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Metool Bard

A weaver of tales who enjoys a good story. What more is there to say, really?



While lounging around Twilight's castle and airing some friendship-related grievances, Discord stumbles across a magic book containing letters from an inter-dimensional pen pal. As it just so happens, this pen pal also had sinister designs for Equestria, but was quashed by the Elements of Harmony. What's more, she's made amends since that day, and she's now Twilight's friendship student. Eager to bond with someone who can relate to him on a personal level and grow into a better draconequus, Discord packs his bags and heads off to the human world with Twilight's semi-blessing. His mission: Befriend Sunset Shimmer.

However, his plan has a bit of a snag. See, Sunset hasn't been keeping up with Equestrian events, and she never got the memo about Discord turning over a new leaf. As such, she believes that his sudden appearance doesn't bode well for Equestria, Canterlot High, or herself. Not only this, but the Sirens are privy to Discord's return as well, and they see this as a golden opportunity to bounce back from their own recent defeat. Well, Adagio does, anyway. Sonata doesn't want to live in a world that makes no sense, and Aria would rather maintain what little dignity she has left by not getting involved (or so she claims).

So while Discord is trying to earn Sunset's trust and show her what a good friend he is now, Adagio is trying to get in on an evil scheme that doesn't exist. And while that is going on, Sonata is appealing to the Rainbooms behind Adagio's back, hoping that they'll make Discord go away. With so much miscommunication thrown into the mix, you just know that hijinks are inevitable. Good thing Aria made popcorn.

Cover art provided by the amazingly talented Neighthirst.

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 722 )

Interesting premise so far. While I'm not exactly a fan of Discord, I do like how you're exploring his character and the character interaction between him and Twilight felt natural and well-written. I'm curious to see where this goes next. Great work as usual! :twilightsmile:

Oh my...this DOES promise to be intriguing...

Tracking for now, will likely fave after a few chapters.

Oh, my gosh, you have to update this soon! I've always been afraid/curious/excited about the idea of Discord going to the human world...Sunset's in for a shock!

...oh, hey, look, it's the idea I've had for two months.

Welp, Celestiaspeed, Bard. :twilightsmile:

The description sounds like this could be a really great story, but unfortunately there's not that much to judge in the prologue.

5271209 What can I say? Exploring Discord's character like this has always been fun for me. :twilightsmile:

5271258 That she is, my friend. That she is.

5271273 Well, you know what they say about great minds thinking alike and all that. :ajsmug:

5271274 The prologue is merely to set the stage. Things will get going soon enough. :raritywink:

5271273 LOL! Celestiaspeed instead of Godspeed. That was perfect. :trollestia:

We actually play croquet every Sunday night in my dreams using hedgehogs as balls and flamingos as mallets, but don't tell Fluttershy about it. You know how she gets about animals."

Oh god! Alice in Wonderland! It's been Soooooo long since I've seen the original!

EDIT: That ending though! :rainbowlaugh: Wow, Discord, impatient much? then again, I would be too, were I in his shoes. However, many years of Zelda, Command and Conquer, Metal Gear Solid, and lots of puzzles have built up my patience.....along with three younger siblings.

Looking good, but what's stopping Twilight from writing to Sunset to give her a heads up? It's easy enough to explain away, Discord's chaos magic interfering with Sunset's journal. Other than that, keep going! This looks very interesting.

5271466 For all Twilight knows, Discord is talking to Sunset at this very moment. Plus, even if she did write to her, it wouldn't matter, anyway. You'll see what I mean soon enough. :raritywink:

Oh this is going to be good.

How will the the people of the Equestria Girls universe react to Discord?

Will Discord keep his powers? Will he also have a human form, or stay in his normal form?


That description had me thinking this was going to be the best. This prologue? Great start. Loving the characterization, loving the pacing. It's pretty great.

A couple notes:

"I, guess that's the proper

These letters are kind of, personal.

Those commas do not belong.

For dialogue interruption, do not use a hypen. Use the em dash (—).

Color me intruiged. *Flash* THAT'S NOT WHAT I MEANT DIS- Huh, so that's what intruige is colored. Interesting. Anyways, I'll be watching. This definitely looks interesting so far.

5272390 The commas have always been something of a sticking point for me. See, I heard that in situations where there's a slight pause in the dialogue, an ellipse is more appropriate. However, the way I was taught, ellipses are meant to indicate that a sentence wasn't complete, not for a pause in dialogue. I feel like if I use that, someone will say that I'm misusing ellipses. Grammar is so confusing sometimes. :applejackconfused:

Also, I would use an em dash if I knew how to make one on my keyboard. As it stands, all I can manage is a segmented em dash using multiple hyphens, and I don't think that's the same thing. :unsuresweetie:


See, I heard that in situations where there's a slight pause in the dialogue

I'm not sure who told you that, but I'm pretty sure they're wrong. If there's only a slight pause in the dialogue, it's left as is. If there's a significant pause, use an ellipsis.

Google is your friend, ya know. If you do a Google search for "em dash," you can find one to copypaste. :raritywink:

Discord's queen my my does Adaigo have a thing for Discord?:pinkiegasp:

Will we see Discords human counterpart appear in this story?

5273441 I'm going to say no, if only because it would be very difficult to fit him into the narrative I have planned. Besides, I'm not sure what the human counterpart of the embodiment of chaos would be, exactly. :applejackunsure:

And the plot thickens to a boil. That's the correct phrase, right?

