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“If you want characters to suddenly start acting out of character like this, go read a Chatoyance fic!
Ohhhh Burn
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Cool
I remember when we talked about this. It was a simple conversation that turned into a chapter.
Keep in mind reading person that the story was in draft and all the funny wasn't there and I was only the editor and I didn't make anything else.
So, now there are anthro alicorns, and umamimi alicorns? It is not really clear.
3469567 keep reading.
Trust me
I am sorry,
I just cant keep reading with this new alicorn accesion.
It seems so out of place and sudden that I feel as if you bitch slapped me and said: "Hey, lets have a plot twist that does not really change anything but physical forms!"
But this is your story, so have fun with this plot twist.
It is just not one I will continue reading.
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Believe me I thought the same of it. Without the next part. Continue reading, trust that the author isn't an idiot.
Or read this.>>3469562 at least.
3469625 dude keep reading. Trust me.
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Yea, keep reading. I almost dropped the fic entirely at that point but I don't think it's broken yet.
3469640 good. Its not broken. Just something thing that hit me when I discussed with Drawdex and ran with it.
A gag chapter.
Then ending is real though. So take it how it is.
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And don't forget the last chapter TB3, the original author that thought of the story, is going to help making.
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I actually wouldn't have minded that path. Would have been cool to see.
Now then... to wait for chapter 13...
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Now I get it.
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You must tell me where is that type of comic coming from, I have searched it for months on end and can't find it.
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3469671 No idea. All I know is that it was a birthday gift to Egophiliac over on tumblr.
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did you like it?!!
3469652 technically it chapter ten, but whose counting?
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I did read the whole chapter, and I just cant get my knee jerk reaction to calm down.
When ever I think about that, I start thinking:
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Even if, my logical side was saying: "Keep reading! It will explain it and get better!"
I just cant keep reading.
Sorry Redskin
So basically half this chapter was a massive waste of time.
Not exactly the best parting gift, guys.
3469710 yeah. You can say that. Although the history being explain is actually pretty close to what I have. Much better told than me. Discord said it himself that it was accurate but missing some stuff.
So really the history being told is actually the real deal.
3469705 fine.
Find these words. "Hold it!"
About last third of the chapter. Look for Pinkie and Discord.
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Kinda felt like Sonic 06, but better. So yeah, I liked it.
Well... this was unexpected, thats all I got just unexpected. Anyway, the closer we get to the climax (Ha!) of the story, I hope the Canon!Mane 6 are the ones to fight their TCB counterparts. No not Marcus, not Princess Celestia, but the Canon Mane 6 because I can already see the final battle now, the meetup, reason you suck speeches being delivered to both sides, the powerful magic of both Twilights going head to head, both RDs battling it out in the skies. Ohh man if this happens, its going to be fucking glorious.
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See, the problem is, there are literally thousands of other ways you could have told that story that didn't require an instant retcon. A retcon, might I remind you, that slaps your readership in the fucking face with how utterly pointless it is.
You could have kept everything to the point of Cadence's ascension, and just kept it there. Maybe have just her be the one to get the psychic dreams? Instead of, you know, taking us down this fucking weird road for no apparent reason?
I think the worst part about the little cutaway two thirds in is that, despite whatever intentions you may have had, the tone of this story has been pretty serious. And when you have a scene where Discord and Pinkie complain about the story then change it, you have effectively obliterated the entire atmosphere of your story for the sake of a fucking fourth wall gag.
This was the weirdest thing I've ever read, going from 'EVERYBODY ALICORN' to a Charlie Chaplin speech.
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apple bloom and sweetie scene is real. Up until it cuts back to scoot scene.
The history is real. More or less. Everything else is just something that TB3 threw in for a gag.
Initially. This IS what he wanted to happen. But I said no. Then thought about it and decided to add it in anyways. Just so I can get the scootaloo surgery out of the way. Plus establish the final.moment of Lyra for everyone.
