This story is a sequel to Parallels
The alliance between Equestria and Alemaneia continues to hold steadfast; Colonel Paul Werner and Generalfeldmarschall Aryanne Land's 'relationship' is at an all-time high... though that does not say much.
Things turn unprecedented, however, when Alemaneia becomes the victim. Actions against the state would never sit lightly with Aryanne, and she vows to unleash the entire military might of her nation against the offending foreign government... even at the threat of multi-state intervention in a to-be conflict. The world pleads with Equestria to rein in the fascist nation or risk a global conflict, and Paul is tasked with talking Aryanne's justified response down.
However, she'll only talk to him on one condition:
He must come to Alemaneia.
All the while, Paul must grapple with some of his biggest demons.
-Reading of 'Parallels' is not explicitly required, though highly encouraged if you want the surrounding details and lead-up.
-Awesome base Aryanne art done by Antamoanimisan-m, sourced to derpibooru. (Their tumblr is NSFW)
Awesome start, I can't help but hope Mareitonia gets wrecked.
Nice beginning. Can't wait for part 2! Have a fave and a like.
2 typos found:
1) Chapter title "Sein Welt", it must be "Seine Welt"
2) "Gute Nacht, meine Röslein", it must be "mein Röslein"
Honestly Flammen, if you need somebody to proofread your storys with heavy german language in it, then I am happy to be that one guy. :)
Cheers and stay awesome!
\m/
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1. the noun is Der Welt, ergo it should be 'sein' Welt, ja? I'm not truncating an expression (i.e. um seine Welt) in which case the dative will kick in? I'm literally just saying 'his world.'
2. That was a legit typo, thanks!
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Not quite. In german "Welt" is female, so this means "Die Welt". And if you spreak from "his world" then you also have to use female form in german which is "seine Welt". ;)
So my proofread thing still stands. :P
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No I understand the grammar (half my family speaks the language) but I apparently somehow associated 'Welt' as masculine.
Welp.
7764133 This is mainly the reason I tried and failed at learning German
Damn it Aryanne. Then again, in a twisted way, I understand her reasoning. If someone attacked you and those who you care for (even if you hide it under a mask of professionalism... come on, she can't be absolutely evil), you'd naturally want to retaliate and never stop until vengeance is done.
And even if the government of Mareitonia didn't have anything to do with the attacking cell, just their refusal to hand them over out of spite is making them incredibly suspicious.
This will be a wild, wild ride, won't it? Paul has his work cut out for him.
But never underestimate the determination of a father absolutely devoted to protecting his child no matter the cost.
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Fun fact: a native speaker of a language with grammatical genders, such as German or French, will automatically assign a gender to a word when they hear it, even if they've never heard it before or even if it's a foreign word. Ninety percent or so of the time, it will be the correct gender for native words on the first try and the gender most people agree on if it's a loan word.
There's this big set of unspoken rules about what decides which gender a word is assigned that you'll only ever really internalize if you grew up speaking the language. It's a lot like Chinese that way, just not nearly as bad. You are in the vast majority of people there who try to learn German as a second language and it's a very well-known problem.
The next chapter must be really long, since there's enough material for 50 - 100k story here.
With that being said, Looking forward to the next chapter.
Aryanne as Seeroses's stepmother... yeah, not gonna happen.
Well, this is gonna be interesting!
I wanna read this right now so bad, because I fucking loved Parallel, but I shall have to resist until tonight, otherwise I'mma be bored as fuck at work. But you better damn well know it'll be read way too quickly to even matter in that case.
holy shit this will be good can not wait for the next chapter
all hail Flammenwerfer and his dope ass story's and legit awesome characters
in short I LOVE YOU DUDE
...is this some ploy for Aryanne to ask Erik out on a date?
Something doesn't sit right with that logic, if a single individual was the only target why would terrorists use something impractical like a bomb instead of something like a sniper rifle, or a barrage of arrows?
Well that and the likelihood that their government did finance the terrorists immediately rises by not handing them over.
