Anon-a-miss strikes causing Sunset Shimmer much pain and heartache.
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Oh shit.
This is......oh my god!!
This is getting more and more suspenseful! Keep going!! 👏
Who her clone don't think that will work!
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Do not worry I will answer this in the next chapter. I promise you that it will be answered.
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Thank you I look forward to what you will think of the next chapter once it comes out.
i'm guessing sonata is ignoring the possibility of going to a higher power for help because said power probably would still require punishment for the mane 5 or the CMC?
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Not quite but I'll show what Sonata does in the next chapter. I hope you'll enjoy it once it comes out. Thank you for the comment I look forward to your thoughts on the next chapter.
That's quite the way to tell the tale, as well as make sure she has a reason to either love or not. Though this does mean that Celestia from Equestria is needed for it. Still, to need to kill her fully in destruction!
Redemption is a Fury, Queen of Tartarus. Yet love could prove the way. However, they choose the water of the womb instead of blood. How very different, but this will still show if Fury will find and finish the girls. Magic has some bumps and bruises, though the Heartsong almost got through. Will Sonata find a way to show she is family by choice, or will she fail?
With so many now rushed to the hospital, we do indeed have a few touches here and there otherwise. Mr. Cake is furious about keeping Sunset Safe, even though he's gone out of his way to save others still. Then there is poor Mr. Cuffs. I don't think he's dead, though you never know with an author. Still, poor Jade may have to learn her partner ended up dead. She's tried so hard to survive everything, and yet this is what has happened. Magic showing in the real world may have worse consequences still. Will the girls be snagged to be used? This fall out is deep, and yet this is only going to continue. I look forward to further chapters.
Once again, Maud is a predictable badass! I'd expect no less from a member of the Pie family!
What do you think Flutters?
BUUUUUUUUURN!!!!
Now that is gonna be hard.... Good luck with that everybody, you're gonna need it.
Once again, very well written chapter! Can't wait to see what happens next and what Sonata will do!
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Thank you for the wonderful comment I look forward to what you will think of the next chapter once it comes out and is ready for review.
Princess Celestia has so much to answer for and whatever answers she has hidden, will have to be forced out of her if necessary. Also, the Demon’s Heart sounds like some sorta evil dagger.
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No problem, I'll be waiting!
Well then, things are certainly coming to a head now
Although at this point I have no idea which one of Sunset's screwed up relationships would actually give her a reason to love again.
So I just go for the left field option and guess that her newborn brother and sister will be what pulls her back.
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It's actually a crystal in the shape of a heart with metal wrapped around it forming into a sharp metal point at the very tip.
8807401 You make it sound like it looks like the Crystal Heart with barbed wire wrapped around it, which makes it even worse.
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I wasn't trying to go for that image at all. I was trying to have it appear to be a crystal with metal wrapped around it coming to a needle sharp point at the end of it.
8807443 Oh. Either way, it’s a painful thing to insert into someone’s chest cavity while they’re still alive.
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True. Looking forward to what you will think of the rest of the story.
In my simple words, if a certain blue-skinned, multi-colored haired girl stepped in and stopped Dumbbell from stabbing Sunset with the Demon's Heart, then none of this would have happened.
That's definitely easier said then done.
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Thank you so much for the comment and you are absolutely correct it is easier than done so, therefore, I look very much forward to your thoughts on the next chapter once it comes out.
A great chapter that leads us through a suspenseful rush of emotions and danger as we follow the others slowly realizing that their guilt runs much deeper than they thought it did.
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Especially since Sunset seems to be very low in the flesh and blood relatives that can be called upon in this situation...
though I have hope.
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Thank you for your comment I look very much forward to what you will think of the next chapter once it comes out and is ready for review. I am hopeful that you'll be surprised as to whom her blood and flesh relative is. Till then I wish you good day filled with happy smiles and much laughter.
