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The Story Man

I'm posting some of my stories from the /fb/ general on /mlp/ and I'll be writing some other stuff from time to time.

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Yah anther wonderful job I loved it my good sir u are like my number one fan on this sight excapt Visual pony u are awesome

Well shit, you're one fast reader.

5089667 yup read it when it comes out and downloaded it on my iPod for shits and giggles to read for fun when I'm boared

One small grope for man...
One giant sexytime for mankind.

Troll Celestia is best Celestia.:trollestia:

yez this story good

This is some good word porn

....that moment when fics like this have just become something to skim when no new fics or updates have come out :facehoof:

Alternate ending:

While they were having sex, they accidentally activated the school intercom.


The story was sweet, adorable, and incredibly hot.

That last line, though...:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

5090038 Not sure if it's good or bad times....

5090264 THAT is amazing.

Snuggly #17 · Oct 3rd, 2014 · · 23 ·

Congrats for appealing to the lowest common denominator, on your way to the feature box.

Exemplary effort, my good sir.

“All the guys go after her because she’s all huge. Nobody goes after flat-chested me when there’s her around,” she says defeatedly.

*stares in disbelief* Did C cup become the new A when I wasn't looking? Really? This is . . . what?

Too bad it's against the rules to sleep with your superiors.

Going by this, it isn't against Da Rules to sleep with an inferior.

What's a conspiracy?
Didn't really plan on playing to anyone. This was the result of a random request on /mlp/. The exact request was "something with a tired Luna", and so this happened. I am just converting these stories after all, I mostly write for /mlp/.
She's using hyperbole cause she's jealous.
Or maybe you're supposed to sleep with equals?

5091884 So you appeal to their lowest common denominator.

Gud jawb.

Of course, how else am I supposed to earn all this money and build a pool made of gold?
Remember, only sell-outs do requested stories.

she's on the smaller end of the breast size scale, probably a C cup at best.

C isn't small... :pinkiehappy:

“Coffee,” Luna says with a large, fake smile as she holds up a cup.

“Yes, coffee,” you repeat and hold up your own.

COFFEE! NO SEXY TIMES HERE! YUUUUUUUUP! *glances around nervously* Just coffee! :twilightsheepish::twilightsheepish:

5091963 atleast you're honest :)

That was some hot coffee

Wow, it's getting easier and easier to to get a clop story featured every day. In my honest opinion, this story wasn't bad per se, it just wasn't too engaging. Firstly, the second person POV is a major crutch, and that really turns me off. Generally speaking, it's better to write about someone of your own creation than to have the reader imagine themselves into the plot. The overuse of the words "you" and "your" gets tiresome after about three paragraphs.

In addition, the author abuses saidisms like it was going out of style.

"Somthing somesthing something!" character said, doing an action.

Character did an action. "Something something something!

The examples above will flow better most of the time. Trust me.

Don't combine the two, either. It's redundant to write thigs like

Character did an action. "Something something somehing!" (s)he said. [BIG NO-NO]

By stating that character did an action, the readers automatically assume that whatever dialogue follows will be character's words.

Hope this helped.

story man. don't let me down here

Admittedly, the title was pretty clever. :twilightsmile:

5092021 In real life? No. But in the equestria girls universe? The average size is probably somewhere around large Cs to small Ds.

“Before I go--” Celestia says, quickly poking her head back in, bringing the attention of the two of you back to her. “Next time you ‘make coffee’ in the office, you might not want to leave some on your face

As soon as I read aloud and saw the 'face' part. I immediately went, "Ohhhhhh, fuck..." :heart:

Love this story! Wish a chapter two was out.

5092756 It was okay. I've seen similar titles composed of a, more or less, dirty pun on the character's name.

Huh? What do ya mean? I sae the movie, and every girl looked like they had C cups, then again, it's been a while since I saw the movie AND I am not know by my memory

5091018 More like "You had sex in your office, didn't you Luna?"

So long as no one comes in absurdly early

My school starts a t 0700 hours but I used to come a around 0600

Loony lovegood, Luna lovegood...

Is this from Harry potter?

The chapter name is a little nod to HP, yes.

5093619 True, but those girls were all still in high school, breast growth usually end when you're 18-21 years old.

Ha... I get the title... :P


Great story.

Not really.
I have read all the books, but that was a few years ago.

Great clop, and that ending made me smile, too bad its a one-shot

he he he my only thought at the end was :trollestia:

Nice one once again^^
I'm a little late with my comment this time

Um.......Shouldn't that be the first man ON the moon..?

Since Luna is referred to as "the Moon" in the title it translates to "First man in Luna". :ajsmug:

If they don't have bad luck, but I will give to you that one

I be like "I'm sorry Celestia, but flat is justice!"

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