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Oh good! Sunset's NOT homeless! I was genuinely worried for a second there.
Unless Sunset physically harms Dash or blackmails her in some way, there's not much grounds for a lawsuit. I hope that woman knows that... (I've decided not to go into a rant about the legal system (at least, not the one in the States) here. I'll leave that for my blog posts on Tumblr.)
Okay, I gotta address this, cause it bugs me, every time. And it's not your fault it bugs me, either, just natural nitpickery. The Fall Formal could only take place in August at the earliest. Anything before that is Summer. And even if it was the beginning of August, six months later is still February. (I only know that because Meghan herself said that Rainbow Rocks takes place half a year after Equestria Girls and I was trying (and failing) to figure out a timeline, but we're ignoring Meghan right now for the sake of our sanity). But the special happens before Christmas... Again, not any mistake of yours it's just something that always jumps to mind whenever I see time measured in months used in these fics.
Dude! Dude!! DUDE! Rainbow, I get you're pissed but DUDE! Not. Cool.
And then the scene with Sunday in the bathroom. I'm just like "SHOT THROUGH THE HEART!" Wait, I thought you said this want a shipping fic? ... Fuck it, I don't care, I'm already in too deep to quit.
But you do
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I will fully admit that I am not very good with months, days, dates or years but I am working on it or at the very least trying to work on it. The Fall Formal could have just been a name for the dance itself and not set in an actual time such as a month like August or September. When I went to school we had three dances that should have been held during the fall but due to schooling and time schedules, each was held during the spring and middle of the school year. So thus the times of the dances became nothing more than the names of them. Yes, I know it sounds weird and all but that is how it was back then.
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Then there's how the graveyards scene takes place February 5th, or 15th, but the actual chapter that's LABELLED 6 weeks is set early December, making it a full 2 months.
I think you might be better off going with this being a year later. The Fall Formal that Sunset crashed was actually junior year. Christmas comes along but none gives much thought to it, Rainbow Rocks hapens, Friendship games...Then this occurs Senior year.
I also wonder if you shouldn't maybe move the first chapter to later on in the fic. As it stand, knowing that it doesn't get better robs the story of much of its tension, making it pretty boring. The sister bit was unique but it largely feels like the story is just going through the motions required to reach it's pre-scribed ending.