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JusSonic


Hey folks. JusSonic here, finally sending fics here. While I was worried about coming here for some time now, I decided to give this place a shot...as long as you be fair, 'kay?

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Slight AU ending to "Friendship Is Magic" part 2. What if, immediately following the defeat of Nightmare Moon, the Mane Six's new connection to the reactivated Elements of Harmony triggered a transformation in the six heroines, causing them all to be upgraded to alicorn status? Can they learn to master their new alicorn powers? And how will Equestria act in general to the emergence of these six new alicorns?

Cover art by parfywarfy

Chapters (7)
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Comments ( 85 )

It's about time you uploaded this on here.

I ready did enjoy your story. Just a few errors in grammer but I even make errors in my stories. I do love it though!

seven new alicorns you mean? If with the return of luna...

3827653 Luna was already an alicorn; she isn't new.

The part with the Universal Viewer have confused me. In fact, I think that it's everything BUT necessary.

Don't get me wrong. The idea behind your story is a good one, and your first chapter isn't bad at all. But it don't need that "flashback from an alternate universe" to work. In fact, that piece feel like it's here only to make us read "My Little Dragon: Friendship is Magic", needlessly confusing anyone that don't already have read it.

In short: This story will be, in my opinion, much more understandable if it was starting directly at "Nightmare Moon laughs evilly, with Twilight looking worried. Not good, the Elements are in pieces right in front of her. All is lost..."

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yes but I think it was ment in regards to the rest of modern equestria not the literal scence of NEW alicorn

A h but she has been gone for a thousand years>>3827872

So they were born so long after she was banished that she was legend, make believe, a fairy tale. Thus they would have to deal with seven more alicorns then they used to have.3828278

3828507 She's only new for the citizens of Equestria. But she existed as an alicorn before she came back from the moon; therefore she isn't really new.

I'm a sucker for these kind of stories.

Let's see if you got a good'un on your hand.

~Skeeter The Lurker

A good solid start to what seems like a good story, if a little fast...

But... I dunno... Something is off-putting to it all..

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Probably because everyone is turning into alicorns. First the main six, then Ponyville, then . . . THE WORLD!

Moar please!! This is a very cool concept. ^^

3830239 Well, there was an "everyone and everything is a changeling" story, why not one for Alicorns?

don't use words like dat for applejack because dat is Brooklyn accent not southern

It is. Watch an episode that has Applejack and see how she talks, she's hard, but easy! You'll get it soon!:pinkiehappy:

Well, yes. They do need for magic and flying training for new-fangled Alicorn form.:twilightsheepish:

I blame Celestia.
You have six new alicorns who have no idea how to use their power...and you send them home, expecting them to not experiment? Without even extracting a Pinkie Promise?

...good lord, alicorn Pinkie enraged over a broken Pinkie Promise...

Twilight seems to be in a catch 22 situation if she did nothing she would have been in trouble, but if she messed up trying to help... well that didn't work either

zerg rush! is what I immediately thought when fluttershy said that the animals rushed the town

:l

upgraded to alicorn status

:pinkiegasp:
Are they robots?!:trollestia:

except for the Apple's accents this isn't all that bad

Bu-bu-bu-busted!!! Ladies! Bu-bu-bu-busted!!!!!

3827872 she is new to the the general population, for generations they only knew of Celestia luna was a forgotten myth.

Pinkie pie an alicorn yup were all fucked

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Well goodbye my good sir. Best of luck to you surviving the pinkieocalypse

Oh god the errors. :raritydespair: Errors everywhere! :raritycry: Run for your lives! :applecry:

Why is AJ Neigh Jerseyan?? WHY?? ANyway good job I'm liking this

there's a sentence that repeats

Ben Mare's the villain. Calling it now.

whenever i read AJ i read it in a gangester/babs voice

might want to get some help with that :twilightblush:

It's probably just me but your rendition of Applejack's accent is coming off as rastafarian, or at the very least not at all southern, to me.

de elements o harmony

:applejackconfused:

You need an editor.

"Oooh, I am not comfortable with the stares." Fluttershy mumbles a bit, uncomfortable by the stares given to her.

That is so redundant...

Baroque

It's a boutique

And I'm not saying any of what I say to be mean, either, it just is. I'd offer to edit for you, but I've tried editing before and I get lazy.

Very good concept, but needs work. I would just right applejack without an accent, as it's easier to write and read, but that's just me. Also, Big Mac seemed a little out of character to me. The tense also seemed awkward; it would be easier to read and understand (at least for me) if it was past tense.

Overall though, good work!
:pinkiesmile::twilightsmile::trollestia::ajsmug:

Who is Lorcan and who is the mysterious figure?:applejackunsure:

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Spike's brother, an OC made by a pal of mine. Read Lorcan's Wrath for more.

why did you use the Flo Rida version?

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"Flo Rida"? What's this you speak of?

You spin my head right around, right around, when you go down, when you go down, down

seems like flo rida to me.

Keep up the great work JusSonic! Its getting very interesting!

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Oh wait. I just found out. The song was a good reference to use for this fic.

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