Enlarged Honeymoon

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The Great Derpsby

The Great Derpsby #1 · Sep 12th, 2015 · · · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

Why all the downvotes? I've seen much, much worse written with far less skill.

Welp, probably the choice of characters. I'd suggest you ignore the votes for the most part unless they're accompanied by some sort of useful criticism.

As it is, the ship in this fic is a rather interesting one. Personally, I love it to pieces whenever the male of such a harem takes a dominant part in what's going on, but understand that's not everyone's taste. Still, it would be very enjoyable to see that happen here!

Whatever else, you would do well to explain who Succubus is and how she got to know the other characters.

Twilight Best Pony

Twilight Best Pony #2 · Sep 12th, 2015 · 2 · · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

I'm thinking the downvotes are because of prince blueballs.

Holocron

Holocron #3 · Sep 12th, 2015 · · · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

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That's one part of the plan. But this is a story commission, so it's not my call.

Holocron

Holocron #4 · Sep 12th, 2015 · · · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

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I already knew this would happen, so I am not that surprised. So I will simply write and finish the story. This is to give Blueblood the positive outlook no one is willing to try. Even though personally I don't like him myself.

The Great Derpsby

The Great Derpsby #5 · Sep 13th, 2015 · · · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

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The explaining Succubus' back story, or having Prince Blueblood play the dominant among these four?

Holocron

Holocron #6 · Sep 13th, 2015 · · · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

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little of both

The Great Derpsby

The Great Derpsby #7 · Sep 13th, 2015 · · · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

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Joy!

Frankie2

Frankie2 #8 · Sep 18th, 2015 · · 1 · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

I have to say, I'm not a fan of impossibly large breast. If like the interesting pairing, but I'm not interested in reading any more. Sorry.

Holocron

Holocron #9 · Sep 18th, 2015 · 1 · · Enlarged Honeymoon ·

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It is not a problem, thank you for at least giving it a shot

lunargaurd4ever

lunargaurd4ever #10 · Oct 15th, 2015 · · · Great and Powerful Pounding ·

Hello lunar gaurd here, if you are interested in having an editor for your stories than you can contact me. And about this chapter...it was one of the better ones I read.