Contains Spoilers for The Legend of Zelda: Breath of the Wild and one or two other things...
The onslaught of Calamity Ganon meant many terrible things for the peaceful denizens of Hyrule. For the timid Princess Mipha, champion to the piscine Zora people, it was death. And yet, hundreds of years after her tragic demise, Mipha's disembodied spirit aided in the effort to finally purge the malefic force from the land. By lending her still-potent powers of healing to safeguard the one whom her heart belonged to beyond even the grave, the Hylian Link, the Calamity was successfully unmade. Saddened to leave her dear Link, but content in having fulfilled her sacred duty, Mipha felt herself beginning to fade away. It seemed she was finally passing into the next world...
...But such a deserved and final end was not meant to be.
Awakening from what feels like a dream, Mipha discovers that she yet lives. Now, though, she dwells in a strange world; an alien world, filled with creatures she had never before seen and beings that rule with surprising sapience to match her own. Though her nature may be quiet and meek, belying her true inner strengths, she tries with all of her power to return to Hyrule, and perhaps even to her dear Link, if she is able. The only question to remain for her is simple, but most elusive.
How?
very interesting concept, faved and watching closely
Ooh! I like this fic already!
I saw the picture of Mipha and I was like "whaaaaa so cool!" There should be one about revalI and Sidon as well. This is awesome
Just one question: Why did Celestia wait with showing the picture of Mipha until after Fluttershy and Applejack were gone? Wouldn't it have made more sense to show them the 'mysterious creature' that has been seen in the forest they are going to?
I must say, I am particularly enjoying this. Having beaten the game a little while ago, I can honestly say that I am very much looking forward to reading more of this. I particularly liked the way you described Mipha's thoughts and feelings.
One little bit of criticism that I feel is worth mentioning is that the story doesn't really take the time to develop the environment our characters are in. Sure we know that it's somewhere around Canterlot, but I think it would be beneficial to your story if you slowed down just a little bit, and gave yourself the time to flesh it out a little.
Aside from that, you are doing pretty good so far, and I look forward to reading more.
8084723 I've been working so quick to put this out with the little time I've had, I suppose I didn't focus on answering that question as well as I thought I did. Worry not, I believe that I've mended it with the proper form of speech Luna gives to them before they depart.
I have to agree with Dilos1 here, there's very little information or anything helping us feel a connection into the story of the land as is, there isn't a single mention of the threat beforehand, hell the fact that it's mentioned that Mipha was seen WEEKS ago when we're supposed to be following her based on how you set up the story last chapter. Making it feel a bit like a false promise, especially when it's starting to feel like a generic 'Character from X needs to help MLP cast with Y and nobody is going to learn anything for several chapters and we're not even going to see said character for another three' trap that happens with a lot of crossovers.
So word of advice though as it's simply advice you can feel free to ignore it.
DO NOT jump ahead in the story's time only to leave the character you're story is set up to follow by the way you've designed it alone for that time as you'll have to not only explain what they've been up too during that time but, explain how they are able to avoid these perils that have apparently claimed 21 ponies lives by herself without anybody seeing her again at least once in a month's time.
It'll just make your story more convoluted and make Mipha feel very, VERY underwhelming for a main character and let's face it, Convoluted and Zelda never mix well.
This interesting keep up the good work!
Good Chapter hope the next on well explained how Mipha got adapt to the world of Equestria.
F.Y.I I in joy playing Zelda Breath of the Wild it one of my top best Zelda games so far!
The writing here isn't bad, but a lot of the character dialogue just sounds the same. It's stiff and not really personalized. Now, I'm not saying you should force Applejack's accent to the front of every sentence or shove 'darling' after every other word for Rarity. But I would do a little more to make the characters sound like themselves.
This is awesome and Mipha even reacted in a way that makes her look like a mysterious creature. It happens to often that they never really use it, if someone transforms into a dog or something and tries to hide the fact that they are more than clever/sentient.
This is the next best thing.
I honestly can't wait to see shy Mipha appear again in front of the shy Fluttershy.
I'm not sure I understand what the figure in the cave is supposed to be. I thought at first you were describing a dragon, then a dragon man, but it's just some embery old guy? I'm picturing something out of Dark souls.
8089289 I should hope so.
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>Actually reads username for the first time
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Great chapter so far keep it up.
