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Crystal Moose


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Swansong, an exiled changeling, is living in Equestria; surviving by any means she can. There’s a reason it’s considered Equestria’s second oldest profession. Swansong ekes out a living as best she can, until she finds herself in an impossible situation; she has laid an egg, a privilege normally restricted to the Queen’s brood.

As the the little hatchling grows, Swansong knows something is wrong. The child eats regular pony food, and she feels the love emanating from it. Her fellow changelings would either steal the child as a resource, to be fed on until she died; or they would kill her as an abomination.

She knows this, because being around the child makes her hungry herself.

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Comments ( 104 )

I genuinely did not see that coming. Nice.

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Woo! That's two of mine now. Thanks Arcum!

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I genuinely did not see you not seeing it coming coming. Try parse that :raritywink:

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No problem. The ending actually caught me off-guard as well. Of course, part of me still says the elements of harmony could be used to bring Swansong back as long as it's post-season two...

--arcum42

That's... one way to protect your daughter...

Wow. I don't know what hit me harder: the feels:fluttercry: or the twist:pinkiegasp:.

OH GOD THE FEELS!:raritycry:

THAT WAS ONE HELL OF A TWIST! :twistnerd:
I did not see that coming AT ALL!

Yea it was ease to see it but still nice little story.

Heh damn sacrifice is always best way to go in stories.

that was... unexpected

Liquid pride..... lots and lots of liquid pride

Why isn't this featured!:raritydespair:

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I just don't have the exposure to get featured. Most featured people have a lot of followers, the more followers the more pageviews they get in the first few hours of publication (that's just how the heat system works *shrugs*)

I honestly don't mind if my work gets featured or not. I enjoy writing, and if people enjoy reading, then that is enough for me. :pinkiehappy:

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Well then I shall follow:moustache:

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I seem to have that effect on you, Iakovl. I really should start writing happier stuff, shouldn't I? :raritywink:

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I thought I recognised your name! I have Scoot de Lis on my "to read" list. Loved the premise of the idea, though I see you are revising right now. Anyway, thanks for the follow :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you expect chapters to come I done revising it:twilightsmile:

This was so good I put a link to it in the notes on my fic, this deserves a lot more attention.

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Yes... slowly I will take the place of every author on this site and feed from their followers. Mwuahahaaha! (we really need a Chryssy emote!)

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In all seriousness though, thanks, I appreciate it. :twilightblush:

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Nooooo
I enjoy my share of liquid pride

Have a lot of storys I read only handful had me spill liquid pride

Once I'm home from service I'll talk to you more

Oh my god the FEELS THE FEELS

To be honest I am not sure what to think....

You have Celestia turning a pony to stone, but it was done with the consent of the other pony and to protect an innocent
You have Celestia acting somewhat xenophobic to Swansong, but you have shown that the Changelings are not nice
You have Cadence as a Changeling, but she knows that and accepts herself as a pony

But giving some thought, you did well with this. Swansong is a loving mother who would do anything to protect her daughter, even if it means meeting with someone who could have just killed her. Celestia is a princess knowing she must protect the innocent even if their race is not on good terms with Equestria.

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Arcum I as the Library's official Celestia checker accept this this fic as 100% Approved by Her Serene Majesty's Paladin.

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Coming from the head of the Protect Celestia group (yep, I've heard of you guys!) I take that as high praise :pinkiehappy:

And yeah, I think Celestia is a complicated pony, just like any other. The whole situation was complicated, and despite being a somewhat depressing story, was fun to write.

You need to make more of this.
I need more.
I bet everypony else needs more.
I am willing to release Flutterrage, and then Pinkamena if you do not comply.
I will tell them to do whatever the heck they want to until you agree to write more.

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Well I am considering adding the story to PC, just waiting on a second opinion before I do anything.

She is complicated but not having her smite Swansong on the spot tells a great deal about her character. Celestia might not like Changelings but she isn't a genocidal monster.

Depressing but with a silver lining, Cadence was love unconditionally by her mother and her aunt. No matter what race she is.

Would I be wrong in assuming that turning Swansong to stone killed her?

Obviously it didn't kill Discord, but Discord is an immortal spirit of chaos. Swansong is a changeling drone.

It makes sense considering that Celestia couldn't just "let her out" for the wedding, or after enough time has passed that changeling/pony relations have improved.

Celestia pulled the mare close. “Your mother was a wonderful mare, and she loved you more than you’ll ever know. She gave her life that you might live. I know she is watching down over you.”

