Terra, 2317. For over a century, corruption has been lurking inside the Vault created by System Administrator Celestia. The Nightmare virus that overtook her sister Luna threatens to break free. To that end, she sends her finest student, a prodigy coder named Twilight Sparkle, to take charge on restoring the worldwide Grid.
Unfortunately for Twilight, that means doing the one thing she absolutely despises: making friends. But when the fate of Terra rests on her shoulders, she'll have to put aside her feelings and focus on bringing together a team of unlikely heroes to save the Grid and billions of innocent lives.
Cover art credit belongs to AnthemHearts on deviantArt.
Chapters (9)
Is this an AU retelling of the first two episodes I spy?
Always interesting to see. I shall commence reading. Edit forthcoming afterward.
Verily, we observe what thou hast performed herewith.
Very well written. Many description. Such worldbuilding. Wow. Very continue.
Fav'd.
I especially love the online personas of the characters. Utilising Sunset, Flash, Fleur, the release and infection... I will track this eagerly.
this is so good, keep up the good work ^ ^
Dis gon be good!
I don't really like humanized, but this is great so far.
I know what you mean about the lack of cyberpunk here though.
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Enjoying so far! You can do it Twilight!
Damn son. I'm impressed. You clearly went on ahead and did just that. The grammar was good, conversations go smoothly, the description is incredible, you really gave the cyberpunk genre justice and for that, I give you credit.
I seriously hope you continue working on this in the near future. I can't wait to see what's next in store.
4293005 Thanks a lot! And thanks to everyone else for reading and favoriting!
Another great story from Rough_Draft, good work
Would I be wrong to picture this story like something from Tron?
4302392 Not at all!
4305652 Thanks! And if you want to know more about the genres, I recommend TV Tropes' pages on cyberpunk and post-cyberpunk.
For once a cyberpunk fic that actually updates!
Also, am I right in guessing that there's no magic in this?
4306929 Nope. Not unless you count the fantastic technologies of smart AI, advanced medicine, easy-to-manage nanobot swarms, and global wireless energy transfer as "magic."
4302392 I imagined the city to be like a mix of the Grid and Detroit from Deus Ex: Human Revolution.
4314993 I can see that
This is actually quite amazing. I'm loving every second of it.
And so few (ie non-existent) errors, too! Colour me impressed. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Interesting, most interesting indeed...
This one I'll follow, because it seems quite intriguing so far.
By the way, you could probably get this into Twilight's Library if you added it.
Have you considered submitting this to EqD? You should.
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I second this.
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And this.
4341108 I don't really frequent EqD for reading or posting, so that's unlikely, but I might do Twilight's Library soon.
Appreciate the enthusiasm, though!
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You don't have to be a regular visitor. Hell, you don't even need to read anything! I still think you should submit, though. The worst that can happen is you get a rejection email. The best? A shit-tonne of extra views and attention.
I've been on there five times myself. I know quality when I read it, and I've been reading it here. Your grammar is practically flawless, your execution precise and effective. You show so much and only tell when necessary.
this.... is beautiful!
but seriously, dont stop now!
Grammer issues? Pacing issues?
I didn't see any of those.
4430084 Thank goodness. I was worried because I was up late finishing this chapter, and because I'd disabled the spell checker on my computer, thanks to GRRM's influence on making new names and terms.
MAKEMOREHEARISACUPCAKE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Yes darling, do please make more.
Wooooooooooooooheeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! This is geting good y'all
yay!
AWESOME!!
This is a good read
"All Seven Of Us."
I think this story might actually be better written than the actual pilot
4546539 Aww, you're too kind.
In all seriousness, though, I'm taking a break to work on my new story Our Lady's Courtship, which is a shipping fic. That being said, if and when I do get back to writing this story, I'd like to do so with the help of a dedicated co-writer. Preferably someone whose love and knowledge of cyberpunk runs deep and who can write closer to my style.
This is... surprisingly well-written.
*Sees "on hiatus" tag*
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I has a sad nao. Just when it was getting so damn good...
But I understand. Know though that I pray you will return to this eventually.
Why am i just finding this now? And why does it have so few upvotes? One chapter in and i love it already.
sweetie this fic is one of the best!
Seriously enjoying this. I eagerly await more!
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Oh, you too?
It is pretty good, hey.
just a single mistake near the end.
Otherwise, I continue to marvel at how your incredible imagination works. And I'm so glad you kicked your writer's block
Put this on EqD already! It's so damn good!
You should have 50x the readership!
4803550 You'll be pleased to know I finally got around to submitting this story to Equestria Daily. Thanks for the enthusiastic support, C.V.!
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This pleases me
4971346 4971486 Me, too!
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Wow, you put this fic in Twi's Library! I'm definitely giving this a read.
Here's to hoping it's as good as it looks! ^_^
5038577 Thanks for understanding!
Well, I'm sad now. I was thoroughly enjoying this. Though, now I'm tempted to finish it. I'll certainly put some thought into it.
5038647 if anyone can finish the story, it's 5038656.
But I would love it if you at least put your ideas to your faithful readers. And it wouldn't hurt to give Albinocorn some idea of where you could have gone as well.
This is still the best AU retelling I've read. I don't think that will ever change.
Yesterday's stats: 29:4
Today's stats: 28:5
Did someone seriously get butthurt over you saying you won't continue? What the hell?
5042933 My audience is allowed to react however they please. If someone is butthurt, c'est la vie!
I'm sad that this was cancelled, but excited at the prospect that someone else may pick it up and do the original justice. Allons-y!
I was at the Intermezzo when I decided to see how many more chapters I had to read: when I saw the words "Unfinished" and "Cancelled" I was sad and a little disappointed too.
Wow, we're really not playing around with this one! Give me a moment here to put on my hard-scifi suspenders, and then I'll jump right back into this.
I smell an uplift-rights revolution in this society's future....
This is fun!
Interesting that Celestia basically gave the solution to... Wait, that's precisely what she did in the show too, huh?