Hmm...
Decent update pace - Check
Grammar quality - well above average
Story concept - Intriguing
Word count - Just over the 10k minimum
You just earned a tracker for this story.
So much me gusta!
But i need more!!
I was just suddenly thinking how stupid they are that they probably thought let's try the main six to stop the greatest evil when we or our "trained" guards can't do it.
I know in stories the guards are often enough useless, but if Twilight and the others aren't using their "super natural friendship" powers, then I see no reason why they should be able to do much more than regular guards if you think about it.
I don't want to say anything with that, but when I was reading about everyone and proably Luna to be worried about Applejack, then I just thought about what they expected in the first place.
However I like it if Heroes aren't without some mistakes, so I guess it is the way I like it the most.
Thank you for the new chapter. I guess now we have to be a bit more patient till they "really" meet.
This... This is very very good i cannot wait for more
Well happy birthday!
Only error in the chapter and a 'late' happy birthday to you.
Yeaaahh no I still think their dreams are personal, it counts even more if they are not from your world Luna.
Anyway good work and happy birthday I guess
I like the direction of this already, can't wait for the next chapter!
I'm a little late to read this but happy birthday buddy
I wonder if Link, Zelda and the other Champions are going to be transported to Equestria through some shenanigans
And if Ganon is behind all the ponies disappearing, i wonder how he could have got to Equestria....
1. About time a BotW fic got published.
2. Luna is a dreamwalking freak.
Yiga clan.....
*licks lips*
Fresh blood....
I must feast on their blood!!!!!
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Proper word is sapient.
Great job on doing Mipha fight screen it was epice! I wounder what happened to that guy who chase Yiga Clan? Just curious will we ever going to see Zelda, Links, and the rest of the champion will appear on Equestria or it just forces only on Mipha? Can't wait to see what happens on the next chapter.
Please don't let the Yiga Clan be sweped by alicorns. The last thing we need is another alicorn deus ex machina.
When they intervene, it feels lazy and out of character. I sure as hell don't want to read Luna jumping at them and impaling them with her horn all the while yelling, "Huzzah" and other random things people think she says.
8135139 Well then, you're in luck, because the storyline I've had in mind for a while now is nothing of that sort.
8135174 I like your story so far great job.
8136374 My most humble of thanks, friend.
Hmm.... i wonder how Pinkie and Sidon would get along?
Rainbow and Revali i can already imagine. As well as AJ and Daruk. Rarity and Urbosa too. Even Twilight and Zelda
But Pinkie and Sidon i do not know
I have never played The Legend of Zelda: Breath of the Wild. Is Mipha voiced? If not then what do you think she'd sound like?
8154830 yes Mipha (and all the major characters in BotW) is voiced. Don't know what she actually sounds like, since I haven't gotten ahold of a Switch to play on, but according to what I've read she's very soft-spoken much like Fluttershy.
I'm loving every chapter so far!
Hope Link, Zelda, and Sidon make it to Equestria so they can be reunited with Mipha and possibly the rest of the Hyrule champion.
Just curious will this story contain Links x Mipha element please tell me or keep it a surprise?
Why isn't this more popular!?
8155001 Maybe we should try to spread and share with anyone who wants to read this?
Did... Link just take up a full paragraph of dialog?
What kind of horrifying universe is this?
i just noticed it right now, I like Dark Souls from what I could see so far, but I'm not sure if I like that being in the game too.
I mean I thought this would be Zelda only, sometimes I need that too, but then again this explains the big guy I guess and so far it was a nice story.
8157678 It'll only be a small subplot.
8158038 Just asking well this story have element of Link x Mipha by any chance?
8158466 I wouldn't want to spoil the surprise...
8159013 okay that's fair.
Hope next chapter comes soon I can't wait to see Mipha interact with the mane 7 and the Royal Sisters.
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Any update on the story?
love this fanfiction please do not stop
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Thankfully the Yiga Clan actually act like Ninjas, as in they don't look like Ninjas! And they have playing dirty down to a fine art. And they cheat death by teleporting away when Link takes them down anyway. Though I'll admit I'm hesitant to read this story, worried it'll be another lope sided x-over like Equestrian Wind Mage.
Hope this story isn't stop because I really like where this story is going?