Awesome chapter, can't wait for the next.

Adagio is in for a rude awakening.

5273494 Some people tend to think that the human counterpart is either a janitor or a crazy science teacher that blows stuff up. :derpytongue2:

I'm just gonna be over ther with Aria, watching the inevitable show.

"I mean, I know I'm not exactly the sharpest lightbulb in the crayon box..."

Sonata, you are so cute! *pats her head*

"And when I rule this pathetic little world as Discord's queen, I'll get in both of your faces and laugh!"

ADAGIO! Okay, I have shipped you and your two friends with...pretty much everyone...but if you're going to seduce Discord, you need to know that I am a hard-core Fluttercord fan. Okay? Okay.

Next chapter next chapter next chapter!

5273494 The school janitor, obviously. :moustache:

"Quick! Jump over the water! Jump over the water!" Sonata chanted.

"What do you think I'm trying to do?!" Aria growled.

Nice PPG ref.

"Well, at least I don't have to dress up like a banana all afternoon!" Sonata retorted.

:rainbowlaugh: I hope Applejack washed that banana costume! If Aria knew whose cooties she was getting from it, she'd REALLY lose her shit!

Adagio smacked her forehead. "Don't you see? Discord obviously has plans for this world. If we can get in on those plans and help him out, he can give us our magic back, and together, we'll teach those Rainbooms a lesson they'll never forget!"

Wow...desperation sure makes one suicidally stupid.

And when I rule this pathetic little world as Discord's queen

:rainbowlaugh: OH MY GOD the delusions of grandeur on this one! Newsflash, Adagio: You are SO not his type...

It's hard to believe that Sonata is the only one of the Sirens making SENSE here. :twilightoops: (Well, at least going off the outdated info they have...)

you can make him a student or anything
He can be anything like in Equestria as he is a shapeless and ageless spirit

Good chapter! Very well-written.

I like where this could go. Have a fav.

Also, grats on the feature!

T-that's no true


The pieces are falling together. This is looking pretty good.

5273850 Whoops! Thanks for catching that, mate. :twilightblush:

You know I never really understood that headcanon. What about Discord suggests that he could or would spend his life cleaning and fixing things? He's, like, the anti-janitor.

I liked a recent story that had him as a schizophrenic art teacher who had recently spent three years in a mental hospital.

5273916 You've never watched Scrubs, have you?

an hour more in detention for trying to take over the world

I'll admit, that made me laugh out loud. :rainbowlaugh:
I liked how the Dazzlings were portrayed here. Their interactions were lots of fun and throwing Discord into the mix made it even more enjoyable. Excellent chapter. :twilightsmile:

"...Shimmer doesn't, know that you're, reformed," Twilight muttered, punctuating her thought with a great sigh. "Ugh, you could've at least waited for me to send a message to her."

Um, Twi, you have the book right there. Just send Sunset a page about Discord paying a visit and that he's okay now.

5274089 As I already explained, for all Twilight knows, Discord is talking to Sunset right this very second. And even if she could get a message out, it wouldn't matter, anyway. You'll see why later on. :raritywink:

hour more in detention for trying to take over the world

Wow. If only life was that easy

Up is down, black is white, and children are all spaghetti?

Discord would make it so that we'd have to walk on our elbows and play the piano with our ears, just for yuks!

ham sandwich grows out of your left pigtail and starts driving you around like a choo-choo train.

:rainbowlaugh: I could totally see Discord doing those things

I rule this pathetic little world as Discord's queen,

:rainbowderp: You have no idea what that sentence did to my brain

Great Story

Discord arrives: EVERYBODY PANIC!:raritycry:

Oh, dear god.

*smashes favorite button with chocolate rainmaker*

5273806 in the first movie he made a cameo as the janitor last I checked. :derpytongue2: But I like this discord far better, wonder if he'll meet his human counterpart like the reason why Twilight didn't bring her pony friends in the second movie.

there was no Discord in first movie, where did you get that information? Meghan herself dont want to make him into adult human and she made sure animated team wont even insert him as an easter egg in any movies.

5274854 Went and rewatched the movies, and could of sworn I saw him, but cant place where. Though a janitorial role would fit the spirit of chaos and disharmony remarkably well and it is the one job in the school that isn't shown. This combined with hundreds of preexisting ponies either being teachers or students here and that would leave Discord with either two roles as an draconequus immortal on par with Celestia. Janitorial or teaching. Teaching students seems a tad bit too orderly, no? Yet a lot more untold havoc can be found as the janitorial job unfolds. From flooding sinks to accidently turning off all the electronics in the school with a simple click of a switch or accidentally cut wire.

His main role in the series is being a trickster and prankster. He should become a student and school prankster who gets in trouble and detention

Pretty funny chapter, but shouldn't Discord get turned into a human upon entering this world rather than remaining a draconequues?

5275159 Trying to apply logic to Discord?:trollestia:

OK THIS is a dman good story.

More please!

This has great promise. You have a good feel for the characters and a great sense of humor. This chapter in particular actually feels like a cartoon, one of the old school ones with villains that are kinda stupid and not really terrible. Have a like and a fav.

One thing, you wrote "payed". To pay, in past tense, is "paid". "I paid my debt" or at the very least "I paid them a visit". At least I think that is how it is.

More please! Happy writing.

5275271 Oy, I really should invest in better fine-tooth combs. Thanks for catching that, mate. :twilightblush:


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