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This story is a sequel to This date is going to be perfect!
After asking Twilight Sparkle out, Chrysalis waits patiently for the mare's answer.
This is their night!
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Dat ending!
Need MORE!!!
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WILL NOTHING QUENCH YOUR INSATIABLE WORDLUST?
Next chapter! YAY! Love this so much, keep up the great work!
3827493 Hmmm seeing Luna on a date with Chryssy?
More Changeling Queen love! PLEASE!!!!! :D
Oh, you and your gender pronoun ambiguity hijinks.
Unless this is from Chryssi's perspective, it should probably be AppleJACK.
Huh. A nice little bit of world building. if you liked you wanted to you could substitute "read" for "scanned", but that's up to you.
seneschal ? Damn dude, that's some high fallutin vocabulary!
Whomever, I believe. I think. I'm not sure. I don't know.
Overall, a delightfully awkward story. I'd like to see a few more scenes of the actual date, playing off Chrysalis's foreign Blue and Orange Morality.
I liked it!
Don't worry, 3827910. I'm not done editing— this was early access. But as Our Loving Oppressor has stated, I do need my sleep (especially with a 12-hour time difference between us).
Can also be read as: "Stop doing my job! I need my shiny bubble-gum wrappers!"
3827995 Bwahahaha! Feel the pain of outsourcing!
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Pre-alpha. Sounds way cooler.
This story has my approval.
Never change, Pinkie.
Uhh...
Plans, you say?
Queen Chrysalis is disturbingly adorable. That sums her up perfectly.
FOR THE LOVE OF GOD!!!! PRICELESS... make another... make another!!!
Dat ending, my sweet Celestia
Ouch! The bluntness of that rejection is gonna leave enough trauma for forensics to work with.
HA HA HA....sequel
God damnit I was hoping they would get together!
now we just need cadence(cadance?) and shining's reactions.
if they find out, that is.
Classic Chrissy. Never change, buggie.
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Plans I do say
This slight against Chrysalis will not be soon forgotten!
Why did Twilight reject Chrysalis? The only down sides to the date were due to cultural differences so Twilight did not really give Chrysalis a chance.
Even though I was hoping for ChrysalisxTwilight, I will still fav and up-vote.
INB4 Celestia ends up giving Chrysalis a pity lay just to get her the hell away from her...
That's the best kind of adorable.
*Dungeons and Dragons flashback* THEY'RE ALL DEAD!
Apart from triggering DnD PTSD (RIP Lemurius), I loved this!
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The Luna Micro from IDW actually mentions owlbears, and the CMC micro had mimics.
Thank Celestia the nerds at IDW are getting D&D references into semi-canon.
i know i do
Oh dear...
are quite dangerous indeed... Now, if you'll excuse me, I think I hear another thread calling my name okay thanks bye!
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This date was going to be perfect...
Ghetto much.
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I have had to get an American friend to try and translate that, as I have no idea what that means. Incidentally, he's not sure how to translate it either.
Now excuse me while I chuck another
shrimpPRAWN on the barby, and ride me kangaroo down, sport, whilst wrestling crocodiles!3831510 simple explanation, it follows many American relationships especially amongst the lower class, mainly in High school(mandatory) where boys and girls play the match making game and try and hook up with as many others as possible, usually flinging curses at each other sensually, and cutting relationships with someone they find uncompatable after a matter of five seconds and starting up a new one just as quick. Kinda like our marriage to our money.
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Oh, so you mean like every teen romance here in Australia? Gotchya. That was kind of the inspiration for Chryssy in this fic.
Minus the homicidal tendencies and the kidnapping stuff.
3831621 Nice then, it works perfectly.
You should probably tag this as a sequel to This Date, so people who favorited it will be alerted.
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It always has been, right from the start.
Were you not notified?
3831662 Nope. Could still be some bugs with that.
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Thanks for pointing that out, I will make a blog post. I suspected it might still be bugged, I've missed a few sequels to stories I follow that way too.
This! I'm a sucker for bait-and-switch humor that plays on your expectations like this. They crack me up so bad. One of my favorite gags from the show is in one of my least favorite episodes, Ticket Master, where Twilight's picking petals off the flower in the vase on her restaurant table, listing off her problems... and then miserably licks up all the petals and eats them. Such a sudden and unexpected contrast to those table flowers' purpose in real-life, but it made complete sense after a second, and it was hilarious. I 'fell' for the same gag again in Varanus' 'Composure', in one of the first chapters, where Twilight got some flowers for Celestia in the hospital, and Celestia thought it was sweet, like any hospital patient being brought flowers would. And then she started munching on them.
Anyways.
Pinkie Pie with the glass of water was... that was one of the most genuinely 'Pinkie Pie' things I've seen in a fanfic. And Fluttershy's argument is pretty convincing, too. If they can give Discord a chance, they can certainly give Queen Buggy a chance.
Perhaps.
Oh my god the hilarious awkwardness in this scene. I'm getting the feeling that things might not work out between them, lol. LE` GASP
Snuggle-bug.
I approve.
I love your ability to keep these ponies largely in-character despite the zaniness that's going on. Not counting Chrysalis, of course. But honestly, Chrysalis has only had one two-parter to be canonically characterized, and she spent over half of it pretending to be someone else; hardly a rock-steady characterization to stick to in the first place.
I can't wait to potentially eventually (potentiventually?) see these Plans™.
Wonder how many more ponies Chrssy can go through before settling on Celestia.
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Oh, it's you.
Kidding, kidding.
That bait-and-switch required a lot of rewriting to get right, so I am glad it paid off in the end.
For the date, I tried to channel the Lindsay/Tobias Funke vibe, and I even wonder if Chrysalis will find a new start (lel) in the next fic.
On the characterization of Chrysalis: I was actually talking about that last night with my wife. Chrysalis gets a little more exposure in the comics, which develops on her character quite nicely.
I was well aware I was butchering her character, to try and fit her into the story, but then (and this may be my bias showing) I feel that is kind of more acceptable when it comes to comedies (more so than a played-straight romance story) if it is done for comedic effect.
I love the changelings, and particularly Chrysalis, because they are unabashedly evil, and trying to work that into a story like this one is actually a lot of fun. In the last story I said I could not conceive of a plausible scenario where things would work out for them, but you know what? If not for the fact I already have a sequel to this kind of planned, there was a point towards the end where I wondered if they would end up together.
Glad you enjoyed it!
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I'm really liking the idea of Queen Snuggle-Bug trying to genuinely hit on Cadence, despite the whole abandoned-to-starve-to-death-in-a-gem-mine thing.
Right in front of Shining Armor, for bonus points. And genuinely not even comprehending why Shining would object.
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Because traumatized is one of Chryssy's turn ons.
Gawd, can you see that dating profile video? All I can think of is "I eat cats" sung to the I love Cats song.
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Can't suck every cat!
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Fool, this is the Internet. Our demands are infinite.
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Yes. That would be hilarious. I'd ship that.
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Aww, c'mon. Stop being mean to Chryssi, she deserves a princess of her own.
Don't you have
love for her to feed ona heart?3831896
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Is it narcissistic to ship yourself, if you're shipping yourself with someone who almost killed you?
Because I'm pretty sure it's a legal obligation at this point: Still a better love story than Twilight.
Ah Chrysalis, so close, and yet so far. Perhaps if you didn't casually mention murdering your failed minions? A crazy idea, I know, but it might be just crazy enough to work.