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*Collab with Twilightclopple, first fic, enjoy:)*

"It's been three weeks. Three weeks, but it may as well have been three years, a lifetime, an eternity."

When her oldest and dearest friend falls ill, Twilight is forced to cope and reckon with the guilt and heartache that comes with the dwindling life of her favorite little dragon.

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Wow......this was really sad man WHY WOULD YOU WRITE THIS!!!!! im crying almost like i did after reading My Little Dashie :fluttercry:

Good story but I feel sorry for Twilight. Poor spike :applecry:

This is really, really sad. :fluttercry:

Writing amazing stories seems to run in your family, I can't wait to see what you write next. Now just STOP MAKING ME CRY!!:fluttershbad:

Omg amazing! You and your sister make an awesome pair! MOAR COLLABS

1) That was really good!
2) You pulled off the epistolary format very nicely, well done!
3) You got a little cannon in there, that's awesome, it makes what you add that much more believable.
4) ... applebloople? You made me d'aww with your username! (seriously that awesome)
Can't wait for more! :twilightsmile:

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Wow, just.. wow. No other words can express what I have just read other than, wow. I am utterly speechless from here on, Great Job. :twilightsmile:

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Emotional and well written, I look forward to more from you

I am sad right now. I didn't cry but knowing how close Spike and Twilight are made me close to crying. Also, is your name "applebloople" because of the YTP "Applebloom Has Issues?"

870653 d'aww, that's such an honor to be compared to! thank you:twilightsmile:

870697 im sitting next to you right now, so ill thank you in person.:heart:

870708 I felt sorry for twilight as I wrote it too :fluttercry:

870717 aww, stop it you!:twilightblush:

870720 thank you kind sir, i will accept the internet:)

870723 thank you, and we'll see!:twilightsmile:

870726 aww thanks, :twilightblush: and more shall come!

870731 thank you! I see why my sister likes you so much!

Great story girl! Looking forward to more :pinkiehappy:

I may not have cried, but this was great. Then again, I've only cried when I read a fic once, and I don't actually remember what it was. Anyways, 5 out of 5 crying Fluttershys. :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

870774

Oh, so word has spread from sibling to sibling of me? That is an un-expected but pleasant surprise. But, anyways, You have a large potential and am very glad that you have decided to share it with us and the Brony community. I must be the one to thank you and your sister for this gracious gift. :twilightsmile:

Now I must sleep, for I have been up for far too long. I'd say for roughly 40 hours. :derpyderp2: Goodnight, and I do wish to see more of your work.

Thank you, From your new fan
-Anonymous_SoFar

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Many tears were shed

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This was great, and beautiful, and sad as hell :fluttercry::fluttercry:
For making a story almost equivalent to the sadness level of My Little Dashie:
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Right in the feelings :fluttercry:

A very beautiful one-shot, I'm not ashemed to say that I cried at the end. You get a thumbs up and fav by me, I'm looking forward to your future works :twilightsmile:

You owe me a new heart
This one broke.

Keep on writing little bloople! I swear if you or your sister publish a book without linking me a place to get it I'll rage so hard :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:


But good job :rainbowlaugh::twilightsmile:

that was quite literaly amazing. :fluttercry:
heart wrenching, but amazing. I know what it's like to lose someone close, and what you wrote just about sums it up.
Great work, Loved it :heart: cant wait to see more :pinkiehappy:

that was quite literaly amazing. :fluttercry:
heart wrenching, but amazing. I know what it's like to lose someone close, and what you wrote just about sums it up.
Great work, Loved it :heart: cant wait to see more :pinkiehappy:

This was written well, and is a really good story. But I am a veteran of the internet and, thus, did not cry. Don't get me wrong, it was sad, but I barely shed a tear at My Little Dashie. Know that even though I didn't cry, I still think it is good and it is sad.

Ow. My feels. :fluttercry:
Fantastic work. Please do keep writing.