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YOu as well mein friend *hugs*
Someone shes related to by blood huh? I hope they'll be able to find this person in the next 10 seconds! Man Sonata was so close too if her sisters were there as well to give her backup she would have had a fighting chance, then again that might make it too easy. Also Mr Cake quick question, DID YOU REALLY JUST PUNCH A WOMAN (WHO IS ALSO A COP)?!!!😲 I know your worried about your baby girl in all but I can tell you this Brushed Jade is gonna give you an earful when this is all over. Im glad to see Luna and the others made it out in one piece not counting the injuries Sunset gave to the Crusaders and Dash. Anyways that was a pretty suspenseful and exciting chapter cant wait to see who they must find to hopefully free Sunny.
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Well with that in mind I look very much forward to your thoughts on the next chapter. I hope you will enjoy it once it comes out and is ready for review. and yes Mr. Cake did hit a police officer. Not sure what I am going to do about that but I have at least a few chapters to decide how I am going to handle this. Again I look forward to your thoughts on the upcoming chapter.
I'm back ^^.
Sure we talked a bit but that was about the fav and the follow, now I'll say my (constructives) thoughts about your great story.
I'll admit, I had difficult to keep up the story, by jumping into Sunset past > the actual events > Anon-A-Miss in general > the Demon Heart > etc. ...
There was so many things to keep up with at a moment and when I was reading it for the first time, I got carried away.
But I realize that reading again your story could help me to understand what will come next. Before I didn't understand Sunset's past and Thirteen, now I do. Like what happened between Fluttershy, Applejack and Sunset, it took me one chapter (A Video Of The Past) to understand easily what was going on (while I don't remember if you made a reference to this moment before in the story).
Now I need to understand the whole crazy thing about which and who Twilight/Sunset/Eventide/Crystalis really are, what's involving them with both Princess and Principal Celestia (speaking of their pasts, relationship, etc., like the chapter Monastery, and every others where there is some explanation about, as Twilight and Luna agreeing to tell Principal Celestia her daughter is alive in Equestria, even if I don't understand why Twilight would agree to do it, if it's about the ponycounterpart of Celestia's daughter and not the human one, unless she crossed the portal...).
The relationship between Sunset and Rainbow is ok, but I think I should read how it started in the beginning.
I know Rainbow is worried and concerned about Scootaloo, but I found that you made her mind changing a bit too often and quickly about Sunset (or because it is rough for her after everything that happened?).
Don't get me wrong, it is normal and logical that she wants to save Scootaloo, but before Sunset told her that she was holding her, she was still grieving about the events, then considering Sunset as a threat, then when she arrived at Crystal Ridge, she's trying to reason Sunset -(“What gives you the right to beg anything from me?”)-, felt sorry for what happened and again, changed her mind and snapped before fighting.
I didn't want to be harsh or anything, but Rainbow really had differents opinions and choices along the story and wasn't still about that.
The whole thing about the Sirens' prophecy is something, but I'm not entertained by it yet (I consider that it is relevant to the story and many things could lead to or have been from it, so I'll wait).
Was Sonata going to hypnotize Sunset again? Did she recovered enough strength/Magic since the last time?
Could you define "Equestria could be at war", being the reason Princess Celestia doesn't want Twilight to come back (I mean it is more important to protect an Element bearer [Magic furthermore] than using it's power)?
It's an alternate universe so any events in the show differ, but maybe you coud tell how you wanted to write this part?
The last letter of Sunset to Applejack is a moment I liked.
Well I think that's all.
All things considered, you're making a good story, that is unique (as all stories) but with something to detach itself from others, while staying being in the AaM theme.
I don't know how AaM stories are received nowadays but for my part you're doing fine, and I intend to keep up with you ^^.
So keep going and take your time as long as you need, because your story is worth to wait.
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Thank you for the comment. I look forward to reading your comments on the next upcoming chapter. As for Equestria might be at war part what Celestia both human and princess don't realize is that Princess Celestia has been at war with Chrysalis since the death of her foal Chrystalis. Ever since then Chrysalis has been systematically taking ponies out of the small quaint villages while staying out of the larger cities. replacing those that she takes with her own forces and getting ready for an invasion. This will be shown in the sequels to this story, however, I will at least mention it in this one.