A heart that yearns for the goddess of the sun might have a tough time. Okay, make that an astronomically difficult time, but with the help of a flower-peddling sister and some meddling princesses, is the love of a sun goddess truly unobtainable?
It will be if the Royal Guard has their say.
OC x Celestia
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d'awww
Celestia is best princess!
That's why I have her tattooed on me.
13 years- dang that's determined! Enjoying the story.
I find this entertaining! Do go on!
I've been enjoying Over The Hills, so I'm fairly certain that I shall enjoy this one as well. And more romance centric than Over The Hills? I'm game.
I like your style, Escape. Favd
hell yeah faved mutha fuka!
I'm looking forward to further chapters. Favourited.
Dat 1st chapter title.
Reminds me of "I have no mouth but I need to scream" or something.
2865718 I don't know the exact quote, but I was referencing that. Good job on picking up on it
2865736
I like that game. Though I never played it
..Is there a law against pursuing princesses? Shining certainly succeeded.
Looks like you and I are using the same cover art. Lol.
2874397 Well that's unfortunate
Sorry neighbourino, the flower just suited the story.
2875090 Well, for me, its symbolic, the flower itself won't be in the story, but, its focused on Celestia.
i love it!
i cant wait to see how he will try to win over celestia
I need more
I like it. You have impressed your King.
Interesting.
Personally, I'm not a fan of a loony-over-the-top attempt at romance...
but that's just me XD Escape certainly doesn't seem to mind.
Thus far, 'tis well written and rather nice. What I would recommend is delving more into who Escape is.
Currently: I've got that he is an eccentric magician who doesn't care what anypony thinks about his attempts to win Celestia's heart.
aaaand he's willing to go to all lengths to show that to her.
....
That's about it. Maybe exploring WHY he acts as he does, ect. It would lend more credibility to his over-the-top attempts.
'tis my two bits.
-RB
Faster! FASTer!! FASTER!!!!!!!
AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
2876411 I like the way you think. The good thing about backstory relating to a character trait is that it isn't necessary to throw it in to the beginning of a story. Putting it in the next few chapters would be optimal for a story like mine, so I plan to do just that when it's relevant in the story.
tldr version: Tis a good piece of advice. Thank you
keep going the comedy is quite good...not that I expect the romance won't be either.
Very good. I was going to comment that the dialogue is a bit weird, but I realized it works and is natural in it's own way. It's just different than other authors. Just make sure that Celestia sounds like celestia. A few lines felt ooc. Remember she's very empathetic and even when talking about herself would probably try to turn the scene into a teaching moment.
Also, as a member of the internet I'm obligated
It's couldn't care less
2879257 Thanks for the correction and heads up. It's actually a little weird for me to get constructive criticism. I have over 500 comments on my other two stories combined and among them all, one of them might be constructive criticism.
You want comments?
Here's a comment.
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Nice chapter, I would like more if you'd be so kind.
Celestia: Escape is your name right, how did you find me?
Escape: Google.com
I really enjoy this, I love ships, and Celestia is so adorable in my eyes! it's great to see ships with her involved.
Awesome, love it :p want more
Ok, this is stupid and ridiculous and I absolutely love it!
I can't wait for Escape's plan to blow of in the most spectacular of fashions.
Oh this..this..i will enjoy..
Your authors not reminded me of this.
GOOD
UPDATE ALREADYYY
Go get her escape, who cares if you get pummelled by the guards later on?
Love it. a little crackish but not overly so to sour the story. Please continue
I'm terribly sorry sir, but there is a big problem with your story.
It needs more chapters.
Love this! Update please!
*poke* update? :D
4112588 Agreed
Love the way you put it
Must. Have. More!
I'm curious as to what his Cutie Mark is.