Where Are You, Twilight?

There's a history here, one of your own making, that tells of the place once called home.

Search this forgotten castle and find it, Spike.

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Unending Suffering

Unending Suffering #1 · Nov 13th, 2017 · · ·

Woah.

Not Enough Coffee

Not Enough Coffee #2 · Nov 13th, 2017 · · ·

Outstanding improvement from the first draft, my friend. Easily worth a read.

Silent Echo

Silent Echo #3 · Nov 13th, 2017 · · ·

Wow deep.

RadicalDishonesty

RadicalDishonesty #4 · Nov 13th, 2017 · · ·

Well, that... is heartwrenching. A lot of mood setting, as is typical for you. And I liked this, even if if... didn't end to well.

Inferno demon Dash

Inferno demon Dash #5 · Nov 13th, 2017 · 1 · ·

An alternate universe where Spike kills his family, friends and sister? Damn that's dark. I'd love to read a full story of all that happened, how Celestia tried to calm down her son but failed, how the Elements lost and how the alternate Spike went insane. I have a feeling he and Discord are now enemies but I could be wrong. So many ideas for that version.

Onyx Quill

Onyx Quill #6 · Nov 13th, 2017 · · ·

Damn... Have an upvote.

B_25

B_25 #7 · Nov 13th, 2017 · · ·

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What sport?

sejox

sejox #8 · Nov 13th, 2017 · 1 · ·

the trauma
the struggle
the suffering
You evocated these feelings far too well, my dear friend.

B_25

B_25 #9 · Nov 14th, 2017 · · ·

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Like with Spike or....?

Mx #10 · Nov 15th, 2017 · · ·

Please make it into a series.

B_25

B_25 #11 · Nov 15th, 2017 · · ·

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Not sure how that would play out. Spike is caught inside an endless loop, so a series would just be this chapter repeating over and over unless you had another idea in mind?

Yosh-E-O

Yosh-E-O #12 · Nov 19th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Whoa... Quite the emotional experience here. Lots that a reader can interpret while enjoying in the poetic way in which this is all presented.

My take is something happened to Spike. Something that corrupted him. Something that, as his transformation did in 'Secret of My Excess' went unknown until it was all done. Spike went mad, gave into his greed, and destroyed Equestria with no thought. He was a mindless brute stuck on acquiring items. Dedicated to being selfish. Now he is alone and full of remorse for actions he never wished to have happened. Knowing it is he who sent his friend to oblivion. He who wrought Equestria to a burning wasteland.

Quite a dark tale but one that makes you cry as you realize how important it is to retain control of one's self. To not give in to negative emotion until it makes you into what you're not.

PaulAsaran