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Chatoyance


I'm the creator of Otakuworld.com, Jenniverse.com, the computer game Boppin', numerous online comics, novels, and tons of other wonderful things. I really love MLP:FiM.


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Melanie Zucker rides the maglev to the very last Conversion Bureau. No earthly possessions may be taken to Equestria. along the way, Melanie must find a way to shed the last things that hold her to human life, a task less simple than it first appears.

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Comments ( 37 )

As pointed out, this is already complete :rainbowlaugh:

still completely deserving of it's 5 star rating and favorite :twilightsmile:

You've done it again Chatoyance. Good top notch work as usual.

5* and Track.

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Look at the tag. It's "Complete" :ajbemused:

114102 Why so it does :rainbowlaugh: Got too excited at seeing the email so blitzed into reading as fast as my internet would take me :rainbowlaugh:

Nice Story Chatoyance, a good one shot story, I'm always happy to read those :twilightsmile:.

Please don't stop writing... but here have all my stars.

I still wholeheartedly believe that you are the greatest fanfic writer in the MLP fandom. Five stars, without any shred of doubt.

Even though I am not a big fan of pro TCB fics, it is undeniable that your writing style is fantastic.
You should consider writing novels.

Short but sweet :) I am perplexed by the Purification concept, it seems to contradict some of your other stories which simply indicate that the barrier expands around the earth until it meets itself somewhere in Africa. A different time is given here as well- six years now. Some of your stories say five years, some say eight years. I am growing increasingly confused as to what the real timeline is for all of this. Some clarification on these matters would be welcome.

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Back then, when I was part of a growing community of TCB authors - before the bastards came and started attacking, turning everyone against each other, and basically destroyed everything - I worked to create a 'Big Tent' that included all of the other authors that (at the time) I considered my friends.

'Purification' shouldn't technically exist in my universe, it is a reference to the works of another author, one that, in the end, was not as much of a friend as I had hoped. I never should have included it.

EDIT: now all references to 'Purification' are gone, gone, gone.

My official timeline is eight years. Year zero is the emergence of Equestria, and year eight is the last moments of earth.

This poster I made shows the expansion of the Barrier within this timeline:
jenniverse.com/images/conversion%20bureau%20poster%205%20small.png

I'll throw these in, because they are pretty:
jenniverse.com/images/conversion%20bureau%20poster%204%20small.png

jenniverse.com/images/conversion%20bureau%20poster%201%20small.png

jenniverse.com/images/conversion%20bureau%20poster%202%20small.png

jenniverse.com/images/conversion%20bureau%20poster%203%20small.png

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Ah, I see! You might consider writing up some errata at one point or another to clear up the inconsistencies in your earlier stories that resulted from the Big Tent idea. And I enjoyed all of those posters quite a bit when I saw them before on your DA and faved all of them ^_^ they are still good now!

Dang it's been a while since I read one of your stories. Even in one of your earlier stories, you wrote fantastically! Thanks for the read!

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I am glad you liked it! Thank you for your kind post, and for reading my story!

Killer last line.

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Wow! Thank you! That was what I was going for, so... super yay!

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> “jenniverse.com/images/conversion%20bureau%20poster%205%20small.png

Due to the distortion of the projection, the circle should distort as it gets larger, break as it crosses the North Pole, then again when it crosses the South Pole, at which point it will form a very distorted closed circuit around South Africa, which will shrink as 0-Point approaches and become less distorted.

It is impossible to project a sphere onto a plane without distortion. I prefer the Dymaxion-Map, AKA the Fuller-Projection, because it minimizes the distortion:

Project the globe onto an Icosahedron and then tear apart the Icosahedron, so that one can lay it out into a plane. Multiple ways exist for doing so because the Icosahedron has 43,380 distinct nets.

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Fuller-Projections are very cool. I like them because, folded, they are icosohedrons, or 20-sided dice, and the D&D player in me thinks that is super cool.

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I play D&D too. I have a joke:

In Geometry-Class, the teacher calls upon a D&D-Player and asks “¿How many Platonic Solids exist?” and “¿What are their names?”. The D&D-Player responds thus:

5 Platonic Solids exist:

* The D4
* The D6
* The D8
* The D12
* The D20

Ah so a maglev is like a monorail? I wish they still had the monorail at Darling Harbour (I've been told that it's been taken down).

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Yes! Maglevs are monorails, only they use magnetic levitation rather than wheel carriages, and thus can travel very, very fast. There are some that exist today.

4718351 More proof that the conversion bureaus could eventually exist :pinkiehappy:.

4718351 I also found out that favelas exist as well.

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Oh yes, they do. All over the planet.

Here's one used in this poster I drew:
jenniverse.com/images/conversion%20bureau%20poster%201%20small.png
This particular one is in South America, I think.

4727855 I saw them on a show, they did billy cart racing and stuff. Similar to the one in the poster, it was on a steep hill. I also saw a video on maglevs/magnetically levitated trains in science today. I was the only student who had heard of them :pinkiesmile:.

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Wow! I guess I can be edumacational and stuff. At least sometimes. :trollestia:

4727913 You are also very good at art. That poster with the picture of the serum flask looks so realistic!

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Thank you, very much!

Simple. Quiet. Slow.

A person last breath before they go to sleep and dream.

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I wanted to say I am appreciating your prose-poetry in your comments. I have a fondness for prose poetry.

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...prose-poetry... You do know how to butter someone up. Like bread!

Funny stuff aside, I never realized that before. The whole poetry words things. I don't think it's something I do fully conscious-ish. It takes me awhile to write things out and I guess it's just easier to keep it short. I would talk like that in real life but I think it makes people think that I'm crazy. Mostly likely they think "a retard" but I rather be broken crazy than... I can't think of something nicer... I already said retard. Or I could be lazy and I don't like erasing words/sentences or honest about my thoughts. Both.

I'm more of a picture and to a lesser extant music thinking person. Not comfortable posting pics and song files in comments. I do that when I feel it's ok. Not that I could tell you when it's ok. Ok, maybe I could... wow. I would just like the thoughts to come from myself and my words and voice to match up. Not being two faced. Get the emotion out. Have a point.

Which this is not the place. About me.

It would have been simpler to say "Thank you." or nothing at all. I didn't want to be simple at this point.

I first fell in love with prose poetry during my transition, back in 1981-1982. During that time, my only entertainment was a radio, which I tuned to a public station. I listened to the original Hitchhiker's Guide To The Galaxy, fresh from the BBC - it started as a radio drama, long before the books.

And... there was Word Jazz. Ken Nordine. See for yourself. Words about Blue.

In other universes, alien beings have entertainment programs where humans are the stars of horror stories. In the end, they are defeated when their weakness is determined to be their own hubris. - I'm not sure if I pulled that from something written by someone else (I tend to imitate more than come up with my own material) but it seems appropriate, I guess.

As for the takers in this story... Yup, sums up a lot of people. Some of whom I know. Take, take, take. Even if you can't use it.

Sigh.

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Indeed, sigh.

Thank you very kindly for reading my story.

Oh, her last possession was her body! So good. :D

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Thank you, RoseQuartz1, for reading my story - and you are absolutely correct.

A very nice story, horrifying though it may be. A nice look at the decay of humanity as the world turns to ash - be it by its own hand, or an outside force like the barrier - and what humans are willing to do to escape it. Me likey.

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Thank you very much!

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