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Chatoyance


I'm the creator of Otakuworld.com, Jenniverse.com, the computer game Boppin', numerous online comics, novels, and tons of other wonderful things. I really love MLP:FiM.


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Recruited by the Worldgovernment, a young woman is given a holocorder to document her experience of going through a Conversion Bureau, and her experiences after. This is the text transcript of her hypernet holofeed. This story takes place in Year Three of the expansion of Equestria.

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Awww... You moved it!

Well, as long I get more!

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I will finish all of my stories. Including and especially this one.

... I require more. Please write some more.

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This story will continue right up to the Barrier, where the holocorder cannot follow.

257500 Ahhh the spoilers burn my face but who cares... but in the words of Oliver Twist. "Please sir... May I have some more?"

This will be one interresting read. Good job Chatoyance!

what does she need to mention?! ill go insane :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiecrazy:

First person ponification - this should be fun. :pinkiehappy:

And, thank you... There are a lot of people who cold use a basic class on equine physiology, let alone Equestrian physiology.

I'm still waiting for someone to explain how they pick things up... I'm personally siding with Gecko-like setae that cover the frog area of the hoof. :rainbowlaugh:

I'm loving the 'ads'.

That last one with "smilin' Bob" had me falling off my chair laughing. :rainbowlaugh:

257513 what spoilers? Conversion bureau, EVERYpony gets to the barrier unless they's killt. ;)

I can't help but imagine the parts of a pony cartoon and inter-spaced ads as news reels from the 30's or 40's for some reason. Certainly makes things interesting.

Sunshine reminds me a lot of Caprice from 27 ounces. :pinkiehappy:

That commercial wow you are really playing up the comedy in this aren't you. I really like this, actually more than the some of the other fics. So far its kept things pretty simple and light. A very drastic shift from your other work. But I really enjoy that, it shows you can write outside of just one genre which is really neat.

I somehow just imagined Jim Carrey as the father in the commercial... I don't know why.:pinkiecrazy:

It's ok that I'm giving complements right?

Edit 1: also who does the art as it seems both you and Krass used the same artist?

This is awesome. As always, I really enjoy your work.
I do think, however, that some people will be put off by the excessive use of the word 'fuck.'

Anyways, awesome. :twilightsmile:

~Esmelthien

Oh. Muffins are definitely much better than fucks!

Again, awesome chapter. :twilightsmile:

~Esmelthien

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I do all of my own art. I do the title images, and the spot art inside my stories too. You can see larger versions of some of the art on my Deviant Art account, linked through my personal page here on FimFiction, if you are interested.

I did the art for Krass, Windchaser, and also a couple of Midnight stories too. Before I wrote pony stories, I did three graphic novels, they are out there on the net too. But writing is funner. :pinkiehappy:

while reading this, I found myself trying to drink a cup of water without using my fingers. I managed, without spilling much.

Love where this is going, and I wonder what will happen next. I also can't help but wonder how Gloria and Razor will get along...

Hmm, fruit juice, right out of a tree? I wouldn't put it past Equestria. Actually, it isn't completely crazy, either.

Start with a flower, a species that prefers hummingbirds or another larger pollinator. Now, cause it to get bigger, specializing in even larger pollinators, bigger hummingbirds or even bats at this point. Then it gets even bigger, and with more flowers. Now it's this big, tall stalk, right? It gets more flowers, and the vascular structure becomes even more tree-like. What you have now is this tall, tree-like bush with enormous flowers. Well, now some tree-climbing animals are shoving their snauses in it for the nectar, so they very quickly start taking advantage of that, specializing in those because what else uses such a large animal as a pollinator? So, there's speciation, with some species sort of absorbing the flowers downwards, into the trunk of the pseudo-tree, and they grow less complex, relying on larger creatures, some even grazers and browsers, to smell out and sort of suckle on the tree. Eventually, you'll end up with these trees that have these structures on them that just sort of ooze nectar, and leave a ring of powder on the creature's nose. I guess there would be even more speciation on height: one targeting pony-sized creatures, and those for even taller creatures.

Well, okay, that's not really fruit juice as much as it is nectar. Still, yummy yummy tree juice, and I guess it would be hypothetically farmable, and then mixed into a solution with water before serving. The final product would seem like fruit juice, and it would have been extracted out of a tree.

That way really off topic. What I'm really meaning to say here is:

Teacup Down On The OH MY GOD IT'S GETTING EVERYWHERE HRLGLRBRLGBR GLRLG!!!!

