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Kodeake


I read. I write. I edit. I Twidash. But above all else, I'm just a regular guy. Shoot me a PM if you have a question.

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She asked me over to her house today, told me she needed to talk to me. Of course, being the awesome marefriend that I am, I rushed right over to see what she needed. But no matter what I did, I never would have been prepared for what she told me. My marefriend... Twilight told me she was getting married in a couple months.

And it's not to me.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 67 )

This is good. :pinkiehappy:

No no no...good isn't the right word. :rainbowderp:

Great? :applejackunsure:

Wait! I got it! :rainbowhuh:

Phenomenal! :twilightsmile:

"First part of a two part one-shot."
My mind is broken

For some reason the whole time I was thinking: Twilight, marry the noble, Rainbow, kill him during the honeymoon, blame it on Blueblood, get him executed, then celebrate with an illegal marriage, presided over by Princess Luna, live happily ever after.

My ideas are dumb, yours aren't.

hate those stupid laws, but i honestly couldn't see celestia doing this.
but eh as long as it has a happy ending ill give it a thumbs up.

Only thing I really noticed was what seemed like some pretty rapid switching between past and present tense. Then again, English isn't my best language, so I may just be confused. Other than that, it's a great concept, and I can't wait to see where it goes!

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Ugh, I hope you're just wrong about that. I don't normally write in more than one tense in a single story, but with how I did the timeline I had to, and I may have screwed it up a bit. I'll read it over and make sure.

4291800 like I said, I'm not good with English, especially imperial English, which most of any formal writing is based upon. So I might be wrong as well.

Wow Kodeake I'm enjoying the suspense of waiting to read where this goes.

Heh heh it is kind of fun to think of seeing Twi possibly unapologetically defy Celestia in some way. I'll see. Yay Twidash. :pinkiehappy:

Deyum! This sounds deeeeeeeeeeeeeeep! Gonna read this asap! Any word on if you're gonna continue UOW, btw? Just wondering.

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The plan was to finish my contests, write Of Sky and Snow to completion, then focus on UOW. Unfortunately, I got hit with a serious case of writer's block and... well, this happened.

Why not just use the EoH as an excuse to make RD a Noble, let the two of them date for a while and then marry?
It's much better than the current situation, that's for sure...

4293001 Any way I can help things move along?:pinkiesmile: I've taken to habit of offering help to everypony, whether they need it or not.:applejackunsure:

wait...if there is a loophole that says you only need to marry once, then what about divorce? is that not allowed by the laws, or in Equestria at all? I'm not saying there can't be a perfectly logical reason why its not an option, but I'm surprised Dash didn't bring it up

Im liking this. Alot.
However the result of this objection could end terribly for both rainbow and twilight.
I look forward to the next chapter.:twilightsmile:

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I can see that in my head now...
:trollestia::I now pronounce you husband and wi-
:twilightsmile::Alright! Let's get a divorce!
Noble: Excuse me?!
:twilightsmile::I only need to marry once, right, Princess Celestia?
:trollestia::Yup.
:twilightsmile:: Yay! *turns to noble* Goodbye, f**k you, have a nice life!

Wouldn't she marry the oldest guy she could find? Or just make Dash a minor noble of some sort; she has the connections, surely.

Kodeake, I love your stories, but the cliffhangers just kill me.

This was a good story and look forward to the epilogue and Canterlot nobility? YOU CAN GO SUCK IT YOU STUCK UP BITCHES! :rainbowlaugh:

Nice... good plot twist there, more intricate than most one shots in my opinion, this could be a very good story, with the outraged nobles, the couple defending their position, etc.

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Damn it, now I want to make this thing into a full story. I already have enough stories to work on....

I concur with VamDash on the subject of the nobility :derpytongue2:

I should have seen the whole Rainbow becoming noblility thing coming. I half expected Twilight to give up her crown to be with her.

I like this, it was fun and cutesy, and my only complaint is that it could be much much longer! :D

Meh. Typical TwiDash shipfic. I've seen plenty. This story's nice and all, but I've seen so many Twidash ships that it's getting old. It's one of the three most common ships in the fandom, the other two being Appledash and Twilestia. Plus, that seems to be just about all you write. I suggest branching out a bit.

I must admit, though, that I'm probably not the most unbiased person regarding this kind of story. I never have been a big fan of shipping for the most part, so keep that in mind when reacting to my comment.

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A: If you're not a fan of shipping, don't read shipping. It's that simple.
B: I've read just about every Twidash I can find on this site, and I've only something similar to this once.
C: I will write whatever I want to write. I like and enjoy writing Twidash, so I will continue to write Twidash.

4296303 One writes what makes him/her happy, and as far as I can conclude, Kodeake enjoys writing TwiDash the most. And I don't object honestly, TwiDash is, as you said, one of the most common shippings, so as long as he's happy writing his TwiDash stories, he'll be making quite a lot of people happy too.
And last but not least, you can never have enough of TwiDash :trollestia:

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A) Shipping itself isn't the problem. I've seen some amazing shipfics out there. One of my favorite stories is a shipfic. The problem is the OOC behavior that most shipping writers portray that bothers me. The shipping often feels forced when character development isn't used to explain things. Twilight is a bookworm and would likely reference at least a dozen guides about romance and dating. Rainbow Dash has an intense dislike of showing sappy emotions, especially in public.

B) The similarities I see don't involve plot. The similarities I'm talking about are the characterization issues I mentioned earlier, but it's not the worst I've seen. At least you know when to ship and when not to ship. Some writers can't tell the difference.