So yes, its a gag. Most of the story is one. But I digress in saying this.
Applebloom and Sweetie Bell scene is real. Their friendship is suffering and want to become friends again.
History is real to a point. Diverges some and Discord points this out.
Discord and Pinkie come in because the story got waaaay off track and needed to be put back on.
Lyra's final message to everyone is the real message.
If you take away the gags, there is an actual story behind it. We did it this way mostly because TB3 was leaving us and we wanted to make it memorable. If you focus on the goofy and nonsensical parts, then you are missing a lot.
3469898 that's what we are shooting for.
Ignore the goofy and way too weird parts and you will find an actual story behind it.
Awesome.
That was a very humorous chapter with the whole Pinkie Pie and Discord scene. Are we getting close to canon Equestria arriving to help Humanity? The suspense is killing me.
Oh and you got 800 favorites on this story! Yay!
3469934 sort of.
Spoiler alert.
Discord and Luna show up in Boston.
The Tyrant shows up too with the Elements in tow.
A fight breaks out.
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Right. So I should just enjoy the serious parts of the story and turn a blind eye when a gag directly interferes with the continuity of the plot.
Look, if you want to give one of your co-writers a sendoff, that's fine. I can empathize with that. What I can't accept is that you deliberately compromised the integrity of your story for the sake of making this one chapter "memorable." You succeeded, but not in a GOOD way. It sticks out lime a sore thumb compared to everything else portrayed so far. You could have used Scribe in the way I had suggested, with only Cadence seeing her, gotten to Lyra's copypasta speech, and been in an out of there with a nice, short chapter that didn,'t have a giant fourth wall zit on its face.
Instead, you decided that the events surrounding the creation of this story should take precedence over the story itself, and the result is, quite honestly, embarrassing. I'm embarrassed for you, because I know you can do better.
I mean, seriously now. What if J.K. Rowling had stopped Half-Blood Prince halfway through for Ron and Dobby to comment directly on the direction the story is headed, alter the events to their liking, then move on as if the entire sequence never happened?
3469970 then it never happen. I move on with the story. If something they said in story comes to light. Power to me then.
That's exactly what happen here. The story literally went off the line. Discord reversed TB3 decision, since he can do that, and played it back.
Jeeze man. You making a mountain out of a mole hill.
Its a gag chapter.
If you don't like it. Too bad then.
There are some elements that deal with the story, but if you can't find them oh well.
I... uh... what. I'm sorry, it's just... first you nail me in the feels, then you have that mindscrewy thing with Discord and Pinkie, then you change it and hit me in the feels again, and that author's note...
I'm so confused!
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Sure, you might choose to ignore it in another person's story.
But for other people, you don't get to decide that. You don't get to decide what other people think of specific passages in your story. If you wanted something to be understood as non-canon, you either put it into an omake, label the entire chapter as non-canon, make a separate story to vent your silliness into or you don't write it at all!
The problem is not that it broke the fourth wall, or that it was a gag, or even that it was a retcon. The problem is that it was formatted to be flush with the rest of the story, but does not fit the tone.
3470036 good. That is what we are shooting.
Yes. I am not mistaken.
That is exactly what we wanted.
And the problem?
3470033 then we succeed in our goals
I honestly wouldn't have minded the alicorn change that much.
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I didn't even have four points for you to refute, so I have no idea what you're trying to say.
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Well, I think Redskin is trying to bring the downfall of Xenolestia by other means, other than an army of mary sues. That's good for comedy stories, but not for more serious stories.
Could you imagine how silly it would be if Zoidberg was the one to defeat Xenolestia? With the power of his fearsome gon... Uh, never mind.
I think the story will have a good ending, not something like the ending of Mass Effect 3.
Wait, a chapter, with a large gag/4th wall breaking middle part?
AND NO NANOMACHINES SON?
SEN. ARMSTRONG DOES NOT APPROVE.
