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Fuck. Known one day as 'Mistress Spectrum'.

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After the events of Rainbow Rocks, it seems Sunset Shimmer has everything she wants in life, but even her closest friends don't notice that she's missing something she really needs.

Luckily, Vinyl Scratch, superstar DJ and amateur shipper extraordinaire realizes that Sunset needs a special someone in her life, and knows a Great and Powerful girl who would be just perfect for her.


Rated T for smouldering looks and heavily implied sex.
Collab written by me and the amazing VitalSpark. Edited by him too :twilightsmile:
With a little review by Lethally Insane!
Cover art by lumineko
Also, check the word count.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 46 )

Yes.

Now to read.

Dammit!!!

How did I not notice until now that we picked the exact same title as Feather Flyer's awesome Sunlight x Sunlight story?!?!

I'm so sorry, Feather Flyer!!! :heart:

Miss Spectrum, I dunno… can we change title? Maybe we could keep You Can't Help Who You Love as the chapter title, and call the story something different?

Fantastic! Bravo! Great story! This ship deserves more stories. :pinkiehappy: It's no big deal that you chose the same title as my *cough* AMAZING *cough* story. This was great. It made my day!

Niiice.

A very sweet story! :pinkiehappy: This ship needs more love.

A lot more love.
:twilightsmile:

My only real thing is that it feels too fast paced. Not so much the physical sequence of events. From the disaster of a date to jazz club and realizing they have more in common than they though, to the bedroom - ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) - to the morning after, that makes sense within the story. It's more the speed at which they form the emotional connection. It seems more like something that would have benefited from a couple more chapters, rather than being a one-shot.

Still, take my fave and upvote anyway, for a sweet little shipping story that brightened my night.

Though lately Fluttershy has…

Friendship is Benefits indeed? :derpytongue2:

Another gem written by two incredible writers. Amazing story guys, I hope I can become half the writer you guys are today. :twilightsmile: Speaking of gems, you clods and your references. :rainbowlaugh:
All in all, 10/10
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So. You want to be 1/4 of a writer?

6243761 You know that's not what I meant random user.

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Well, if you want to be half of two writers ... :trollestia:

6243779 Yes yes. Smart play on words friend. Anyway, pleasure to make your acquaintance. :twilightsmile:

What else is there to say? This a is a great story featuring a ship I wanted to see of.:twilightsmile:

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Likewise. Always nice meeting someone who can appreciate a joke. :twilightsmile:

6243598 That part was mine of course, if MLP was SU Trixie would totally be Peridot. :raritywink:
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I can dig this ship.

I have to admit this wasn't what I was expecting. I came in expecting a secret clop fic but it turns out to be an even more amazing story with Sunset teaching a lesson on friendship and wins Trixie's heart in the most odd manner I've seen in an ship fic up to date. But this one is done very well, I dare say it's in my top five favorite ship fics as a whole. And I have a loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong list of them.

If you don't mind I'd like to give you my thoughts.

Characters: 9 - 10. Stays true to their personalities long enough to establish a common ground with one another, before realizing they have more in common than either thought. That and they both are going to murder Vinyl.

Story: 8.5 - 10. Not the most original idea but it's told in such a way that it feels like something new. And for a Equestria Girls fic it's possibly the best one-shot fic for Sunset I've personally seen.

Character Development: 9 - 10 Again the characters are true to their show/movie counterparts and is done well to the point where it obviously turns to the fics story plot. Though the changes in Sunset and Trixie are great in terms of personality (I personally think), it feels like it was a natural transition rather than forced like most stories do.

A well throughout story and done in a great manner with very few issues other than the occasional grammar error. Solid 9.25 - 10.

Well done friend!

Now, about that sequel? :trollestia:

6246256 Thank you very much for the mini review, we tried our best working on this for like 2/3 weeks and it's good to see you lke it that much :heart: About having a sequel: I don't think we will do one. This could've been easily a kind of longer story with more nine or ten chapters, but I knew it would be better to do a one shot (because Vital is working in a lot of stuff and my time is shorter than usual), but never say never right? :raritywink:

(Also, sorry for being late with the answer :moustache:)

6256493 Aww, no sequel? Fiiiiiiinnnne. I'll wait. Still it was a nice little story I love TrixieXSunset! And the Steven Universe refs. NO prob on the mini review I liked do it! You ever want one I'll gladly offer my services.

6256514 I'm happy other person than Vital or Hat Mann got the references, I love to do some for my other fandoms :3 Like I said to Hat, Trixie would totally be Peridot!
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6256653 She's definatly got the right mindset for it! Plus she worked on a "ROCK" farm! Get it! :rainbowlaugh:

If she was Peridot, Maud would soooooooooooooooo love her! And thanks for not being a lumpy clumpy clod! :trollestia:

6256668 OMG I didn't thought of it and I just think I laughed too much at this :derpytongue2: You sir, is a fine gentlemen I like you :trollestia: Someone needs to draw this

6256672 Ill get right on it!

Simply amazing story

6246256 Funny thing is, I could see Sunset and Trixie having this kind of relationship. "Friends with Benefits" , sort of way.

I have to admit this wasn't what I was expecting. I came in expecting a secret clop fic

I wouldn't have minded that actually.:raritywink:

6260934 I totally thought it would end that way too! Now I wish it did. :twilightoops:

Of course YOU would know about that wouldn't you? Mr. let Trixie get a free show with sunset and twilight?

Of course YOU would know about that wouldn't you? Mr. let Trixie get a free show with sunset and twilight?

