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The past always comes back to haunt the present, there is no escaping the inevitable. For decades, Celestia has kept a secret from her student. A secret she made out of pain, and through pain will be revealed for all to see; for Twilight Sparkle is the secret daughter of the Sun.

Now, there will be consequences.

Consequences, they come in all shapes and sizes for every decision. For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction. These words are lessons that Princess Celestia should know, bits of wisdom she practices in her rule of Equestria. How is it then, that when faced with a decision, she chooses the one that would inevitably bring the most pain? How is it that she couldn’t bear being recognized as the mother of her child? And why? Twilight Sparkle is about to find out.


Disclaimer: (I do not own the picture; Title Picture owned and designed by KitsuneHino; Source: http://mel-rosey.deviantart.com/art/By-my-side-364777307) (I do not own any of the characters, places, events, etc. outlined in this fanfiction, MLP FiM does under Hasbro, give them the credit.)

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Comments ( 659 )

I can already tell that this story is gonna be good! Please keep the chapters coming. :heart:

Nice !! Please more !! :heart:

i can imagine how pissed or shocked twi will be.

This sounds like it will be good, Twilight's reaction won't be good when she finds out but it'll sure be interesting.

cannot wait for more, if only the season 4 finale was sooner than now

Oh my stars! This was a good introduction, poor Twilight!
The feels! Fave for sure:P:twilightblush::trollestia::raritydespair::fluttercry:

Ohh this seems interesting and dammit that first chapter was sad

The only thing about this chapter that bothers me is the fact that Celestia doesn't actually knock on the door, that coupled with the fact that it seems apparent she wasn't expecting Twilight to start crying and I'm left wondering how Celestia expected the orphanage workers to know a foal had just been abandoned on their doorstep

4297564 DONT SAY THAT!!!! Then wed have to wait another year for more mlp :fluttercry:

*crosses arms and taps fingers* First off you better make a damn good reason why she would abandon her own foal like that, and 4298249 has a point.

4298249 Well since its almost universal that it is expected for Foals to eventually wake up and begin crying, Celestia didn't knock since the orphanage workers would appear soon after the crying started and be seen. Also, she expected to be out of earshot once Twilight started crying, have some distance between them. Celestia didn't expect for the crying to start immediately after she left.

the way you told this story was spot on, I would love to read more and I cant wait to mlp season 4 is done I \be waiting so please update when you can after the season is over and mega thanks for the awesome story.



p.s. it was a bit sad but it still was a great ch :twilightsmile::

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Celestia didn't expect for the crying to start immediately after she left

That's exactly my point. While there is a high chance that Twilight would start crying fairly quickly, Celestia had no guarantee of when, if at all. There is always the chance that Twilight could have been a heavy sleeper for a foal. I'm not saying that's the case, I'm just saying that there is a dissonant between the emotion your trying to have Celestia express, and her actions. Why would she take the chance that her foal could be left outside for who knows how long when a simple knock and dash would at least guarantee some response? It ruined the chapter slightly for me because the entire chapter basically focuses around how hard this is for Celestia and how much she obvious cares for her daughter, and then she doesn't knock and suddenly I'm drawn out the story.

4299132 I'm sorry you feel that way, but that is the way I wanted to write the scene.

but future chapters will not be updated until after the MLP:FiM Season 4 finale since some of the story dialogue and plot points will depend on it.

Hasbro never intended its show to cover any deep topics. (It's a show aimed at little girls) They also have a history of throwing past events out the window/tweaking character personalities when it suits a particular episode. You'd probably be better off making your own interpretation of Equestria, since you'd have more control over the "feels."

Not really dissing Hasbro, but if you are going to try to match your fic with the show word for word, then you're going to be tearing your hair out.

4299166
That is not a good answer. I didn't really have a problem with the scence, but he makes a good point, and saying "but I want to" is not a good way to respond to criticism.

Cheers

4299654 I'm sorry if you misunderstood my wording. I mean I had SPECIFIC reasons for not putting it into the scene, not just a whim. Sorry for the misunderstanding.:facehoof:

4299574 I do see your point, but there are some things I would not want to jump the gun on and see how the show plays out. I am not so strict as to be completely correct in regards to canon but I would tell you what I am looking for but that would reveal story plot points. I may press on regardless of the finale though. :twilightsmile:

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Ahh, that's good. Well, carry on then. :twilightsmile:

The basic idea has been done before but I have yet to see it done with this quality of writing. I cant tell yet if this will be good but it has potential and that excites me.
I shall be watching this one closely.