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Those teacups can trip you up. :pinkiecrazy:

I really liked what you have done with the story so far. I like the idea of having humans get used to doing things in a different way to get accustomed to how they will have to do things when they are ponies. One curious thing that I saw though was the idea of how the world government is going out of its way to make sure that people try to convert to ponies before ZP day. The way that the scientist talked about conversion and how the elite were still looking for a way to save themselves, I am led to believe that the world government, at best, was simply looking for a cheap and easy way to reduce the total population of the earth and make more space for themselves. Which, in the context that you set up the story, works brilliantly. While I do believe that there are good people all around and that there would be good people even at the top of the world government in your story, the entity, as a whole, would care more about potential resources and personal gain than the human race as a whole. That's just my personal take on it so far though, and I may be completely wrong about it. I can't wait to see your take on it Chat.

Also, I really like the inbetween advertisments and reports that you shad set up in the story. It really helps with the stream of consciousness style that you are going for in the story. Until the next part. Allons-y!

I'd be pretty interested in seeing, from both sides of the barrier, what happens to various cities and whatever monuments and famous buildings as the barrier passes over them. If Denver is already being reached, then Vegas and the Hoover Dam have already been absorbed. I bet those would be something to see.

I saw new Chatoyance and I was like 0_0


This is really interesting, the way it's told. Not only is it from a first person perspective, but it's a recording. So... it like this is happening in the "present" and it's already all happened in the "past" perhaps. It's like a fictional dream within a fictional dream. 0_o That's so cool!

Wow... that little break made me shudder. You never see that part of the universe as much. When you think about it... it's sort of terrifying.

This is hilarious and frightening at the same time. The implacable march of the soft genocide is... awful, despite the fact that the alternative is readily available, it just comes with a little piece of body horror.

I love that.

And fan art of the art (both are adorable) made me giggle.

I wasn't sure this method of story telling could work - I was wrong.

Oh hey, Doctor Pastern is back.

>we are dealing with a form of physics our universe has never encountered before.
Now that is superb and terrifying at the same time. I feel bad though every other TCB writer is writing these ideas before me. Oh well, I'll just have to try harder to make sure my work can also be unique.
>yes, they are Muslims For Christ... and a party from the Human Liberation Front.
Hmm, so you went with muslim terrorist as HLF sided... interesting
>Breakfast Pony Club
You are officially in the awesome book. But in regards to the actual fic: Did Breakfast Club survive up until this point in the TCB-verse? If so awesome! John Hughes will never die! :rainbowdetermined2:

Ooh. This is an interesting concept. And I was glad to see the shoutout to doctor Pastern.

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Actually no, she's posturing that islam and christianity have, in some sects, combined into a single religion, which isn't an entirely new idea.

Having said that, she's also not saying that the HLF are all religious, muslims or christians or otherwise - just that these particular ones are.

If you've read Arthur C Clarke's stuff, you'll see at least one variation on his specific future histories has such a similar occurence, wherein islam and christianity and judaism unite into a single world religion.

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Midnight is correct: I do not buy into the whole 'Muslims are inherently evil, Jihad, terrorist' crap that the American Media loves to invent. All I was suggesting there was that just as there is 'Jews For Jesus' - a real organization - there could someday be 'Muslims For Christ' and that, as Middy pointed out, this could become a big religion someday. I am imagining a world where, despite the dystopia and everything, some people really are trying to get along and get together, in various ways.

The HLF members are not necessarily religious, they are just marching with the Islamochristians in unity for humanity. It isn't because they share religion in common, it is because they share humanity in common. They are singing hymns together because it is a uniting thing to sing, especially when you are marching into a potentially fatal situation. You don't have to believe in a religion to join in singing a commonly known hymn if you are afraid.

That's what I was doing there: two very different groups sharing a common agenda - protesting the loss of Earth, and humanity itself.

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"the enemy of my enemy is my ally," no?

also, I noticed something odd.
in the intermission, the reporter says that ZP-day is 1084 days away, while the scientist instead claims that there are 1133 days left, 49 more than what the reporter said.
Was the scientist still using the previous estimation, or was that interview over a month ago?

This is exactly as fascinating as I thought it would be. I appreciate the challenge of writing a story that consists, more or less, of dialogue and only dialogue. That's hard. You're pulling it off quite well, though, if I may say so.