C) If that's what you enjoy, then go ahead. You don't have to stop-- maybe try throwing in another ship alongside it. Perhaps a love triangle to make things interesting. Just making some suggestions. It's up to you whether to follow them, to not follow them, or to pretend I don't exist, though I would, of course, prefer you to not choose that third option. That would be mildly annoying.:derpytongue2:

The premise of the story sounded entertaining. The story itself was mildly entertaining, but my personal tastes limited my enjoyment. In fact, now that I think about it, I think I'll give this a thumbs-up because it's only a matter of opinion that stopped me.

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The premise that Twi would research everything and that Dash doesn't like to show emotion has been in the majority of Twidash's I've read, and even in some that I've written. They're used to often they've become cliche within the ship, so I'm not sure how you figure most people don't use it.

And you bring up a point that a lot of people who argue against hipping use; OOC.

When it comes to romance, literally nothing is fully OOC. Sure, some things don't sound quite right for a character, but the fact is we have no real idea how a character from the show would react in a romantic situation, because there simply aren't any romantic situations in the show (Talking pre season four and that mess with the hipsterXRarity, and ignoring SpikeXRarity because that's not romance)

All we have is an assumption based on the character traits we know about. Would Twi research? Maybe. But last I checked, she didn't research friendship before calling the others her friends. Oh, and maybe she did research; this all takes place at the earliest three weeks since they'd have gotten together.

Would Dash be unwilling to publicly display her emotions? hell no. We've actually seen her do it in the show. She downplays it, but she does do it. She shows, from time to time, "sappy" feelings.

And really, in the situation I've created, I think that's okay for public displays of affection from her.

Love it, love it, I will definitely save this one.
:heart::twilightsmile::rainbowkiss::heart:

4296554 Okay, I can concede that point. I've heard love makes people do strange things. Personally, I wouldn't know because I'm about as romantic as a rock. I'm not a very emotional person. Not as unemotional as, say, Mr. Spock or Tom the Boulder, but I've always had some difficulty with it.

Great, I've been having a serious discussion for too long now. Too much seriousness makes me uncomfortable. I need something fun. Quick, imagine someone getting a pie in the face! :pinkiehappy:

...Ah, that's better.

please to an epilogue with the new wedding and i like this chapter

One of dem days by part 2 fallacy. The end reminded me of that song hardcore

Wow Kodeake my hooves applaud. :ajsmug:

This was an interesting premise and, while I wish it had been longer, you certainly did it justice. Light and fluffy, like always; good job, Kod.

That said, a common problem I've noticed with a lot of your stories is an abundance of homonym errors. For example: in this fic, he have "sink" and "sync."

"Sink," quite simply refers to that rounded water holder with a faucet and drain, normally used for dish/handwashing or cooking.

"Sync," which is short for "synchronization," means doing, operating, performing or acting in tandem—which I'm sure is what you meant when you were describing the kiss. :twilightsheepish:

Other, simpler errors, like "there, their, and they're" or "your and you're" are sporadically placed throughout your work. Don't fret though, homonyms can be very difficult; when I was taking my AP English class, my teacher was constantly tirading students. A good trick you can use is to reread your sentence to ensure it makes sense. Another trick is to look up the exact definition of a questionable word.

You're doing awesome, Kodeake; you've come a long way and you should be very proud of yourself. I can't wait to read more from you—and I really can't wait to see how you evolve over the next year.

4298651
I need to yell at my editor.... or get a new one... a lot of people seem to want to help me when it comes to that....

Yeah, I go back and read over some of my older stuff from time to time and see a lot of that. Since I've never had any actual writing courses, I'm pretty much self taught when it comes to these things. Hell, I only learned the difference between the 'there's through reading. I finally got then and than down though....

except the lavender unicorn still staring at me.

First time writing alicorn Twilight? :trollestia:

In all seriousness this was an enjoyable little read. Light, fluffy, and I always enjoy the little "I object!" moments in stories like these. The last minute declaration of love as the object of a character's love is about to leave/get married/whatever may be a tad cliche, but it's cliche for a good reason (meaning it's always good and you did it well here).

My only tiny complaint is that I would have liked to see more of Silver Bit. You describe him as a snooty, pretentious, and arrogant ass (much like Blueblood I'm assuming), and he was obviously meant to be the target of the readers' hate. I personally would have liked to see him say/do some things that make him out to be more of this pretentious ass that he is simply for the intentions of being able to channel more of my hate onto him. That being said, this story is great and works either way. A perfect short story to come back to after a weekend spent at the Calgary Expo.

I don't even know what to say.... That objection part. I've jumped up and shouted "Bravo!" Then applaused. Even though I've been the only one in the room while reading that story.

It was a good fix I liked it. One question though if noble is just a title and the nobles don't contribute to anything why should celestial care what the nobles think if she changes the law. She's the leader of what is basically a dictator ship.

Awww. No big wedding chapter for Dash and Twilight that is public to all of Canterlot to rub it in the nobles' worthless snouts... if they could get it that far up the nobles' flankholes or high enough in the sky to reach their snouts?

When this law was first proposed, why on Earth did Celestia and Luna allow it?

so ... you will really make an epilogue? I just loved this fic :twilightsmile::rainbowdetermined2:

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I might write a short epilogue. I may also write an entire sequel with the consequences for this and the new wedding. It's an idea I've been toying with. Won't happen for at least a few more weeks though.

Oh buck it. Have a fav and a like. I love this type of story.

This was cute! A little rushed in my opinion, but enjoyable all the same.

One problem I noticed: "as our mouths open in sink"

Sink should be sync. Pretty funny error acctually! :pinkiehappy:

Golly gee, if only RD had ever done anything important enough for Celestia to be able to justify elevating her to the peerage.:ajbemused:

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Yes, because the entire point of this story was to surprise you and to take a direction no one would ever see coming. :ajbemused:

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