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Will Princess Twilight ahd Human Celestia learn of Sunset going after the cMC? Figured they should be elft out fo the beat down Sunset giving away.
Can't wait to read more and see what happenes.
Could Sunsets new targets be the school board that just fired Celestia? Also how would Sunset react when she discovers she almost killed two innocent people?
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I am not sure how I will handle having Sunset learn of this let alone having it be in this story or the sequel. I really do like your comment though and I look forward to what you will think of the next chapter.
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I am not sure what to do with their characters yet I have to get through a few more chapters first one being that I need to show what happens to Summer, Gilda, and Sonata. I also need to do the chapter showing the actual prophecy and why Adagio is so worried about her younger sister going back to Equestria.
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Hopefully the CMC won't die in some sadistic way possible.........
right?
Sunset is going to give her tormentors a bad time.
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I am not sure yet as to what I am going to do with their characters. But I should have something in a few days.
Theme song?
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Thanks for the song. Looking forward to what you will think of next for the next chapter.
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Ok
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I liked the song as it was a good choice for a comment I am sorry if I confused you. Any how I do look forward to reading more comments from you when I get another chapter up.
Sheesh, Sunset broke that girls spine. And now Twilight and Celestia are going to war.
I guess at this point it's getting kind of delusional to hope that anyone is gonna make it out of this as more than a miserable, traumatized mess of a person, hm? I can't see Sunset or Eventide becoming well adjusted members of society again. Any society, really.
Personally i think you should add some positive moments to this tragedy, it's getting hard to root for anyone of the remaining sympathetic characters, when things just turn for the worst anyway.
Maybe give Sonata, Vinyl and Octavia at least a happy ending. They've been through enough crap at this point.
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Don't worry I will be adding a few tender moments with Fluttershy and Sunset. I just have to take care of the CMC first before I do that I can't leave it at the cliff hanger that I left it at. But yes there will be a few tender moments with Fluttershy as she talks with Sunset. And I do plan on showing a few tender moments with Sonata and Sunset as well.
All right. I'm finally all caught up. I've left some thoughts here and there, but here's what I think so far.
When I started reading, I was finding it hard to continue. There were several typos and grammatical errors which, over time and with icecreammac's editing, have become almost non-existent. What drudged on more for me, though, was the show pace at the beginning. I love Sunset Shimmer, though, and from the prologue knew I wanted to finish reading this, so I kept up with it. I found the CMC to be petty and very out of character, and while their reasons for doing what they did made sense in the context of the story, I still found their portions the hardest to get through.
Once you introduced Summer Sunrise, however, I could tell that finishing the fic was definitely going to be worth it. This is the first fic I've read so far that has two Sunsets in the same world, and I liked the twists involving them and Evenstar's histories and connection. Chrysalis's subplot added more life to the story, and seeing Celestia and her as friends added more power to "A Canterlot Wedding" as well.
Sunset's spiral into suicide was very believable and included many factors and symptoms of suicide victims in real life. Though the human five still overreacted and were out of character, that's kind of unavoidable for stories based on the source comic, and what they do makes sense for the context of the story. I still have some nitpicks, such as some characters crying too much, but those are minimal issues.
I don't remember what chapter I was reading when I got this idea, but for me this fic reads a lot like a serial TV series: all the different subplots, how they connect, the side characters having their own subplot and spinoff, and the action. You are very good at writing action, and, if I may say so, I think your forte is writing horror like the chapter DOA and Trixie's interrogation. I thoroughly enjoyed reading them, almost giving me chills.
Overall, this fic has gotten much better since the beginning. I'm glad I chose to stick through it.
I can't help but think the guy is Discord, but then we have the whole 'Late Husband' thing. Could it have been the one to help Luna that did it?
There's a lot of things that could be said, true.
I imagine that WAR! Celestia is going to be a bit crazy too with how she worked to try and protect Twilight. Thing is, it's going to just keep getting worse thanks to that. Still, having someone who's been to War means that we may end up with an interesting side that we never thought we would see.
Then there is the fact that the School Board probably will lay blame on her from the two innocent students getting it.
Sunset getting after the CMC. Oh my. Will she hurt Granny as well? This isn't going to be good in any form for any of them.
Ok, so Luna is in the 'doghouse' so to speak with her sister. Twilight seems to be only somewhat hit with it. Mmm Celestia being disobeyed is a very different side, especially since she's protecting WARlestia as I'll call her for the moment to differentiate the two.
I do wonder what Dash will do when she hears of Sunset going after the CMC now too.
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Well, I look forward to what you will think of the next chapter as Sunset goes after the CMC for what they did to her. Thank you so much for the wonderful comment I should I hope to have another chapter up sometime next week.
Oh boy......this is going to be terrible (for the CMC).
so... how bad is it that I grinned?
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Not bad at all I look forward to reading more of your comments I hope you will enjoy the story.
Where Spike?
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he stayed at Twilight's castles after he found Adagio I'll bring him back when I send Twilight back to Equestria and send human Luna to Equestria