I have one complaint, and that is the fact that I was planning on using Goldenrod as a pony name in my TCB fic. :< Now it would only feel like stepping on your hooves, so to speak.

(/whine whine moan moan)

But in all honesty I probably could come up with a better name, and now I have impetus to.

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Thank you. Thank you so much for that.

I must say I applaud your work every time a chapter is made~ :twilightsmile:

Please ma'am may I have some more of your writing?

Might be a bit nit picky, but I beliebve its Rebirth, not Renewal. Not that it really matters.

Anyways, I damn near died laughing when I saw Crusade Me. Ah man, too bad no one else was there except for us authors. That was fucking hilarious. Good times, Good times...

And geez, when are these two going to realize that they are in lesbians with eachother?

I've liked the interruptions-- this jarring feeling and then you're right in the middle of sight and sound. (Crusade Me! was both amusing and strange) They feel real and contrast with the mostly happy, up beat narrative. One minute Millie's getting her mane brushed and the next-- Cyber terrorism! It gives some interesting context.

Thank you, Ma'am, may I have another!?!

I got the goofiest image in my head after the PER "commercial" - some lonely sap, in the middle of a busy street starts yelling "Crusade me!" and....zilch. So, he tries again (a few days later, when his neighbors stop giving him weird looks) with continued nada. After a few weeks he manages to track down so honest-to-goodness PER Crusaders and asks them why he hasn't been contacted. The Crusader gives him an apologetic blush, channels Fluttershy and admits that the PER....kinda....is a tiny group with only a few hundred members and wasmaybebluffignabit *cringe*. :fluttershyouch:

...so many in-jokes, yet still world-relevant. Loved it... "crusade me" indeed!

Anonymous eh? thinking bout' the hacker group? as you wrote in your other TCB-stories you mention hackers, so that Anonymous would still exist is not unthinkable. it kinda make sense that they would be supporting PER, or at least a part of the group since the group isn't focused at one goal, other than to bring down Scientology.

does ponies work computers well, or do they have to have help from a human?

"Crusade me". very funny concept. ten points!:twilightsmile:

Is it really hair not fur? Hmm:rainbowderp:
>I would say that is a miracle on par with old religious dudes with big long beards and glowy heads,
:rainbowlaugh:
>religion
interesting, especially given what you wrote in 27 Ounces with Sandcastle. Still the idea of abandoning everything, my god, that's terrifying

>The other thing I wanted to mention was about taste. I was worried about what being a pony would do to my sense of taste, if ponies love hay and alfalfa and grass and stuff like that, right? It apparently is not a problem.
:rainbowlaugh: Screw the heart, the stomach is where your soul truly lies :pinkiehappy:

>crusademegray
Ha-ha references, and look! the PER still creeps me the hell out :pinkiegasp:

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evidently The Breakfast Club still made it through hell as well. Funny what survives the end of the world

It is hair - not fur. The way to tell the difference is if the one wearing the fur or hair - sweats through it to cool off. Dogs and cats, for example, have to pant to remove their body heat. Horses sweat. I can see my mare's sweat even on a cool day when I remove my saddle pad and cinch. Horses that work harder - for example in a race - will have copious amounts of sweat and foam pouring off them. We would often give them a bath with an astringent liniment afterwards to remove the sweat and dirt. The smell of Vetrolin (the kind of liniment we used.) still brings back memories. It smells of... horse shows.

Awesome.

I liked the singing, it was a nice addition :twilightsmile:

~Esmelthien

Y'know, that sentence about dinosaurs inspired me. I'm going to go write a fic about dinosaurs.

:twilightoops::rainbowhuh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh: :trollestia::twilightangry2: :moustache::raritystarry:
my response to the second intermission in a nutshell.

aww, they're so adorably awkward and camerashy :rainbowlaugh:

<takei>oh my!</takei>

In all fairness, I should also comment on the delightful golden-age scifi interlude. Freaking awesome. Something right out of an Asimov collection, infact I swear I've read it before.

The overblown space-satan scooping out the brains? Well, I could point to a few cults like that today!

And oh my, dat interlude...

I love how it's just so painfully obvious it's being sanitized for mass consumption, though!

These interludes shine like stars. Also, interesting: the WorldGov AIs don't want people knowing about, well, whoever Millie was going to name. The implications of the WG cooperating with the PER -- imagine the reactions of the RPS to that. Then again, we didn't see what HH Celestia did at the PER HQ in LM, so IDK.

Also, if this comment makes sense to you, well...

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