can relate to. Kept my interest throughout the entire oneshot and I love the surprise reveal at the end. BRAVO!

Comment posted by EnigmaMachine deleted Jun 5th, 2016

At first I thought her friend was Maud but then it started to seem weird and I thought, "What if her friend's imaginary?"

The ending told me whether I was right or not. And I was sort of.
I also liked your story so there's that.

I just realized exactly what her friend meant by "go with her" now. And I have to say it is profoundly heart-wrenching :fluttercry:

This is amazing. Utterly amazing. I love it. And that is all that I can say.
I grant you my highest award - the Holy Muffin. This is a story unparalleled to any other I've read.
~SoDF

Kept me guessing until that bit on the roof about what sort of a friend she was. Then I got an inkling, and it became more and more clear.

Still, really well written - nothing is given away too early, and we keep guessing for a good while before things become clearer.

This certainly deserves the fav and upvote :twilightsmile:

after the third meeting between them i thought she was death guess not. but you know how easy it si to think that? T^T

Damn, this is a really good allegory of Severe Depression and suicide. Well done man.

wlam #28 · Mar 4th, 2016 · · 34 ·

This is one of those really overwrought artsy things that try to be insightful and deep but are really only pretentious and have all the subtlety of a tree trunk to the face. Pure grade-A feature bait.

I figured out a little before everyone else what she meant by "Go with her"
The part about "another world" tipped me off.
And at the moment, she's one of my best friends. :applejackunsure:

It wasn't overly subtle, but it didn't throw anything in our face until the ending.

Though "I sat alone with her during lunch." cinched it for me.

6997985

What exactly was overwrought about it? I agree that it wasn't the most subtle of messages, but overwrought? Where do you get that from?

My best friend's name was Misery.

Literally, my first thought was Cave Story. Not even kidding. :rainbowderp:

This was... um... :fluttercry:

Objectively there's nothing wrong with it that I notice. Subjectively, it feels really hollow... yet vague. I almost agree with the downvoted comment a few rows down, but it was much more critical.

Eh, this probably just isn't for me. Good work, though.

6997985 Big news. Nobody gives a shit. Did you enjoy it?

Well, this was dark and deep.

Have an upvote.

I cannot say I "liked" this but it was very well written. Generally I don't like sad stories I suppose....it's true!
I sorta figured out (it wasn't too hard) that this "friend" wasn't much of a friend and initially thought it was the personification of death, or in this sense, depression & suicide, and I wasn't too far off point. I can believe Sunset felt like this often. I mean, she holds the record for MLP's fastest conversion...besides Starlight Glimmer but she has the most character development so far to date who isn't part of the Mane 6.

Well done, Holy.

EDIT/P.S: Well done on getting two stories in the feature box...at the same time!

Really? Nobody has posted this here yet? Fine; I'll take the honors...

Eh, is pretty much all I have to say about this. I pretty much called what the state of Sunset's friend would be from the second day... though I'm not sure if that's a stigma that comes with being associated with something that was more predictable than having to shit like a bullet train after eating too much curry.

The one thing I thought that was actually clever was the dark implications of what Misery meant by inviting Sunset to "leave" with her. but that's pretty much the one gem to be had, and even that is somewhat diminished in value by how the entire story is told in past perfect tense, thus making all these pivotal conversations less engaging to the reader since we're essentially being given Sunset's cliff's notes on them after the fact as opposed to being witness as they play out in real time; it creates a disconnect when an audience is being spoon-feed a story instead of getting to take some part of it. Had I the editing reigns on this, I would have recommended a dramatic overhaul by converting the entire story into simple past tense of events ongoing in real time, and then flesh out all the scenes so the reader is ostensibly right next to Sunset as these moments occur; getting the same invitations to traverse the same tenebrous and insidious paths that Sunset is being coaxed to walk. Yeah, it'd be longer, but more time to develop a scene can be advantageous... though now that I think about it, that would unfortunately mean having to put up with more of Sunset getting more shit from the student body than a plumber...

Speaking of which, this story just brings up a question I've never gotten a good answer for; why the Hell doesn't Sunset just transfer schools? She's been ostracized and vilified by nearly everyone who has so much as heard of her... and for good reason, so why put up with the contempt that is now inescapable from trying to stay at CHS? Hell, Sunset is a former student of an immortal alicorn; why the fuck is she even still going to high school?

... Oh yeah; because spin-off series/rip-off of another financially successful franchise set in a high school that Hasbro waged would be a hit just because they counted on fans of the original series to support anything with the world "pony" stamped on it.

And they were totally fucking right.

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- Christian 'I Dub Thee "Unforgiven"' Harisay

As someone who's been struggling with depression over the years, I think this actually describes it really well. Nice work!

That was not at all the ending I expected, I had thought that the other person was the human world's Sunset.

It really speaks to the power of pain/anguish/misery/etc. when the whole time I was under the impression that for some reason the original Sunset wanted to control the other through an abusive relationship.

6999537 That sounds like a fucking great idea, though. :raritystarry: If I take it and run, I'll point back to here.

Until I got to the end, I though her friend was death, and "going away with her" was a metaphor for suicide. Either way, great story.

At first I was like, "hey, it's Maud!"

And then shit. Shit. I figured the hallucination or manifestation of her depression. Euphemism for suicide. Cold, unfeeling, always lurking just around the corner.

So yeah, Maud.

But seriously, hot damn son. Well played.

Wow. That was deep.

This was a surprisingly entertaining read. I kept hovering about not sure if I would sit and read it, but I'm glad I did.

I'd love to get some insight about Misery's time with Fluttershy. I'm curious to see how that came about.

I haven't had a story make me cry in a while. I'll be honest, I suffered through depression before and you wrote the most graceful representation of what it's like. Amazing job.

Impressive. Powerful. Loved it.

Wow, just wow.... last sentence sent goosebumps everywhere and actually made tears come to my eyes, not sure exactly why, and that's one of the biggest compliments I'll ever give an author (the tears in my eyes thing) since not a whole lot really strikes me that way, I rarely cry at TV shows, video games, or stories since they just generally don't have the right things to bring my emotions out like that... good job author

Comment posted by Atercaela deleted Mar 5th, 2016

Absolutely awesome! Very fun read! Was not expecting the end.

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