Celestia: I knew her for all of five minutes, so I feel safe declaring this!

Hmm...

Hmmm....
I need to think about this story before reviewing it. Suffice to say, its a unique concept... and I like the protagonist's character. However... I do feel as if this was rushed a bit.. As Zervziel pointed it, I find it hard Celestia would make a judgement so quickly... at the same time, the power of love isn't constrained by time.

That epilogue was beautiful, I just wish that this story didn't end... :(

A good sad story, but I can't help but feel that I've read this before...

3506768 I don't think feeding love works through stone work.
Also, I guess being trapped in/as stone is like death to me. Because I wouldn't be able to move anymore, or see the world and beyond.

3507108 Eh, it felt more like a cheap grab at my feels. Kinda like My Little Dashie. The thing is, Celestia didn't explore any other alternatives or even try to talk Swansong out of her decision. Surely Princess Celestia would have tried everything in her power to help the poor mare before fucking killing her!

And Cadance! We never see her get upset that Celestia never really tried to help her mother at all. And the biggest cork ups of all is Celestia knew about the changeling empires and yet was take completely off guard at the wedding. Oh gee it's almost as if she hasn't raised a freaking changelig since childhood!

Hell if anything, Celestia feels more like a glorified set piece, put to make the OC's retarded plan work and to provide exposition, than an actual character. Hell she only appears in the end, just long enough to act thorny and to effectively execute the OC.

Also Celestia's disgust for the changelings feels kind of out of place, and more a kneejerk reaction than anything else. I mean Equestria puts up with dragons, but can't abide some changelings?

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To borrow an idea from another fic, Celestia always knew that a changeling was in Canterlot but without asking Cadence dropping her disguise could she tell the difference between the two? She might have just chalked up any presevied difference as being brought about by stress.

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Sorry buds, this story is done for me. I don't see much room for this to go.

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That is kind of how I saw it too, though didn't explicitly state that, so if someone wants to use this as a basis and write something where Swansong does come back, they can.

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Lol. Fair point.

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In all honesty, this story was "rushed", most of the stuff I've been writing lately are multichapter behemoths, and I've been fighting off getting burned out. So this entire story was written, concept to completion, in about six hours, as opposed to the normal weeks I take planning something.

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I'd love to know if you work out where you've read it before (I very rarely read changeling fics myself)

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I can't really defend against much of this, as a lot of what you have said is valid (while it was never intended as a cheap grab at feels, I can see how it can be seen as that); and the part about Celestia telling Cadence how much her mom loved her and would be proud yadda yadda yadda; you're right, she didn't know her long enough to make that judgement. It could have been empty platitudes, but I treated it as if they weren't, so you are spot on with that.

And the biggest cork ups of all is Celestia knew about the changeling empires and yet was take completely off guard at the wedding.

The only thing I would argue is that the entirety of A Canterlot Wedding is pretty dumb. Celestia chalks a complete about-face on a niece, whom we presume she has known for most of her life, in the middle of a national threat; yet Cadence knows all about the changelings, as demonstrated in the cave? I mean, there could have been a library down there, I guess, or maybe there was a Monsters Manual 3 lying around somewhere :raritywink:

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Celestia murdering an innocent because she don't give a fuck. After the story, she smoked some crack and used her Harley to do donuts in the royal azalia garden.
This is legit the way Celestia rolls.

I enjoyed it. Sure it wasn't the most original on the sight but I don't care. It was an interesting little story. I fully see Celestia letting a little changeling hating anger out when she readily agreed to kill Swansong. She would most likely see them as an abomination that prey on her ponies in the night. It makes, an admitedly twisted, sense that she would still hate the creature before her, even if her own nature made her comfort it in its final moments. As for her words to Cadence? I doubt, "yep thats why I stoned the bitch" would have been appropriate

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All she said was "This halibut is good enough for Celestia."

Instastone.

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I... would totally read that story.

3509109 -hugs you tightly and grins- I love you!

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Dang, good story though.

Oh god yes! This story is just wow! I loved it.

normally i don't read tragedy stories. I see the tag ad proceed to get in a rocket and leave as fast as posssible. Lightspeed if possible.

So know this i read this and haveno idea why i did. It was great I loved it. I would love to see something where after chrysilis gets taken care of they can bring her back and then everyonefinds out... but let it NOT be a tragedy.

Yeah, I saw that epilogue coming from a mile away.

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