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SunTrix! Yus! I wish for more X3

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You know, we accidentally named it the same thing as your story, and then we renamed it, but I've just noticed today that the new name is the same as Sari's SunLight story. It's like we can't help stealing people's story titles. :facehoof::rainbowlaugh:

6460064 Oh my goodness, Vital! Geeeeez!

Review of this story for your winning of Blood_rose_doll's contest.

Missing Piece by Miss Spectrum

Reviewed by Lethally Insane

Initial Reaction Before Reading:
Hhhhmmm….. a Trixie and Sunset story. Seems interesting enough. I have high hopes for this story.

Lethal’s Quotes With Notes:

“Trixie was friends with Vinyl”

Reactions: Hold up, what? That’s something I haven’t seen done before. While Vinyl is a background pony and therefore doesn’t have a personality in the show’s canon. I just don’t see her fanon personality liking Trixie.

“Sunset simply couldn’t understand how could Vinyl like her”

Reactions: My point exactly.

“Talk in third person one more time and I’m gonna pick up that candle and burn your hair with it,”

Reactions: Slow clapping. Thank you.

“It was barely ten minutes of awkward silence before two freshly cooked and delicious smelling pizzas arrived.”

Reactions: It’s not delivery, it’s Digiorno.

“I don’t know what she was thinking, setting me up with… with you”

Reactions: Neither do I,but I’m gonna keep reading anyway.

“It might be a surprise to anyone to find out that Sunset Shimmer liked jazz. It was a style of music many people didn’t pay too much attention to these days, preferring more modern genres. And it wasn’t at all like the music she played with the Rainbooms. But Sunset loved it — it was a soft and sweet sound, just like Sunset liked.”

Reactions: My inner metal head is screaming right now. Also I think you meant “, just what Sunset liked.”

‘We are the Crystal Gems...’

Reactions: Freakin’ love that show.

“I suppose you could say that Trixie has insomnia”

Reactions: Hey me too!

“How much did I drink last night”

Reactions: Not enough.

Analization:

Well, that happened. Overall, it was a well written story with an interesting shipping concept. I haven’t really encountered that ship in the fandom before, and this story presents it very well. If I had to be nitpicky, there are a few grammatical errors here and there, none of which are that obvious to the average reader. I liked the story, although I don’t really see the need for the sex tag(but that may just be me). I hope that you continue to write more stories of this level of quality in the future.

Signed,
Lethal

6474710 Thank you very much for the review, I'm happy you could find it a overall good written fanfic. We choose to have the SunTrix ship because: 1- People usually don't give it attention 2- It would actually work, even if their flaws and lastly me and Vital wanted to have a experience with that couple for a long time. Also thanks for poiting out that error, it's fixed now. Also:

“‘We are the Crystal Gems...’”

Reactions: Freakin’ love that show.

Ikr? :heart: And I'll make my best to keep doing more stories of this level. :twilightsmile:

6474755 Thank you for reading it. That show is the best. I used to live near where Rebecca Sugar got the inspiration for Beach City.

6474757 How cool! Also the review is important to me so of course I would read.

6474782 okay. I was impressed with its quality.

Pretty decent. There was some comma splicing, but nothing too distracting, and the sudden perspective changes were a tad jarring, but otherwise this was pretty good.

And, well... There was no point in showing the sex explicitly, but I rather wanted Sunset to keep the towel off a bit longer the morning afterward. Keep things a bit... spicy... y'know?

6996203 But of course Trixie likes SU, her fave is Peridot and she really indentifies with her (the episode she was talking about was 'Jailbreak' :rainbowkiss:) :trollestia::rainbowlaugh: That's why she always says 'CLOD' when ofending someone. Or is it? Who knows. She's just a silly hooman. :derpytongue2: Anywho, it's really amazing to see a great artist and writer like you liking this. I, even if I like new Sunny (and depressed horses, I know it's mean, but... things get more real with sadness on fics), like to put a little of old Sun here and there. :moustache: I'm so happy you like it, and I hope you can read 'She Took My Hand and Said' too :heart:

Omg this is adorable! Thanks for adding it to my Trixieshimmer group! :heart:

Word count: 6,969
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7172361 I'm happy that you like it! :rainbowkiss: The TrixieShimmer ship needs more love, it's such a great ship! The number of words was all Vital's idea, I swear :rainbowwild:

Omg! I have never thought of these two together, I mean I have, but I never felt such a connection with it like I do now. Great job!

This was an adorable ship piece. Thanks for writing.

Have a 👍 for such a great and powerfully cute story with two of the best characters in EG.

Sunset se sintió estúpida cuando pensó en eso, pero sabía que la gente se burlaría de ella si alguna vez supieran cuál era su principal problema. Pero no necesitaba ayuda, iba a estar bien. Como había dicho su madre en Equestria, “el amor llega cuando es el momento. Tienes que darle tiempo a ti ya ti mismo. Pero cuando lo haces, no puedes ayudar a quien amas”. Sunset todavía recordaba las palabras de su madre después de todos estos años. Su problema era esa cosita llamada amor.

Crazy little thing called love!

“La señora que reservó la mesa, una señorita Scratch, me dijo que mantuviera los ojos abiertos para ver a una chica de aspecto enojado con cabello rojo y amarillo que llegaría aproximadamente diez minutos tarde”.

Awesome hahaha

"¿Vives a la vuelta de la esquina?" preguntó Trixie, vertiendo la lata de Red Bull en su vodka.

U wanna die? You can't do that!

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