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Metool Bard

A weaver of tales who enjoys a good story. What more is there to say, really?


Being the ever-helpful assistant that he is, Spike has made reservations at the Far-Afield Tavern for himself and his friends. Unbeknownst to him, however, fate had other ideas. So while Rarity is busy turning her hotel room into a sweatshop, Spike is sitting around in the tavern wondering where everypony is.

It eventually gets to the point when the restaurant cannot hold onto his reservations anymore. But just when he's about to head back to the hotel and write this off as a crummy day, he receives an invitation to join some famous ponies for dinner. Even more bizarre, the pony extending this invitation is someone he hasn't spoken to in ages (in fact, they barely talked at all). Normally, he'd be skeptical about this, but after a long day of hauling luggage and chasing birds, he figures it's best not to look this gift horse in the mouth. After all, business partners can be friends too, right? Right.

Inspired in part by xjuggernaughtx's fantastic fic, The Carrot Dog Fight.

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I liked seeing Spike associate with three of them. It showed once again that not all refined and upperclass ponies are stuck up

This is nice, you should make more stories with Spike interacting with these three.

4114707 Honestly, I wouldn't know how to go about doing that. After all, it's not very often that Spike crosses paths with these ponies. :twilightsheepish:

Always nice to see Spike get a little respect for a change. :moustache: :twilightsmile:

Only one problem I see:
When a character's dialogue s followed by an attribution of who said it and how, you have to treat the thing as a single sentence. If the dialogue would end with a period, you use a comma instead, and do not capitalize the first word after the closing " unless it's someone's name. You've got the second part of that rule down pat (no capitalization errors that I can see), but you're doing the first part wrong, I'm afraid:

"No, that's probably not a good idea." he said. (no...) :facehoof:
"No, that's probably not a good idea," he said. (yay!) :yay:

"Oh, stop being such a stick-in-the-mud and let the kid enjoy himself, Photo." said Sapphire, eating a bit of her salad. (nnnope.) :eeyup:
"Oh, stop being such a stick-in-the-mud and let the kid enjoy himself, Photo," said Sapphire, eating a bit of her salad. (extrasplendiferousuperiffical–) :pinkiehappy:
(Heh, sorry, got carried away there.) :pinkiesmile:

4114915 Yes, I'm well aware of this. It's because part of my brain keeps telling me that sentences don't end in commas. As long as I have been writing, I've never been able to work around this. It's also why I'm probably never gonna be featured on EQD. :twilightblush:


SECONDED! A sequel is mandatory! MANDATORY!!

Heh -- just try to remind yourself that the sentence isn't ending with a period, because the sentence hasn't actually ended yet. :twilightsmile:

Remove the quote-enclosed portion, and see if what remains can stand on its own as a complete sentence:

"Y'know, if you wanted to make a joke at my expense, that was in pretty poor taste." he said, his expression becoming deadpan.

he said, his expression becoming deadpan.

This can't stand on its own, therefore it must be part of the prior sentence; therefore, the prior sentence doesn't end after the word "taste". :twilightsmile:

4115031 Yeah, it's easy to just say that, but honestly, I don't know where I would go from here. This is really just meant to provide an explanation as to where Spike was during the events of Rarity Takes Manehattan. I'm not entirely sure how that warrants a sequel. :unsuresweetie:

4115033 Hmm. I'll try to keep that in mind, although it is a bit reflexive for me to ends sentences with a period, even if they are in quotation marks. But it is a habit I need to break, and I think that's sound logic to help me break it. So, thanks. :twilightsmile:


Now if you'll excuse me, I have some major editing to do. :twilightsheepish:

Remember that episode where Pinkie Pie found out that she's supposedly related to the Apple Family?
What would happened if the Sparkle family found that Twilight Velvet has a sister who happens to be a fashion famous photographer?

4115581 A better question is what does that comment have to do with this story? :trixieshiftleft:

"That's not the worst of it, though," said Photo Finish. "I took a picture of Ms. Polomare's line before she showed it to Ms. Hemline. They were the most bland dresses I had ever laid eyes on. I couldn't pay my models to wear such ordinary outfits."
"You suspect some sort of foul play, then?" asked Hoity Toity.
"That's my best guess," said Photo Finish with a shrug. "But what's Rarity going to do about it? It's just going to be her word against Ms. Polomare's."

So Photo Finish suspects that Suri is cheating and has photographic evidence to back it up...and she doesn't care to do anything about it. Alright, Photo :coolphoto:

4117203 Evidence isn't the same thing as proof. Suri could've disputed the validity of the pictures and have gotten Photo Finish in trouble. I don't think Photo Finish wanted to risk that simply based on a guess. :applejackunsure:

But Rarity's outfits had ZE MAGIKS! She has to save them!

But yeah, I suppose that is a good point.

This was nice!
This should be the new thing. When, Spike, is cut/or gone for a long period of time, there should be a story about where he was.:moustache:

Great work! We need more stories like this for, Spike.:twilightsmile:


This should be the new thing. When, Spike, is cut/or gone for a long period of time, there should be a story about where he was.

That can pretty much apply to any sort of headcanon, but you're certainly not wrong there. :raritywink:

Very nicely done as always.:pinkiesmile:

I like this, a simple Slice Of Life, getting a bit more insight into the personalities of photo, Hoity and Sapphire, it's entertaining.

Short, sweet, and simple. I especially love your portrayal of Photo Finish!

6109237 Yeah, Photo Finish was surprisingly fun to write. Especially while playing her off of Sapphire Shores. :eeyup:

I'm glad you enjoyed this little tale. :twilightsmile:

6109782 I imagine so!

And thanks for writing it. :twilightsmile:

Quite an interesting tale that expertly explains where Spike was at that time and one that was both believable and enjoyable.

Most Excellent.

6465951 Well, that was my intention. On that end, I'm glad I succeeded. :scootangel:

It's odd:
Despite having several problems with Rarity Takes Manehatten (enough for me to consider it one of Rarity's weakest episodes), none of them involved the question of where Spike was during Rarity's breakdown...
I don't know if it's because I don't feel strongly about Spike, or I've just gotten numb to him getting the short end of the stick a lot of the time.

A very well-written story which explains Spike's location and actually adds something to three ponies who could use more stories to their names. I really like how everyone was displayed here and it actually made me want to make a story of Spike getting to know celebrities like Hoity, Photo, Octavia, etc. I mean I doubt you just randomly come across ponies like Hoity anywhere in Ponyville so he had to have been in Canterlot and actively sought him out, just playing it off like chance but also a pony like Hoity who seems to be famous wouldn't listen to anyone just because. I always saw Spike having pulled strings to get to him. I find that idea funny.

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