At this point it looks like both sides are being stupid by allowing this thing to escalate and there is no reason to believe that Paul won't be able to stop the conflict.
However, that dark tag may allow this story to go down the hill for no good reason...
~Leonzilla
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Bombs have been used in assassination attempts before:
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/20_July_plot
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Precision use of a bow would require a highly skilled individual, and it is unlikely that a terrorist cell supplied by what is apparently a militarily weak nation could have such an individual. Imprecise use of a bow would require the use of a great number of bows, which would be just as indiscriminate as a bomb but much less effective. A sniper rifle comes with the same problem as precise use of a bow, with the added wrinkle that it might not exist yet.
At least, that's how I imagine it would work. I think it makes sense.
7765030 I know, I'm not saying it is implausible, I'm saying it isn't the best choice if one wanted to keep a low profile and have the best odds of having a successful assassination.
The use of a bomb could imply that the ones responsible didn't merely want to take Aryanne out of the picture if at all, but also intended to cause a ruckus. Perhaps with the deliberate intention of arising a conflict like the one we are seeing.
~Leonzilla
7765052 That does address most of the issues, although if we assume the terrorists didn't intend to start a conflict they should have had the foresight to at least plant the bomb at a place where there wouldn't be so many bystanders getting killed.
That leaves two possibilities either there was a plot to deliberately cause discord between the nations or the people responsible for the attack were so incompetent they didn't realize the ramifications of causing an assault of this nature and magnitude.
~Leonzilla
I wonder if there is a Tiger II tank. That will help big time.
7765052 you'd be surprised. The ANZAC troops came from nations that had basically zero experience in war and they fought like hell at Gallipoli. Small or sparsely populated nations with weak military traditions doesn't always equal helplessness.
Hot fucking shit ahoy boy, this is looking to be an awesome start to a fantastic story.
W-wait...
SHIT! There's so much material here for a longer tale... oh well.
Honestly, one of my favorite guns to use in Call of Duty 2: Big Red One. Best weapon, hell I use all the Nazi weapons, I love their stuff.
And after reading into the comments here... I gotta say Mareitonia is looking rather suspicious right here. I mean, they say they didn't finance the terrorists, and yet they refuse to hand over known suspects to face justice. I think Aryanne is well within her right to retaliate. I know if I was in her position and someone did this shit to kill me, but ended up hurting over a hundred innocents, they're nothing but cowards and need to be shot dead.
And the country refuses to hand them over when they're supposedly known? You damn right Ima invade you cunts!
PFFT, I'm with Aryanne on this one. I'm hoping Mareitonia burns. No hate for bat ponies buuuut...
Nicely done man, nicely done.
Paul has one hell of a good argument for Aryanne to pull back and try to calm down:
... the war he 'died' fighting in 1943 was caused by disturbingly similar circumstances in the summer of 1914...
...That they committed a bombing, attacked a high ranking officer, killed over 100+ people, and refuse to turn over the terrorist cell, and if they back down they give the idea that people can willfully come in and start killing them at random with no threat back.
7765351 Certainly, but is it worth starting a world war?
That's the question
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Well, Alemaneia has a history of rounding up "undesirables" and working them to death. Add to that, it seems like a number of the resident powers in Alemaneia are not just proponents of such actions, but likely participants. Mareitonia seems to have a healthy population of those undesirables, and may not have too much care how many Alemaneians are hurt in the process. After all, Alemaneia is likely "them" to Mareitonia, and "they" are all monsters that deserve what they get!
P.S. Flammen! Stop making Nazi ponies so cute!
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That first possibility wasn't something that I had considered. It certainly would be interesting if the pony-politics were brought to the forefront.
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You're certainly right, but I would contend that this is a different matter. The ANZAC troops were soldiers, equipped by the engine if total war that was the British Empire—with neither Australia and New Zealand not being fully independent, and the invasion being Churchill's idea in the first place. Meanwhile, those involved here are considerably fewer in number and not affiliated with the most powerful country in the world. There technically could be a capable sniper (with a bow, I mean; I still doubt the world has proper sniper rifles yet), but I would consider it unlikely.
