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kudzuhaiku


She's looking at you. Yes you. And she is judging you with her eyes. There is no escape.

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This story is a sequel to The Perilous Romance of Swans


An entire house is consumed by darkness and devoured by the stuff of nightmares. A foal is trapped within this house, which is now a nest of terrors.

Princess Luna arrives to deal with the nightmares leaking into the waking world and close the rift.

But this is no ordinary darkness.

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Had this on loop in the backround added a nice element to the scene

You made me go check PRS to see if you'd compleated it when I wasn't looking. :pinkiecrazy:

Very nice. Very nice indeed. While this is part of the Weedverse, perhaps you could set a story/folder aside for these little side storylets. On another note, I would have been willing to wait until Samhain for this. :twilightsmile:

But this is no ordinary darkness.

This isn't your average everyday darkness...

This is... advanced darkness.

Very nice! I can bet that Luna and gosling will be getting into all sorts of trouble in the future.

would work well in tpros. Luna doesn't really trust Goss or herself . He just put it all on the line for what he thought was her. something she did not expect.

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Prepare magic missile...

*le crie*
Dammit dude.
Why is everything you write perfect?
Keep up the good work, dude.
:V loving your experimentation with horror stories. Ever thought about going back to 'To Dance in Shadow?'

That ending was very sweet! :twilightsmile: I was wondering why an E-rated story had the horror tag, and now I know. However, you might want to add some other tags so people aren't driven away.

7598474 Ok then. Are you sure that combination isn't misleading, though?

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The story is both dark and has horror elements. That seems accurate.

7598160 heh. Now I have to you tube that skit. Ben a while.

This was very well done in making me fear for Gosling. His love for his alicorns keeps getting him hurt and for a bit I thought he might be more seriously injured.

Now though I am truly looking forward to his date with Luna.

A one-shot, one-chapter story by Kudz??

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Still, very nicely written, and even though I didn't follow the Gosling story at all, I was quite impressed with how the charcter was portrayed in this story.

This is what can happen if you botch while using Obtenebration!

How could you do this to the most Beautiful, Pretty Pegasus in all of creation? You caused him to molt feathers! He wont be able to go out in public for days now!

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Oh. yeah. I'm sure he'll be completely distraught. *eye roll* He'll be so distraught as he's pampered and fussed over by Celestia for being so brave and getting wounded doing such a noble thing. I'm pretty sure that Luna might even bring him a hot chocolate or something.

:raritywink:

Kudzu - very nice piece here. Short and to the point. I think both Luna and Gosling learned something about each other and themselves through all of this.

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Actually, Luna goes through the trouble to learn how to knit and she makes him a very ugly sweater to keep warm in after most of his feathers fall out and he's left with huge bald patches on his pelt.

The Perilous Gestation of Swans will pick up where this story finishes off.

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I really hope that's foreshadowing with regards to the sweater. That's hilarious.

(Fluttershy knits, I'm sure she'd be willing to teach...)

“This little filly can pull nightmares into reality,” Luna replied.

Man, of all the special talents to get.

As before, mini-Twilight is my favorite. A princess of action.

Pegasi were loyal, if perhaps a little air headed and stupid.

Heh.

INB4 it's actually the filly and not Luna.

Yeah, I thought so.

Good job, Gosling.

Comment posted by sadfox deleted Sep 29th, 2016

Yee-ikes. :rainbowderp:
Where'd this come from, then? :rainbowhuh:
And why did you choose to make it a seperate story, out of interest? :derpyderp1:

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Ugly sweaters are the best when sick. You don't have to worry about keeping them neat and pretty. Just so long as they keep you warm, that is all that matters.

Read the scary horror story you said. Its a good story you said. :fluttercry:

Well damnit you were right :yay:

Honestly though, Light-horror tag required, neigh (:ajbemused:) demanded.

Well, guess I have now read through the entire weed-verse that is available.

Awesome job Kudzu, awesome job :moustache:

As usual, a very amazing piece of literature springs forth from the desk of Kudzuhaiku.

Though the title made me think of this song fairly heavily...

