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Spider8ite


Fuck. Known one day as 'Mistress Spectrum'.

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Twilight invites Sunset to spend a night at her house. Late night, Twi decides to read a story to her friend, but it seems that Sun isn’t paying attention to the story. Why was she looking like that at Twilight?


Cover art by my Sunlight senpai the great baekgup! Taken with permission!
Edited (again) by Exterminate Regenerate! Give him chocolate!
Rinnaul's review about it, check it out!

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Comments ( 74 )

This was adorable. Also, YES ANOTHER TIGER'S CURSE FAN! Maybe?

Another wonderful fic by you! You've got me rivaled when it comes to writing! We absolutely have to do a collab some time! :twilightsmile: (P.S. I agree, Baekgup is best Sunlight artist.) :raritywink:

More Sunlight, yaaaaaay

This also have sex? xD

Not bad. Not bad at all.

Applejack.....punches trees as a human? Okay then....

5492019 Yes, a Kishan fan right here baby. And looks like I made my job here, because lesbian cuteness is my job.

5492340 Well... Headcannon? And cute Tavi in avatar.

5492114 :3 Thank you! We totally should do some day. Serious you think I rivaled you when it comes to this? :pinkiegasp: Okay then!

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5492005 :yay:

5492131 Me too! SO MUCH!!!!

5492206 No it don't. :unsuresweetie: Yay Sunlight cuteness! :raritystarry:

5492749 Me too, Kishan's a big ol' softie when it comes to Kelsey.

GAARGH, after reading so many fics, I now can't resist this ship! It's like chocolate to me, I can't say no!

I haven't read this yet, but it looks adorable. :rainbowkiss: I have high hopes. :heart:

5493154 Good to know! Sunlight is cute!

5493267 Oh baby, I already saw this art... And it's good! :trollestia:

5493077 You can't run from the Sunlight fever! :rainbowwild:

Commence read.

Cute.

A cute one-shot! Even showed me how I can do them if I ever get inspired for another one-shot, though I might stick to third person ones.

Nevertheless, cute one-shot.

5495384 I learned to stick with first person because I think it's more easy to do. But I'm glad you find it cute! :raritywink:

It's a cute story, but... well, don't take this the wrong way, but there is something kinda off about your language. Am I correct in assuming you're not a native English speaker? It reads like it was directly translated from some other language.

5495714 Yes, I'm not. And I'm trying to get better into this.

Yay! Happy ending! :twilightsmile:

5496194 I said Sunset would have one! :twilightsmile:

5496213

And I'm glad she did! She deserved it very much so. Those two seem like a perfect fit anyhow. :twilightsmile:

I liked that! It was sweet. I was expecting Twilights father to say something about Sunset's motorcycle though. In fact, I might write as troy about Sunset and Trixie now that you've got my brain working overtime.

What will you do next? I can't wait to see what you come up with next.:scootangel:

5497062 I would be happy to read! Well, I could. But I can't.

Very sweet. :twilightsmile:

I was surprised when I read what movie they were going to watch because I'm going to watch that in theaters tomorrow. :pinkiegasp:

Well, let’s begin. Should we watch a cartoon, a romantic movie, a…”
“How about Big Hero 6?”

*turns on megaphone* ATTENTION, THIS IS AN ADVERTISEMENT… … … THAT IS ALL!

5502441 Thank you! I need to watch it too, very soon!

D'awww! So cute and sweet :twilightsmile:

5495721 Well, it's not too bad. Just keep practicing, I'm sure you'll get better! ;)
I enjoyed this, it was cute. A bit rushed, but not to the point of breaking immersion or anything.

5504126 I'm happy you liked! Also: Doctor :heart:

I'm rather new to Sunlight fics, so I'm hoping that the "Sparky" and "Sunny" names aren't going to pop up too much, I'm not a fan. Also, no offense but the spelling and grammar issues are very distracting.

Other than that, keep at it!

5511608 "Sparky" is usually used to reference Human!Twilight. And Sunny is used fairly often :twilightsheepish:

“How about Big Hero 6?”

While I was reading this, I already felt that this is my fave and like :pinkiehappy:

5531750 Haha, it's an awesome movie.

*20 minutes of Fangirl screaming later*:rainbowkiss:
This is so... beautiful....this story made my night!!:pinkiehappy:
~ ClassyStrings

5623822 I'm happy you liked it! :ajsmug:

I love this kind of romantic stories, this was worth my time to read it, ty :twilightsmile:

5641360 I'm glad you liked it!

Awesome ! I really like it, so much cuteness *w*

So it's a little bit funny that I read that and today was the official anniversary of "She Looks So Perfect" the song ^_^

5671196 I didn't know today was the official anniversary, well, good to know. I'm happy you liked it! And your avatar is sooo cute I love that kind of fox! :rainbowkiss:

5671207 I love it too, that's why I have it as avatar ^w^
It's a fennec ;)

aCB

Both the dialog and narration felt stiff and unnatural. If I were to guess, I would say English is not the writer's first language. As for the plot, a little subtlety can go a long way.

Comment posted by Exterminate Regenerate deleted Dec 28th, 2015
Comment posted by Exterminate Regenerate deleted Dec 28th, 2015

5671207 cute as it is, I prefer your Avatar :P ^3^

That was so cute.

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