My thoughts...
I am not sure if you're a magnificent bastard or a magnificent troll. You got me thinking we'd have an awesome Alicorn battle thing or something, and then you pull that off?! Geez Louise man!!
I love Scribe; I'd love to see more of her (like maybe kill Xenolestia herself, right after delivering the most savage beatdown on her imaginable).
But poor Scootaloo!!
Celestia wanted to kill Discord....
Yeah,...I can't see that....at all. She gave him another chance in the show.
And why is Discord getting scott free? He brought chaos and disharmony to the world.....He's a bad guy and loved every second of it.
And yeah, what's wrong with Celestia ruling over the ponies? Here you describe it as a bad thing and that she should have left...By that logic, The God Emperor of Mankind was in the wrong. A tyrant even. How dare he help humanity.
And this Scribe is no better. Not talking to them when they had to stop Discord, had to help out the ponies. You know what would have happened the moment the sisters left. Look at 'Equestria Divided' by PoorYorick. That's what would have happened the moment they left.
I'm sorry if I'm rambling on, but I'm getting a bit tired of the Celestia=bashing.
3470101 nothing. Future answers.
Just leave it at that please.
It wasn't me that came up with this chapter.
But TB3 is the brain child.
I wanted him to finish his scene for Scootaloo, because I had no idea where he was going with it. In the end, I practically begged him to come back finish.
He gave me this. An early version without Discord or Pinkie, a bunch newly born alicorns, and absolutely no reason why it happen and make the whole Marcus goes to canon world for nothing.
So we tweaked, we sharpen, we reformed it into what you see here.
So what would you have?
A bunch of Mary Sues running around making all the build up for nothing because they all turn into super ponies or humans?
Or this, where at least keeps sense in some regards in a apocalyptic world filled zombie ponies and magic and humans fighting against them with their own will and allies?
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As for Discord. In my story, he is not evil. He is just doing his job. Causing chaos, which is something similar to how the our world works.
In the end, its about the ponies.
Discord believes through trail and hardship, ponykind can ascend back to their proper places. With them working together to overcomes anything.
Celestia believes that through perfect harmony, that it could happen with enough time. No trials, no hardship, just unity by her hooves.
In the end, we may never know.
That is my answer for you. Back story in Discord
3470168 no idea what you are on. But stay away so I don't catch it
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I'll just leave this here and be one my way.
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If you want go into a religious forum.
3470190 that is too much even for me.
Still the battle near the end will be epic.
Eh, I guess of all places to end that's the least troublesome place to stop. Still, could have done without the whole middle of the nothing but alicorns segment. I felt like i was watching Oprah.
"You are an Alicorn, and YOU are an Alicorn, EVERYPONY IS AN ALICORN!"
Either way, shame this good fic had to end. :(
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Thank you for illustrating my point.
3470322 what are you talking about?
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CATCH IT MAN! CATCH THE NANOMACHINES!
Aside from that, is some of the background info from the gag part true?
I just can't see Discord being a creation by Faust.
Also, fuck the Emprah.
LONG LIVE THE NECRONS!
Also, I want human necromancy to be a thing is this story or other ACB stories.
Just one necromancer or lich, with access to all of Earth's leylines and magical wells, and all the death energies. Oh, the fun. Liches huzzah!
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I would have preferred the backstory,since it is quite good, but the 4th wall jokes, and the whole alicorn thing just broke the mood for me, I mean it seems like it is going to be drama then it seems like there's going to be a Deus ex machina, then breaking of the 4th wall, I just... I just can't take this story seriously anymore, because now it seems like I have to be lookig out for these kind of retcons at any moment.
Seriously, it would have been better if you had cut everything from the beginning of this chapter until after the 4th wall breaking, it just works better.
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God damn, does no one read the title page, or author notes?
This is solely TB3 handywork. I just edited the crap out of it so it can stay true to the story.
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