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arandomboi12


Saved the day, the night, and the girl too.

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It seem very rushed on the pacing and its a bit self inserty but i still found it amusing and would like to read more :D

Interesting concept, but terrible execution. I enjoy the idea of a saiyan going to a RGRE world, but the chapter here is rushed along with little to no detailed explanation.

I will favourite this story and follow it just because it is a decent and quick read, along with the fact that I want to see how you develop this concept, however, I will also see the wasted potential of what could have been a good story. (if you wish for an example that pulls rushed events but is still a good story then please check out 'A New Empire War And Peace')

Edit: it doesn't mean that this story is bad, though it is not good.

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I have to agree it is a bit rushed But let’s see where this goes

Comment posted by Hclegend deleted Jul 15th, 2020

It was ok interested in more chapter

No but really.

A 1.3 foot/16 inch penis.

Like do you not understand biology or are you just that insecure?

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the world biggest is 13.5 inches (34 cm) long when erect

Hey Aran I know that picture 👌

Can't wait for the next chapter

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Well it looks like you care enough to disable them. . . . . .

hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm..............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

I'm enjoying the story so far, looking forward to more chapters.

So far the story is going well and I have to say I’m enjoying it also I have two questions and a criticism! First question is who is he going to get paired up with is it one mare or multiple? Second question is will you go the “Super’s” or “GT’s” Transformations? For the criticism it could be a little longer.

"Want to know what death tastes like?" He cancelled the ki blast inside her mouth and sighed.

Nice reference

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Can you tell where it's from? Is that from the abridged series?

As I reveal my GIANT MONKEY--
(All ponies) [Aghast gasps]
...form
(All ponies)[Sighs of relief]
Random Pony: Thank God; I thought he meant penis

"Twilight! Where's the cleansing powder?" He shouts as she yells back.

"We don't have that here, we have soap!" He was then confused.

"The hell is soap?" She then sighed.

"It's that yellow block there made of animal fat!" He smiled as his mouth watered.

"That sounds awesome!" He takes a bite as a bitter, salty, and unpleasant "Blah! This tastes nothing like what you just said!"

"Did your parents tell you to kill us all? Huh?!" His eyes shrunk as his power spiked a little bit. She smirked, not having an inkling of what huge mistake she had just made.

"...what?" He snarled.

Oh boi rainbow you just made a big mistake you don't talk about someone parents when they just died

Why do most 'Super Powerful Alien in Equestria' stories turn Rainbow into a massive b***h?

This is getting better and better each chapter I can't wait to see what happens next (no rush).
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I wonder that to.

This was a fun and interesting beginning I can't wait to see where this goes. This you can away trust RD to jump to conclusions.

This was a very fun and interesting chapter I hope this follows super.

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1: Probably. But I'm gonna stick with the Cannon transformations for now.

2: read my blog post to see why they are short.

3: yes he will be with multiple mares :yay:

Looks okay so far just can't wait for the next chapter

I have read your bio and I’m sorry for my early misunderstanding of your situation, as for the latest chapter it’s amazing.

This was epic first transformation /the beginning of his hopeful herd. I can't wait to see where else this goes.

Perhaps making longer chapters would be nice? Not that the story isn't cool or anything, just super short chapters really frequently can burn you out faster.

Bitch you just jealous of my super saiyan swagger

Ha this was a awesomely epic and funny chapter, I hope he get all the princesses and main six next.

"Huh, what's this- OH SHIT MOTHER FUCKAAAAH!" He was sucked into the magic portal.

Nice

This was a fun and interesting chapter I hope he add the Mane-iac into the harem.

so......... how long till zacora tells the soon to be papa??

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