7765360 If the potential is being seen as weak, and with a chance that enemies will strike furthermore as a result due to the lack of no response? It's actually a harder choice then he seems to make of it.
But yeah, should be interesting to see where this goes.
Cracking good stuff so far, Flam! I really enjoyed Parallels and was hoping you'd carry on with it.
7765360 To be honest, it's sorta happened before in world war 1, just different
Also, congrats on getting featured
Gut gemacht.
Fuckin baller dude. I first learned of you from the HiE podcast. Your goofy voice and joking from the podcast is interfering with this awesome writing. Love it!
Loved Parallels, and this one looks like it's going to be just as good... On the other Hoof, it also "feels" like it's going to be both Much longer, and much darker by the time everything is said and done...
I'll add it to my Read Later bin and come back to it once I see the "Completed" tag so I can blitz through it in one go rather than hang myself with suspense on any potential cliffhangers...
I'm looking forward to then.
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There’s also a third possibility: it was the only way they could target her. As Almaneia’s highest ranking officer, she’s presumably ensconced in some place like the pentagon >90% of the time, her day‐to‐day schedule is likely not known to the public, and she almost certainly always has guards with her.
Hopefully Paul can use WWI as an example as to what can happen.
7767082 Yes, that could be a good part of it, but I'm most interested about the intentions of the attackers, in other words the why they would attack more than why they would attack the way they did.
I have been analyzing the second one because I see the incident's sircumstances as the most significant clue we got to figure out the first one.
The reason I feel like pressing the why is to figure out if there is going to be a "Conflict of interests" here, because despite the title I feel the strory hasn't yet introduced one.
The conflict as it has been presented here without adding anything more to it is shaping out to be more of a conflict of values and/or perspectives.
A conflict of interest usually refers to a situation where acting for the benefit of one means acting for the detriment of another. At this point it seems that both parties are acting against their best interests.
That's why I'm hoping there is more to it, otherwise I say that title would be kind of inappropriate for this story.
~Leonzilla
Little things are not that important.
impressive first chapter. hope this becomes a multi chap fic that is in for the long haul.
and already the comments are becoming political analyst in their own right shows the kind of greatness this fic has potential in.
Glad to see the story is continued
I heard mention this was part 1 of 2 – but I can’t find that written anywhere. Did you change your mind?
At any rate, I love to see this story continue. You’ve got a knack for making Aryanne seem sympathetic, for an unashamed Nazi-equivalent. I wonder how old-time Alemaneia compared to Nazi Germany at its height; so far it sounds a bit tamer, with atrocities limited to mass deportations rather than systematic genocide.
What I really hope to see is Paul giving Aryanne a history lesson in just where her brand of thinking led the human world. I think if she were to understand just how deep that rabbit hole went, she might reconsider a few things. Just a few.
7918135 I removed it because it was too restrictive. This story will continue as long as necessary.
With recent updates, I can focus on this again. We have chapter 2 coming soon :D
Thank you! Glad you're enjoying it so far! Hoped Parallels worked for you too if you read it
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It certainly did. T’is why I was excited to see this was already posted by the time I finally got around to reading the second chapter.
The feels are intestified from their bonding moment.
This was a very good chapter.
wonder what's going to happen to him in alemaneia
Damn man... this was a good chapter
Emotions and feels aplenty! 
Hahaha
Nicely done man. I love characters like Seerose, smart and epic~
Keep it up dude.
That nightmare... that was terrible
Indeed, little Seerose is growing up. The conversation was quite sweet though and that ending... d'awwwwww
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The problem is, Paul was displaced into Equestria before the fall of the Reich, so he cannot tell Aryanne about "minor" things like the destruction of Berlin, Nuremberg trials, Germany´s name and pride being dragged through the mud, the words "Nazi" and "Führer" forever associated with capital Evil in the minds of all people in the world, etc...
Awesome chapter can't wait for the next one!
yay new chapter! :D lookin good! cant wait for the next!
This is intense.