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On secret assignment from Princess Celestia herself, Twilight investigates a powerful magical artifact for clues to the mystery of Luna's transformation in the evil Nightmare Moon. Incautious use of the artifact sends Twilight hurtling back in time. Can Twilight discover what caused Luna's transformation? And will she ever make it home again?

Kickass cover art used with permission from Bitz.

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Oh, awesome! You posted this here!

This is the story I've been really looking forward to! I love a good alternate universe tale and this is shaping up to be quite spectacular. It's cute, it's interesting and it's structured in a unique way. And I can't get enough of the two main unicorns interacting with each other in humorous ways.

Heh, good thing you got this out before the last Twilight episode. Though, in your case, the spell Twilight cast was much stronger. Can't wait to see what happens that turns her into Darklight Star. I'm predicting that Twilight took the curse of whatever affected Luna so that Luna wouldn't have to go through that experience.

Anyway, tracking this so hard you don't even know!

Have a free like :moustache:

yeah, this is THE story that brought me in MLP fanfics, I was sad to not see it on fimfiction when I was looking to track it.... now I can :twilightsmile:

yes! you're here... awesome... :rainbowkiss:

You misspelled "prologue."
/grammar nazi.

This is an awesome story. Keeps the characters in the show in-character, provides an interesting take on what could have happened, and is mostly free of grammatical errors. I eagerly await you next chapter.

345105: CELESTIA DAMMIT! Does anyone know how to change chapter names?

That aside, thanks for all the support, folks! Glad you all like it so much. I've been making progress on the next chapter; should be up soon!

345194 I think you have to edit the story itself. Or you could do as I did once and delete the chapter, save it on a google doc, spellcheck it, and then repost it.

Good to see this here. :twilightsmile:

Well, I can't think of anything constructive to say. It's awesome so far, keep up the good work.

Ah, this will be good... :trixieshiftleft:

Applejack, you're stubborn. *Runs off* And Surprise in more ways than one.

345208 Just hit 'edit' and you can edit the chapter title from there.

And yay, Trixie! :trixieshiftleft:

I'm running on the assumption that Darklight Star is Twilight who goes back in time and is corrupted(possibly willingly aka the "tried to change things for the better"?). That would make the Twilight snippet at the end of the prologue yet another time traveling Twilight, possibly one cleansed by alternate filly Twilight?

Time travel, always confusing...

Wait. Wait. PLOT HOLE!:pinkiegasp:
How is Luna in Equestria if she is still on the moon?
Remember, Nightmare Moon was defeated when Twilight was a mare so having her be on Equestria at the time Twilight became Celestria's student makes NO sense whatsoever!

Alternate Universe, my friend. Things are different here. That's kinda the point. I don't want to give too much away, but as you should have realized from the opening at the very beginning, there IS no Nightmare Moon here. We have Darklight Star instead. Keep reading, you'll get it.

Okay. Though I think a tag or saying so in the description might help.

*points to clearly visible 'Alternate Universe' tag at the very top of the page*

I am amazaed that Chaos missed that. Chaos is sorry for bothering you.

No problem! Hope you enjoy the rest of the fic; hopefully there's a new chapter coming soon!

Really loving it so far. Looking forward to seeing Twilight go down the dark path.
But where is the rest of it? Is the story on hiatus?

No, not on hiatus. I just happened to hit the writer's block jackpot: going through family issues, a boatload of schoolwork, a lack of inspiration and plain ole' laziness. HOWEVER! I've recently returned to working on this, and the next chapter is nearing completion. Expect it soon!

that's our Twi. innocently insensitive...:facehoof:

Well, there goes the timeline.

I'd almost have some sympathy for Starswirl, but considering the nerve-severing spell I can't quite bring myself to.

Well that didn't take long, now did it?

Only a week in and Twilight's already mucking everything up. It's glorious.

It's that question that comes up every now and then with historians. If you had the chance to go back in time and remove a figure from history that had caused war and death, would you do it? And even if you did, would it change anything? Given what we know from your previous chapters, that answer becomes a big, fat NO.

Great to see this back! Eagerly awaiting more!

hope it won't take as long for the next chapter and I'm happy to notice that you actually thought about givingthe Royal Canterlot Voice to Celestia, other writers could have probably forgot the fact that said voice was heavily in use by both Celly and Luna a 1000 years ago

Twilight is slowly creating a paradox because she'll be in two places at once unless she can figure out how to either fix it or live with herself; that is figuratively. Worse off, Twilight now has to literally invent everything Starswirl the 5th did in 5 years + prevent the rise of Nightmare Moon. All of this plus she has to make it back in time for food. There is no excuse for breaking a Pinkie Promise. :pinkiehappy: Good luck, Twilight Sparkle; you are going to need it.

Sadly I see 1 of 4 things happening in the end.

1. Blue Star Twilight figures out she doesn't have to screw with the timeline allowing Trixie(alt) to join the Mane 6 and defeat well, her. Then live on with her life...