Well damn. I have somewhat of a heart of stone, so I didn't feel much of anything during this story, but it was well written. My problem is that it's short, and too short for me to have any type of emotional connection in this setting (and it doesn't help that I read rather quickly). However, it was quite well written, so there is that. I feel that a sad fic doesn't work as well when it's in letters or a format similiar to this, but that's my opinion. Keep on writing, you're obviously good at it.

This............was pretty good. Good, but sad.:fluttercry: I love these kinds of day-by-day type of stories when they reavel on what's going on over time.:heart:

Wonderful job, I couldn't even tell where you stopped and your sister started telling me that you are going to go really far as a writer. Congrats on your first fic well done.

Oh sweet Luna...this...

I just...

...So many tears!:fluttercry: This was so well written, the day-by-day format is perfect for this short story. You've successfully shattered my poor :heart:!

Not bad, but a bit too fast to create the impact it could have had.

omg.... applebloople ( "little clopple" :D )... this is like...wow.... right where it hurts:fluttercry: ...really nice written

wait...your name...THATS WHAT I CALL APPLE BLOOM :D Where did you get the name? :) I have been calling apple bloom apple bloople ever since she showed up xD That is so awesome xD

And intense story. Like, very, very great and surprisingly well written.

870774
I was like, the sister of one of my favorite authors wrote a story? MUST READ!!! I really enjoyed this, good job!:pinkiehappy:

:pinkiesad2: Why can't I hold all these tears?:fluttercry:

...Wow. Just, wow.

that was great!!! Although I don't like to read sad stories, this was pretty good. You have some great writings skills, applebloople

Short. Simple. To the point.

I liked it. So much emotion packed into this short story.

Only nitpick is that you start off naming the days, but then it just stops o.O

Have a good one.

why do i do this to myself? why do i love sad fics so much? its a good fic you two

871533 that onestop thing...not bad

Ow...
That hit me right in the fellings.
Great work applebloople ^.^ (greatest usermane ever)

871533
What the hell is this doing in this folder?!:rainbowlaugh:

Seriously though, that was a damn good first story.

great job
ma'am you now have my attention split between you and your sis
now i have to go put my heart back together

Somepony, anypony make a fan sequel or something, maybe alternate ending. My little Dashie had fan fanfics, even cupcakes had... So much possibilities this fic gives. A way for someone to write alternate ending where they cure him, where Twilight exchanges her life for Spike's when she sees Death, Twilight and others dealing with sorrow or blaming Twilight... So much can be done!

CONGRATULATIONS, YOU WON THE INTERNET!
...I guess I could say you are the...WINRAR?
BA-dum-TSSH!

If Spike ever does go. Two people are going to take it the hardest Twilight and Rarity.

My dear friend I hate you because you made me feel sad. Ok i dont hate you but im still sad.

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Now if you will excuse me I have to go bring Spike back to life good day sir.

So who wants to help me find the god dam dragon balls

It's nice to see a little role reversal. Usually it's Spike that has to mourn for Twilight since he is rumored to have a longer life span. (He is a baby dragon by Twilight's and Fluttershy's standards, yet he is about five or six years younger than Twilight.)

I may give this a read later. I just wanted to point out that lil' reversal thing. :twilightsmile:

Ah, nothing like an epic punch of sadness to the gut first thing after waking up...:raritycry:

You and your sis did a great job. I think you've proven you can handle a fic on your own (you have plenty of skill), and you're lucky to have a sister like Twilightclopple to be with you every step of the way.

You've got all summer to write, so have at it!

870774
Aww! :twilightsmile: Your name and icon are so adrorab... Spike? static.fimfiction.net/images/characters/spike.png NOOOOOOO!!! HNNNNGGGGG... :fluttershbad: Right in my FEELS!!! Right in them! :fluttercry:

featured already :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: congrats

I read some comments and said "How sad could it be?" I regret saying that...

I will admit, I started out reading it because TC asked me to.
But after the first couple of "days" I read on because I wanted to.
This was a very good story, and I can see great things comin from your mind, hoofs, and keyboard.
Keep up the good work.


On a side note: how does a 14 y/o wrote better then I do?:raritydespair:

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