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Autumnblazelover61

Autumnblazelover61 #1 · Apr 30th, 2020 · · ·

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Nice 👍

Archaon

Archaon #2 · May 1st, 2020 · 4 · ·

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What a bunch of over-the-top fetishized smut.
I like it.

Krauser

Krauser #3 · May 1st, 2020 · 2 · 11 ·

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I would read it if it was not futa

adeptusforgefather

adeptusforgefather #4 · May 1st, 2020 · 10 · ·

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you plan on making a sequel

deadend

deadend #5 · May 2nd, 2020 · 1 · ·

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Now that's the ship i want to go down with.
Great stuff, I'd love to read more of it

Farnham

Farnham #6 · May 3rd, 2020 · 4 · ·

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Your characterizations and descriptions are always so good.
It'd be fun to see Fizzy going on adventures and meeting new and exotic species. And then fucking them.

Cloplestia

Cloplestia #7 · May 5th, 2020 · 3 · ·

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10213574
Thank you! I'm a little startled myself at just how much of a perv Fizzy turned out to be.

accidentallyoffensive

accidentallyoffensive #8 · May 8th, 2020 · 4 · ·

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Sees writer's profile pic, Check
Sees writer's name, Check
Sees Crysalis and Tempist Shadow character tags, Double Check! Dis gonna be good!
Starts reading....futa? I gotta start checking tags better. continues to read...
A displacer beast What the fuck does your internet history look like?
“My clawtoris,” ooh that's clever, and kinda hot.
Damn that is hot...maybe I should read more futa?
Great story thumbs up!

Cloplestia

Cloplestia #9 · May 8th, 2020 · 3 · ·

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10222600
Oh man, this is how it begins! Once upon a time I too thought futa was the ruination of many a promising lesbian ero-manga, until I stumbled across one that turned out to be too hot to ignore. Now look at me, a wreck of a person addicted to mare-dongs!

AJ Aficionado

AJ Aficionado #10 · May 25th, 2020 · · ·

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10222992
Niiiiiiice avatar! Could I have a source please? I simply must have it to add to my collection.

Cloplestia

Cloplestia #11 · May 25th, 2020 · · ·

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568969 on Derpibooru. Artist is stoic5.

AJ Aficionado

AJ Aficionado #12 · May 25th, 2020 · · ·

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10252474
You rock! Thanks.

dirty little secret

dirty little secret #13 · May 27th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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This is your official review from Dirty Little Secret's Dirty Little Contest!
Remember to vote in the contest's poll -- voting closes at midnight, June 6th.
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------ Review ------

Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-I like the shortening of her name to Fizzy -- that's already a great start.
-Nice to see these two confident ladies playing off one another.
-The mentions of Fizzy's previous escapades were fun. It adds in a lot of crazy variety.
-Maybe it could benefit from being split into two shorter chapters?
-Changeling pussy is crazy. It's a great level of detail you've put into things like this.
-Cool to see Fizzy having a fetish for non-pony creatures, and it brings up lots of ideas about her further adventures with other species in Equestria.

------ Scores ------

To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 98/100
Allure: 89/100
Enticement: 93/100
Immersion: 95/100
Prose Quality: 95/100
Total Score: 470/500
The more specialized scores for individual prizes, as well as the results of the community poll, will be published when the full results are announced. If this story wins any awards, there will be another post in the story comments sometime after June 9th announcing that this story has won.

Thank you for participating, and thank you for contributing to Fimfic's collection of clop!

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