2. She is forced to, in all honesty, destroy Trixie's friendship with Twilight(Alt) and fix the time paradox she created estentially ending with the story ending with original Twi stopping herself from doing the experiment. Creating a grandfather paradox but in return closing the more serious timeline errors.

3. Dark Twi takes over Equestria and the buck stops there. (If NM Moon = Celestia while Celestia > Luna) (Then Twilight with NM power would have to be just weaker than both alicorns + EoH making her a literal juggernaut)

4. The universe explodes and everything ceases to exist except Surprise, Pinkie, and Pinkie (alt) since they all exist outside the typical realm.

The 4th option sounds scary

Twilight is breaking time traveling rule number 1: Do not under any circumstances change anything in the past. It might have worked for Marty from Back to the future but he almost wiped himself out of existence.

Oh wow, good to see this up here as well! :pinkiehappy:

This story has so much potential and so far it has been very interesting! The latest update, as I already gushed about on EQD was fantastic.

Please keep the updates coming! :yay:

Excellent. As the saying goes the road to damnation is paved with good intentions.

Twilight has taken her first step. Yay!

OK... so, I pretty much already know the general working of the past arc. Now it's all up to the story-telling. You did not disappoint with this chapter kooler, I love this stuff. Oh god, I don't want to bring up any of my assumptions as I'm so fairly sure that I'm right on such a majority of them, that I don't want to spoil it for anybody

Unless of course you're supposed to change the past, in which case you shouldn't under any circumstances not do it. :pinkiegasp:

Time travel's funny that way. Time. It's like a timey-wimey-wibbly-wobbly ball of...stuff. :derpytongue2:

Twilight wasn't even supposed to travel back in time. Just figure out what happened to Luna that caused her to transform into Nightmare Moon.

The funny thing about destiny (if you believe in it) is that it usually fails to politely inform you of what it is you're actually supposed to do beforehand. :derpytongue2:

For what it's worth, I don't generally believe the past can be changed even by time travel. Partly because a single fixed timeline (optionally with any number of branches if you want to have your alternate-universe cake and eat it too) with all time travel events that will ever occur anywhere and anywhen already "planned in" and accounted for is the self-consistent model I can most easily wrap my mind around, and partly because making it somehow easier to change both past and present (via time travel) than to simply edit just the present alone (via at least Discord-level reality warping) would be a major, major violation of the No Free Lunch rule.

Let's just say Time Travel Is confusing and leave it at that.

Oh, Twilight... The Guardian of Forever and Sailor Pluto wish to have words with you... :trixieshiftright:

Great action in the duel, too. Starswirl... da-yum with that nerve spell! Honestly, if he stopped before that, okay, honor satisfied. But that... :pinkiegasp:

How do your say? "Wibly wobly timey whimey."

I really dig the Twilight/Trixie friend angle. Too often you either get emo angst-fests or Twixie shipping, which I hate. Good on ya, mate.

I don't like this anymore. You kinda gave away the ending at the beginning, telling us about Blue Star. I don't want to see Twilight banished for a thousand years.

Probably should have not included that bit in the prologue.

ANd now I want to read again. Twilight/Trixie is so HNNNNNGGG inducing. Friendshipping > Shipping.

Also, I LOVELOVELOVED My Little Avengers! It's why I clicked on this one. You're pretty good at this! :pinkiehappy:

Damn it Twilight!
You need to heed grampa Simpson's advice. Misquoting here:

'If you every end up back in time, don't touch again. For even the smallest change can have great effects on the future.'

Can't believe I just found this here. One of my favourite stories around right now. :pinkiehappy:

The question that is burning my mind...okay two questions actually.
One: When's the next chapter coming out?! :applecry:

Second one that's just going over in my head....since Twilight's gone back in time and SPOILER!! taken the place of NMM...when the thousand years deadline has passed, there will be two Twilights, and with this plan of the Princesses...three ponies in the same room who can yield the Element of Magic... and given that the older Twilight has previously done so in our timeline.... what's going to happen?! I'm half-expecting some kind of paradox explosion or something...

One: In about ten seconds. Hold your breath and by the time you let it out it'll likely be up.

Two: ~I'm not telling!~

Ohh, what a twist!

A locket, a cult and a prophecy. Now things are really getting juicy! At first I found the segments featuring alt-timeline Twilight to be somewhat dull... now it is picking up and it has my interest.

Please keep up the good work Koolerkid! This is a great story with a very different premise and I highly enjoy it. :pinkiehappy:

uh oh. Darklight Star has followers... :facehoof:

Excellent! :rainbowdetermined2:

Hmn, is Stalwart inspired by the Solar Guard turned Night Guard Stalwart Hide from Cleff Scratches recent lunar stallions stories? Name and cutie mark seem similar.

I am also wondering if a pegasus named (or at least codenamed) Bright Eyes should be recognizable, but since this is someone who would have been around when Twi was a filly I am guessing no.

If they are working from a manuscript and have a goal of "a better future" I can't help but wonder if they are really followers of Darklight Star, or if they just think they are and past-Twilight just has a really long game in play.

shit will be getting real..... and Im happy it didnt take like 5 months to get a new chapter :)

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