A thousand years ago, humans and magic were inseparable. Unfortunately, after a group of power mad magicians nearly brought humanity, and the world, to the brink of destruction, it was ultimately decided that magic be sealed away to prevent disaster.
But not forever.
Slowly, the sealed magic would flow out and reunite with its owner. As such, the same council that separated the energy made a vow to slowly guide humanity to proper use of their gift. It did not matter how long it would take if it meant preventing the end.
Six girls are about to get their powers back in full force and have the adventure of a lifetime as they find themselves involved in things far beyond anything they could have ever imagined.
Chapters (11)
Ohh, interesting start. Short and sweet and fairly cryptic; nice job!
So tell me what has change and could you Put a time date at the begening of the chapter
Also were's the ... So we know some time has past
What's with the squares
4108805 Basically, the flow of the story has been significantly improved. Also, the prologue is the only thing out of order, the rest of the story will flow consecutively.
Also, what squares?
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It looks like there are small squares in place of parentheses, or some other formatting control character (like the start of italics, etc) is showing up as a ⏤ symbol in the story text.
For example:
This is really fun though, enjoying it quite a bit !
4109323 So after viewing the story on my phone and another computer, I see what you guys mean. I changed it and those squares should be showing up as em dashes now.
Thanks a lot and glad to know you're enjoying it!
I think I do sorta kinda a little bit maybe remember the first time this story was up,
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Aww yiss. Fantastic sci-fi/fantasy worldbuilding and filling in of the EG plotholes. Basically, human Celestia being the undercover head of a worldwide magic MIB has now become my headcanon.
I worry a little bit that human Twi may outclass the rest of the Humane 5 in terms of abilities. She's got teleportation and magical blasts when the rest of the Mane 6 are kinda (if you'll pardon the pun) "one trick ponies" power-wise. Then again, she's actually had more training in her abilities, so I mean, it's well justified, but given that Twi is the powerhouse of the bunch in Equestria as well, I was kinda hoping they'd be on more level footing in this world. Or not. I gotta keep telling myself that not every world has to be videogame-statted, and maybe there's more to everyone's physical abilities than meets the eye.
Holy wall-o-text! Anyways, I eagerly await more!
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Really happy to know you're enjoying this story.
To be honest, I did actually base the humane 6's fighting styles around video game tropes.
Also, you'd be right in that their overall tactics won't exactly be those presented in that first fight, i.e. Applejack was shown being extraordinarily strong, but that won't be her main schtick.
Dat ending,
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Will Rainbow Dash be beating anybody up in this story?
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Definitely. There are going to be quite a number of action scenes in this fic.
As for Rainbow beating people up, she will, especially once Chaos Acolytes enter the picture.
Nice combat sequences!
I'm trying to figure out if Raven's manner of speaking is a shoutout to Banjo-Kazooie's Mumbo Jumbo or StarCraft 2's Abathur. I take it she's a humanized zebra? I do like the headcanon that each zebra has their own unique speaking style, but it's hard to come up with unique speech patterns that don't get too annoying to read after a while. Didn't think of using a laconic pattern like that, though. That's clever.
While I do realize that they're not the focus of the story, I was hoping we'd get at least some characterization of the other junior agents. So, naturally I'm glad we had that scene with Rarity and her scimitar-wielding opponent. Still, I wouldn't mind a little more here and there to see what kind of juniors MLP recruits and what they specialize in.
Once again: nice, solid chapters and some great worldbuilding!
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Abathur. Totally Abathur. I actually just finished HotS last week and he really amused me.
As for the other juniors, they will end up bumping into and learning more about them as the story progresses if not during training itself, then during the final exam or maybe even when out in the field.
The next chapter also shows the less, friendly, side of the organization.
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Thank you!
It looks they're all getting the hang of their various abilities. It's also nice to see Rainbow Dash getting along civilly with this world's Twilight Sparkle. It was bound to happen eventually, but who knew (save for the Author!) that it would about mental exercises?
Aw, you stopped right in the middle of the training fight!
You know, when I saw Inator, I thought to myself, is that a Phineas and Ferb reference I see? And lo and behold, it was! ...This makes me happier than I can say with standard words. So have some happy ponies!
This is epic!
Celestia is always watching you!
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Aw yeah; we're getting a B-Team, aren't we?
Please continue this! It's well written, but seems kinda abandoned. Love how Twilight and Rainbow are starting to get along over battle strategies. So, what's up with that? What are they planning?
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