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At the assault on Canterlot, she was a medic, but not for the Equestrians.
After the assault is concluded, a new struggle for the Changelings begins as those who survive must still find food and shelter.
Will the Equestrians simply forgive the Changelings for their assault on their capitol, and if so how bumpy a road is this going to become?
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Great story! I'm honestly shocked this doesn't have more views than it does. Other than a few grammatical errors, it's very good. You're take on Chrysalis is one of the most original takes on her character I've ever seen. I look forward to seeing more stories from you.
I'll have to read this when I get some free-time.
This... This is something else.
This is much more than the run-of-the-mill changeling story. No, this is inarguably among the best I've ever read - and I read them all.
Kudos to you for an amazing story, a wonderful chapter, and I shall be following this (and quite likely you, as an author) from now on :D
I read this about an hour or so ago, and I STILL can't come up with something to express how amazing this story is. Just...Holy crap.....
it's not a bad story, but there's a problem with the Changelings claim early. Flitterwing says there was no time for diplomacy. But in fact if they could eat regular food, which you say they can and the entire hive would be mobilized, as it obviously was, then there's no hurry. Slip everyone in and eat regular food while beginning diplomatic talks.
WOW!!!! THAT WAS THE... WELL... I'm just' WOW... Keep up the good work look forward to the next chapter.
Wow.
Well worth a fav and thumbs up!
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There doesn't seem to be a thumbs up emoticon, so I'll put down this.
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This is an epic story. Liked and Favourited.
Such a long chapter!
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I actually intend to make them all at least 10-15k words...
Well I gave this a shot...I am very impressed with your characterization of Celestia, that is the princess I love. Willing to spare the innocent, grant mercy to her enemy, defend those who can't defend themselves, and unscrupulously fair to even her own people. I have two concerns really, things that bug me. 1) Possibility be overly apologetic for the Changeling Invasion (since this fic is written from a Changeling's POV is understandable, and they do wish to repent) 2) Only 10 left? What happen to those thrown out that didn't get smacked into buildings?.. still this is a very well done story so far and is...
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Keep going. I have little doubt that this will make the featured list. But a word of advice, don't make the chapters so long. People don't like reading 20k words in one sitting. I don't mind but it will turn some people away. Try to keep it at 10k max.
2132494 That is superequine.
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2130957 You obviously don't realize how long it would take for them to get help, do you? It's not as simple as,"Walk in, and pull up a chair to talk" There's paper work, and a million other things that need to happen....by which time it would be too late. It'd most likely be the equivalent to you or me not eating for 2 weeks before they got help.
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except I'm saying they could all disguise themselves as ponies, walk into Equestria, forget about feeding on love, and eat regular food while there. Sure they might have to steal some, but they could also do things like eat grass, or play the part of hobos in need of a meal, or any of a hundred other things in the time they were instead waiting for a signal to attack, and then once their bellies were full on real food instead of emotional food, then they drop their disguises, and open negotiations.
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It was something that I had considered during the writing the story, and came to the logical conclusion (which, granted, I didn't include as an argument from Luna during the original encounter) that finding enough places to fit the thousands of Changelings that inhabited the Hive would have taken just as long a time as opening negotiations, not to mention that it could have introduced the insect-like changelings to the wider residents of Equestria, many of whom could have panicked.
At least, that was my 'logical' conclusion.
The one I really wanted to go with was that Chrysalis had simply not considered this option in favor of a faster, though riskier, solution to widespread starvation.
My god...
I'd like this ten times over if I could.
My only complaint, is don't capitalize earth pony, unicorn, or pegasi. You don't capitalize human. They're not races, they're breeds.
But amazing, story, really. Totally worthy of feature.
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I have to agree with this one. Still a good changeling fic. Look forward to see where it goes. I think I am looking forward to Glimmer's childhood in Equestria the most.
2132584 And just to second this. Don't start with super long chapters. Once you get the reader trapped, that's when you do the really long ones :P
you miscounted, Flitterwing, Glitter, Chrysalis+six more changelings=9 not 10
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Shred was still in the room...
2133151 oh, my bad, also greet story and looking at how many words I went "DAMN"
I love this fic!
Liked and favorited.
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Has to be the best changeling themed story.
