I do piano, ballet, and gymnastics. I've got the cutest bunny EVER named Pepper Cinnamon Bun (Peppy for short). I am addicted to MLPFiM so much to the extent that I get banned from it. Lol.
Hoity Toity and Photo Finish are both very stubborn ponies, and so how will a relationship work between them? It will take big sacrifices in pride, for both of them. They will definitely have fights, but hey, you can't really control who you love, can you?
This is my first ever fanfic, so criticism (but not too harsh please?) will be appreciated.
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Zhis is my virst story so iv zhere is anyzhing vrong vith it, please zell me.
German accent makes it hard to read. Story is a little confusing. Not enough action. Punch me all you want...
good to see i am not the only one who sees these two togather.
This is actually a good story. I had no trouble reading Photo Finish's accent (probably 'cause I'm 52% German). You got yourself a fave.
1408591 Thanks! And cool, I got myself 52% German commenter!
Okay guys, I edited this one a bit, so please check it out again! You don't really have to though, just italic thoughts, a bit more sense-ical (not nonsensical, mind you) stuff, so I think it's better now.
Continue...
*lying*
feels a little OOC.
I'd suggest replacing both "both"s with "we"
Other than that, good job!
I'm about as German as the previous commenter and the accent here is still a stumbling block. Not impossible to read, but it's tough. Largely ruins the flow.
1657672 Oki-Doki-Loki! So how about I drop the accent, and tell it in 3rd person? Then PF only will have an accent when she's talking. How about it?
I like this! There needs to be more! Made me smile, laugh, and freak out.
I look forward to reading more of it!
4 Derpy's for you!
MOREEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
No updates in a while. . .
It has been two years since you last updated. Excuse me m'am, are you dead?