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EnergeticRider


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Dec
1st
2017

A welcoming song "Delight below the sea". · 6:57am Dec 1st, 2017

Too bad that I couldn't put this song from the first chapter of Sirens' Origin story into the text itself. Because it's lyrics is based on a song "Somewhere beyond the sea". But apparently, site's rules at least allow to put it in a personal blog.

Well, here it is:

Somewhere below the sea
Someone is searching for me
My love, I’m better than golden sand
And all the ships that go sailing

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Dec
1st
2017

A welcoming song "Delight below the sea". · 6:57am Dec 1st, 2017

Too bad that I couldn't put this song from the first chapter of Sirens' Origin story into the text itself. Because it's lyrics is based on a song "Somewhere beyond the sea". But apparently, site's rules at least allow to put it in a personal blog.

Well, here it is:

Somewhere below the sea
Someone is searching for me
My love, I’m better than golden sand
And all the ships that go sailing

Read More

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I think you have a good concept with your story Worst Nightmare for Chancellor Neighsay. However I think you might need to expand on how other races view the definition of harmony. Ex: the zebras might feel that they have been wronged and to return to a harmonious relationship they have to retaliate against the species that wronged them. In the case of Queen Nova, she might see the harmony restored by the return of what the hippogriffs might have lost during their self imposed exile, whether it be power or land. Lastly how Twilight and co. viewed harmony when faceing Nightmare Moon compared to Discord. The meaning of harmony changes with each race, I think that this detail could bring a stronger impact to Neighsay's fears. There also seems to be some misspelling and grammer errors. Over all I did enjoy your story, it's good to see more then just hate and bash stories about Chancellor Neighsay.

Love the fic you have passworded,

Thank you for watching.:twilightsmile:

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