I, if unavailable to put them into prison for life, would have castrated them. "THIS IS HOW YOU TREAT A FOAL!! NOW YOU CAN'T HAVE ANY TO ABUSE!!" *Pulls out mini guillotine*
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When is there a next chapter? Oh yes and are you in need of an editor?
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It's a fantastic question, and one I actually have been wondering of myself; so far I'm working on it steadily, but with TAFE schoolwork being somewhat demanding this year and the fact that I intend for at least 10-15k words a chapter, it might be up to a week from now.
BUT, the less I distract myself the better. Don't take this as me saying I don't want comments; dear Celestia no, I love comments, but more that I've a lot of work on my plate and the less time I spend playing video games the better...
ALSO, on a side note, if ANYONE has a Changeling story that they'd like me to read, feel free to link me! I love reading a good story as much as I love writing them, so don't hesitate!
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I sent you a pm with 5 good stories if you have time to read them
You deserve to have anything I may have just for this story alone. You would own my soul if I still had one but do know I am absolutely in love with this fic
Those four stallions. . . those motherfucking four.
They deserved to be burned alive for that shit.
Wow... I honestly can't say anything else. If I do, it will be something that has already been said or will be said.
But what the hay? I'm going to say something anyways.
First of all, I would like to mention how awed I am because of how you plotted this story, the details and all of above.
Second, I would just like to say that I noticed that this chapter was a bit long. Why you ask? Well, I don't really have the answer. I do know however, that you could have been more comfortable writing chapters rather than a chapter. Although there is no problem in doing this, but as an author, it would have been a lot simpler if you written your chapter with less words, unneeded ones to be exact.
Lastly, I want to say how angry I am. I am as angry as a kid having a tantrum. Somehow, you're story was able to keep be from falling asleep and in the progress, make me comment on it. I hope you're happy!
Hopefully this comment made sense, if it didn't, please don't bother replying
This was just wonderful, many feels were had.
Its always a great time finding a nice long chapter to immerse myself into as well.
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The way you described her having gone on a bit of a power trip, that would actually be believable -- but you'd need to come out and say that's what happened.
Celestia wasted no time getting stuff done with the tabloids. Somepony put her in charge of investigating Murdoch. Please.
Aaaand Luna writes porn of herself.
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I'm also planning to make a Changeling fanfic, but it's a while off.
It's a fanfic set around two changeling soldiers and the misadventures they get into. Canterlot will be a core feature.
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Don't we all at some point?
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Nah. What I would do would be seizing all their property, freezing their assets, giving their houses to another family of nobles, and leave the four for a few months with no life whatsoever.
Then I would come back, shave all of their manes and tails, immobilise their nervous systems, break all of their legs, and then feed them to timberwolves. Slowly.
Amazing story, it truly has emotion in it! I respectfully demand MOAR!
A very great story, and one to be looking forward to each update.
I don't know what to say. This is truly an awe inspiring story. You took all the potential for the changelings and used it. This is absolutely beautiful. I cannot offer up enough praise. I actually cried while reading this. Thank you so much for writing such a wonderful story. I look forward to its continuation.
Wow. Love the story. Take my Upthumb, Track, and Fav. Hell, my follow too. :3
A most excellent and worthy piece of work. I look forward to more of it.
You have to write more of this. I really love all the character dynamics, and the writing style is great (the opening history bit was awesome). Not to mention, 22 thousand words is simply divine to read when the story is so spectacular.
This was amazing. I'm a bit of a changeling-fic fiend, and this is right up there with the best of them.
Have a thumb.
i love it you deserve mustaches
love it
There has to be more than 10 changelings left in the world. Otherwise that means that the species will go extinct anyway.
Okay, I read it...... MY FEELS!!!!
I can't wait for more. I hope to see some of the Mane Six in the future.
This was great, horribly great. Who in their right mind would beat a filly? I would've killed the lot of em, and the world would have been better.
I really do like your writing style, and I don't think I saw any mistakes. Keep up the good work!
maybe at some point they move to ponyville or maybe they meet the mane six or the cmc
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No... nonono.. don't .. nope. That's not tears you see.... Damn it .. -Wipe eyes- Damn ponies, they drive me to feel.
I've put back reading this fiction for two days because of stupid and over-straining work shifts.
Sweet Celestia this is so impressive. I'm a slow reader since English isn't my first language but this fiction is worth all the hours I spent reading this chapter.
I can't wait for the next chapter.