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Nyronus


Greetings World. You may call me Nyronus. I write stories, among other things. My hobbies include existential ennui, being Princess Luna, and Saving the World. Feel free to hit me up on Steam to chat!

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Princess Luna has been many things. Artist, scholar, warrior, queen, and villain. There are many things she's known and experienced, yet one night she's asked to do something novel even for her; give advice.

Idea by SoloBrony. Prereading by SoloBrony, Lord Destrustor, and Taggerung

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Her crush is Luna I bet.

This could definitely be continued.

5113061

Then why did she hug Luna, promise to tell her how it went, and then fly away? :rainbowhuh:

Anyway, I liked this story. It was very earnest, realistic, and touching. And your characterization of Luna was very, very good.

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Perhaps by having the maid come back and tell Luna all about how she was heartbreakingly rejected, and focusing on how their friendship grows and Luna adapts to a modern world.

Hey, this was pretty good!

Nice work, dude!

~Skeeter The Lurker

This was a lovely little vignette! Good characterization, decent pacing, and quite appropriate fumbling conversation between two ponies who are both slightly flustered for very different reasons :derpytongue2:

My only complaint about it is the paragraph grouping. The manner and order in which thoughts, dialogue, and actions appear or are put together was a bit jarring. Not enough to completely push me out of the story, but enough to be distracting.

As an aside, my heart gave a happy flutter at "a mare wishing to kiss the rose". What a beautiful phrase! I am likely to incorporate that into my personal lexicon, especially as it is *ahem* directly personally applicable :pinkiegasp:

Anyway, thanks for a great story, and have a wonderful day and more!

Light and laughter,
SongCoyote

Great story and amazing characterization, though personally it was a bit awkward to read it :P

Yes. This is awesome!

This story doesn't feel complete. At least not completely. Still it was a nice read. Edit: Goes to read the sequel.

Pretty good! Would've cleared up a few things here and there (like that one huge paragraph of dialogue) but definitely worth the read. One like for you!

Comment posted by Mad deleted Oct 16th, 2014
Mad

I can relate to Luna, I don't know shit about love :rainbowlaugh:

I dig it. :ajsmug:

EDIT: Posted this to the wrong page by accident. My apologies. ^^;

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Because she was too shy and awkward to tell her at that moment, possibly.

I loved it! One minor note:

So I just worry about telling people.” Replace people with ponies. :derpytongue2:

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