You know I'm not normally into Horror, but this was different. I actually really enjoyed this story! <3

This is a great one-shot that illustrates the growth of friendship between Gosling and Luna, with the seeds planted to grow into something more, as I'm hoping we'll see in The Perilous Gestations of Swans. While horror is not generally a genre I favor, I enjoyed this read very much for the focus on atmosphere and emotion. :twilightsmile:

Given the setting, plot, and overall thematic feel, I could not help but hear this old gem playing as I read: :raritywink:

Done as you suggested, yet surprised that I missed this one. Unfortunately, while very well written, I'm not sure this succeeds as a horror story. There was just no tension. Only three ponies were in the house, a stranger and two protagonists who would no doubt make it out.
The parallels between Luna's sorrow and the filly was a nice touch. I can only imagine the suggestion to read this chapter is because Moon Rose will play a significant role, that or Gosling's latest injures were more series than he thought.

Was that hearthfire that saved the day there or is that just Flurry's thing?

Well this is another story which made me think, and I like that. I like this story a lot. To my knowledge this is the first time a Darkness Elemental has been mentioned in the Weedverse. Plus this Elemental was able to trap Luna and feed off her, Moon Rose, and Gosling. That is disturbing news as the implications for this type of magic can be severe if Moon Rose is not taught how to use her powers. On that note, presumably, in The Perilous Gestation of Swans Moon Rose is going to be a part of the story and will be taught how to use her powers for good. It would seem to me that Rose will have confidence and image issues where she will not want to use her powers because she might hurt other ponies whom will then label her as a monster.

Additionally, seeing as The Perilous Romance of Swans picks up immediately after this story I am curious to see what what role young Rose shall play.

“Look…” Gosling blinked a few times, unsure of what to say, and he looked into the eyes of the smaller stallion.
“Ma’am?” the petite stallion said, offering up a little help.
“Yeah.” Gosling nodded. “Look, Ma’am, everything is gonna be fine. You should see if you can find shelter with a neighbor. It’s below zero out here. You shouldn’t worry, it causes wrinkles, and your face is entirely too pretty for wrinkles to set in at your age.”

Really? It's a stallion. Sir is the proper pronoun. Dont pause to check when it's blatantly obvious. There are only 3 genders. Male, female, and RETARDED.

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And you must be retarded, correct?

These five sexes include male, female, hermaphrodite, female pseudohermaphrodites (individuals who have ovaries and some male genitalia but lack testes), and male pseudohermaphrodites (individuals who have testes and some female genitalia but lack ovaries). Fausto-Sterling additionally adds that in the category of hermaphrodites, there are additional degrees and levels in which the genitalia are developed; this means that there may be more intersexes that exist in this continuum of gender.

And these are just the commonly accepted five that science recognises, but there is between 30 to 50 shades of gender and chromosomal arrangements that science is debating right now. Plus brain chemistry, which we are only just beginning to understand.

So please, don't stink up my comments sections with ignorance. Thank you.

Comment posted by wildlander84 deleted Mar 15th, 2017
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Gender is defined by having or not having an Y - chromosome in one's genome. And this is a fact.
Various aberrations like ones you mentioned are mostly caused by mutations and/or hormonal imbalance. So, I wouldn't say "retarded", but still definitely abnormal.

Aside all this "sexes and minorities" chit-chat, thanks for a good story.

It may be my lack of attention to detail, but I was completely blindsided by the second-to-last paragraph

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The biological gender binary is not in question here ... what is is the gender identity of the individual, which is more mental, spiritual, and PERSONAL. And before someone on this comments board gets huffy and starts a political or religious debate over the depiction of this ideology in a story about fictional technicolor ponies in a world of magic ... remind yourself that we as a species STILL argue over what fictitious all-knowing sky-god we should pray to, and what code of ethics and morals that are from bygone eras we should adhere to.

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As far as I remember, human is born with one of 2 biological genders, and that's over. And "gender identities" are, I agree, "mental, spiritual, and PERSONAL". Except the question whether that's a pathology or "perfectly normal" is pretty much still on debate. And my opinion is that's a first case here.

I'm guessing the parent referred to as "Ma'am" is transgender? That's neat. Though mostly I'm wondering what reason Gosling had to hesitate. Unless it's just a normal thing in pony society. Fair enough.

This was a surprisingly heartfelt story, and one that wasn't nearly as horrifying as I expected it to be.

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He hesitated because he was trying to be diplomatic and polite. He chose his words carefully.

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I can respect that, it's just... I'm trying to think of how to phrase this. What did Gosling see or notice to suggest that extra diplomacy was necessary? I wouldn't think that it would be a standard question for most same-sex marriages, is all.

This was nice. The atmosphere of the Nightmare zone is really chilling. And its nice to see more of Woona and Goose interacting

such a sweet story and one hell of a lead in to the main story.

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