Really good chapter. This is good so far. Im going to make sure i keep an eye on this story.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Good chapter, too bad we have to wait so long for the next part... But I'll be waiting
Good luck.

And so it begins anew. and nice beginning. Deffently going to watch how you develop this story. Have a fave and like

I can imagine a number of very good reasons for why Celestia would give up Twilight like that. All are rather plainly obvious and painfully valid, too.

Like how if she had kept the foal, she would never grow up normally. Twi would forever be seen as 'Celestia's Foal' and would never have a normal life, doomed to the kind of ever-present scrutiny and judgment of the nobles. Not to mention having to deal with fake friends that hang around her because of their parents' insistence or through their own selfish desires, both seeking to increase their own social standing through affiliation with the young princess.

Another one would be that because of Celestia's duties, she would be exceptionally hard-pressed to make time for Twilight, which going by Celestia's maternal nature, would be a massive no-no. She would want the foal to grow up feeling loved, rather than sidelined, which could make all kinds of problems in the future.

The last I'll list is the last I can think of off the top of my head. She could fear for Twilight turning into one of those self-absorbed nobles (or, heaven's forbid, another Blueblood) and potentially hurting others. Having Twilight grow up as a, relatively, normal pony would hopefully ensure that this would not happen.

In the end, all are valid, albeit painful, reasons to give up Twilight. I look forward to seeing your reasoning for this.

My hearts, the both of them. they have broken... i await more eagerly as I am a glutton for punishment.

Hmm.
Author is currently writing fic where Twilight is Luna's daughter.
Author starts writing fic where Twilight is Celestia's daughter.

...just be sure you know what you're doing there, and don't get them mixed up when writing them!

4313621 Don't worry, I won't. Besides the obvious, there is a distinct difference between "In the Sun's Shadow" and "Heir of the Nightmare." I would tell, but that would mean revealing spoilers.:twilightsmile:

Did you read my post on the forum but if you didnt this story is very close to my request :D:pinkiehappy:

4314294 No, I didn't. I don't even look at them. This is my own story idea. With all the same characters, settings, and since (Celestia is Twilight's mother) is such a common theme I'm not surprised if your initial impression is of the similarity. :twilightsheepish:

4304986 Yeah I like your last reason :rainbowlaugh:

There. Are. No. Words. :pinkiegasp:
In a GREAT AWESOME way! :heart:

i think she gave up twilight cause 1) i don't really think she would want to do the same thing to twilight that she did to Luna just my thought dunno maybe im right maybe im wrong .

Okay. When an intro to a story make me just about cry, I say it's good. Of course i'll wait and see how it goes, but it's off to a poignant start I say... :pinkiesad2:

I say, this story has inflicted quite a harsh blow upon my feel glands. :moustache:
Curse you, fine fellow. Curse you.

Wow... :pinkiesad2:

This is great so far...

fuck you.
no really.
now i have to hide in my janitorial closet at the school i work for until i can stop crying.
you are fucking vile to right that so well that its all i can see.
upvoted faved,following and will likely never forgive you.

Obviously the 2 people that downvoted this are heartless

hmm i think ill keep an eye on this one..

This is looking fairly interesting so far... I think I'll keep an eye on this.

I like it is there going to be more???

SO when are you updating?

Aww, the ol' heartstrings got tugged again.

i wonder how the truth will come out?

Looking forward to more. :pinkiesmile:

"You want to stay with your parents?"

And my heart became a harp.

This chapter is fantastic. Heck it would even work as an awesome one shot, but nope, there is more to come and that pleases me greatly.

I like the depressed twilight at the beginning. The happy ending of the finaly seem a little too perfect. Twilight should be more touched by the lose of the librairy. ( you see her chocked look when it's destroy). I also love the idea of Celestia, mother of Twilight. It a kind of plot I always like and I'm curious about the Why of the abondon of the foal. I hope it won't be just a "it would have too many political repercutions or it would have be too complicate with the charge of leading the country".
Anyway, good job and I can't wait for more! Can we expect a update for week or more?

Aw, I love it :twilightsmile: I almost forgot I favourited this story, but I'm glad to see it's not only alive and kicking, but it's already looking to be a very good story. Keep up the good work :pinkiehappy:

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